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No. Sibling relationships? Just no. I read this because I thought it would be about Big Mac helping Applejack get over a traumatic experience, helping her trust again, and finding out who raped her so all of bronykind can rain ritchious fury upon them. Sorry, send them to jail. I mean, that sounded like a great story, but you made THIS. I'm sorry, but I must downvote.
Actually, I can think of two others incest stories that were more erotic that being clop for the sake of clop. One being a Twi x Shining story, and one being a Celestia x Luna pairing. Both had some good sex to them, but done in such a way I do not like to refer to them as clop, but as more of erotica. You have joined those ranks in my opinion, and you have done very well.
You have done this, with including some deep subject matter, and have done so well, with a level of emotion that is right.
i don't mind for incest stories just this one lacked character. its good but could be better.
A lot of people are downvoting this because of what the pairing is. Honestly, a little incest isn't to bad, but i tend to prefer brotherXsister to fatherXdaughter or motherXson. what are my favorite types? The mane six in relationships with each other. Juggling them all is a hard feat, even for the best of writers because some pairings are to obvious so you take them, but that blocks off other pairings and its hard to do it without a big orgy. One time, i read a romance story, not clop or erotica, about a pairing i never thought possible, rarityXfluttershy, but the author made it work. Anyway, my point is people are judging this completely on the characters and not looking at the artwork of the relationship. I agree with you that incest shouldn't be done just for incests sake, and you, my friend, have created a beautifully constructed story, and not going into detail about the rape made it perfect. I see very few authors with this kind of talent, so a thumbs up and a brohoof for you. Excellent job!
1835221 I'm sorry that you down voted a story just because of the pairing. If you don't like the pairing then by all means comment on it but I don't think you should down vote which hurts the author and story's reputation. down vote for bad writing, not strange subjects.
1881695 It is not because it is a strange subject, It is because it is a WRONG subject. I'm sorry, I just find stuff like this appalling.
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Your religious ideas or sex phobias are of no consequence. If you don't like the subject matter of a story, don't click on it and don't read it. The warnings were there. You're just being a troll. Now get the fuck out.
I'm not defensive of the stories I write because I know that I write quality stuff. I'd have the same attitude and respond in the same way no matter who wrote the story. It's because of people like you that good sites start to die. No one wants to be around someone like you.
1885622 I'm sorry, I'm not trying to be a troll. I didn't see any warnings for it being a SIBLING sex relationship until I had already read it. I don't find it offensive because of any religious ideas or "sex phobias". I only find it to go against my morals and my morals alone. I respect that you may have morals different than mine, and nothing I say can change that. But my same morals tell me that if I have to "dislike" something, the maker of that has a right to know why it was disliked. I'm sorry for any offence I have caused. I you prefer, I will delete my comments without hesitation.
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There is absolutely nothing wrong with expressing your opinion in a comment. What's wrong is down-voting a story because of it's subject matter. I'd think "A sweet romance between Applejack and Big Mac" would have been a good enough clue to you about the subject matter. There are PLENTY of stories on here that I have moral problems with. But do I down-vote them? No. Of course not. I just don't read them. And if there aren't any warnings I might comment and request the author to add warnings. Or maybe PM them about it. But I don't down-vote stories even if they include diaper fetishes or other absolutely disgusting things. And rape. Rape is strongly against my morals. But I don't go around down-voting every rape or diaper story I see. I just stay away from them and respect other's opinions that like that sort of thing.
Honestly I have a moral problem with gay/lesbian stuff too. I know I have written stories like that in the past, but some pairings are just too irresistible for me not to write about them. Personally I only like stories with love as the main proponent. And somehow relationships that are difficult make the love seem stronger. Difficulties could include different species, incest, two enemies, and in some cases same-sex pairings. I'd say I find about 90% of the stuff on here offensive. But you should only down-vote something because the writing was bad, not because you dislike the subject matter. That's not to say of course that if the grammar is perfect and there aren't any spelling mistakes that it should get no down-votes either. If you don't like the story in general or how the author went about it, then down-voting is fine. But to read a story about a subject matter you clearly don't like then down-vote it just makes you out to be a troll.
1886903 Sorry. I read it because I misunderstood the warnings. I know it says "a sweet romance between Applejack and Big Mac" and that it has a Mature Sex tag, but when I saw where it says Applejack was raped, I thought that the mature and sex parts were only for that. It just took me a little off guard.
But yes, I see where you are coming from. I shouldn't have acted so rash, and I apologize for that.
That last paragraph is a bit much for me. I also sort of wish that the rapist got caught. Applejack is one of my faves, and I'd react as Big Macintosh, should my own little sister be raped. (I enjoy incest erotica, would never participate in it) But I feel that if you take out the "What do you think?" paragraph, it would have a much tighter ending.
Cute little story. Well-written, and I only spotted two mistakes (see below). I liked pretty much everything about it, especially Applejack's simple "No." when Big Mac asked her who raped her. It's just the perfect reaction from her. And the fact that they waited a week before A.J. wanted to try sex again is just a wonderful bit that shows off the level-headedness of their decision. It would indeed have been wrong for then to have sex right after the rape occurred, and I'm very glad it didn't happen that way. Plus there's an actual, honest-to-goodness romance here that's often lacking from mindless clop stories.
This story is utterly undeserving of the downvotes it has gotten, so have a meagre upvote of mine to hopefully balance it a bit.
Corrections:
"He started thinking of all the way’s he’d torture them" -> "ways"
"Then a forth." -> "fourth"
Sex has so many purposes, as many of them good as they are bad. The situation you created here was handled admirably even though there were some undesirable components in the moral stand point. I believe incest for reproduction to be morally wrong however, enjoyment and stress relief (some unintended but relevant alternate uses for sex) is more of a grey area that I find to be acceptable based a certain situations. This happened to meet the needs to be one of those exceptions. You really did set this up well and despite the shortness of the story, it showed some good understanding on how to get characters to show their feelings and point of view in a natural way. I also find the fact the big mac realized exactly what he was doing, the dangers and implications it entailed, and handled the situation fairly responsibly. I was bugged by the fact he didn't use some sort of contraceptive but I suppose it's just a story and nothing worth getting riled up over anyway.
Relationships can be pretty much anything and you really did create a unique one here, far out of the norm yet still loving and deep; and the fact that you did this in such a small story while out of "the zone" only complements your writing skills.
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Thank you very much for the praise. Thank you all. As for the contraceptives, most women are on the pill today and I assume it's somewhat the same in Ponyville. Otherwise, Big Mac would have been flipped out about the fact that she could have gotten pregnant by the rapist (not to mention by himself).
As for being out of "the zone," I'm only in the zone maybe a few times per year. And I'm in the zone for a few days. In those few days I normally write 250,000+ words and dozens of stories. I don't even shave or eat very much. But that's not the way a writer should be. So I've been experimenting lately with writing even when I don't feel I have the capability to. And I've gotten up to 60% of my typical writing quality while in "the zone." I'd say this is in the 50% range. Unfortunately I haven't written a pony story yet while I've been in "the zone" but I can't wait to do so. I have a few very difficult pony stories to write the next time around that I know I have about 0% chance of making them decent while not n "the zone."
I have probably half a dozen pony stories I've written but haven't published because I'm just appalled at their quality or they're not finished (and I have no intention of finishing them), but I should consider publishing them anyway. Whenever I do this people seem to like my work anyways. Maybe I'm just too critical of my own work. But I debated even publishing this one.
I was really worried that this was going to go too fast from rape to love sex as a quick clop. It was still a little too fast for me, but I feel you made a great decision by having big mac not do it on that first night, if that happened, I probably would have just closed the story there. Also very glad that it's Applejack that suggested it and not Big Mac, that would have been another sign of a shitty quickclop. But no, you did a pretty good job with this, probably would have been even better if it was expanded to two or three chapters.
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It is very easy to over-analyze your own work. I can also relate to that "once every cosmic alignment" writing mood. I've got only one, maybe two one shots done mostly because I get stuck in "polishing mode" and I can't just stop trying to word things better and explain things more clearly while adding in several subplots and stuff. I see every flaw and it drives me crazy! The only time I've actually made good headway is when my "who cares", "creative", and "focused writing" mood intersect (quite literally drawing parallels from cosmic alignments). It comes up with some awesome story fragments though and I think I'd make a good editor if I ever got someone to work with. (Never got around to figuring out how to do that.)
It's nice that your able to push through that mental block and still put out some decent stories. The epic tales might need more but some basic writing only takes a little skill and a bit of common sense.
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The pacing of the story was quite quick. Rather than expand on the mundane activities throughout the day and go into detail and actually explain why she wanted to have sex with him, I decided to just come out and say it and state a specific passage of time. It probably would have been better of I explained how broken she was inside and how she wanted to "make things right" in a way by having sex with him. But I'm not usually into that psychology thing. My knowledge of psychology is limited at best. I could try to put myself in her shoes in a way, but that would be almost impossible as I'm not a woman and I don't think I could truly imagine and understand the psychological side-effects of being raped. I have significant problems with social interaction and understanding emotions to begin with. I've gotten by through careful observation and emulation of typical human behavior. I can impress some of my interpretations into my characters, but I'm incapable of experiencing most of the emotions I write about. It makes this type of writing particularly challenging for me (and I do enjoy a challenge).
unbelievable and the rape part was unintentionally hilarious. Still I enjoyed this but probably for reasons you didn't intend.
That was really romantic, Big Mac deeply cares for Applejack.
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This is obviously either a spammer or a bot. I'll say it again. THERE ARE NO ACTUAL RAPE SCENES! I don't get off to stuff like that. If you do, look elsewhere. I don't want to turn people off to this story because they think they have to read descriptions of poor Applejack getting raped.
2149477 I should have explained myself better, I was unable to find the drama in this story (caused by the rape) believable, in fact I found it rather funny almost like a parody of rape in fiction.
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But Applejack didn't date. She didn't have sex. She took contraceptives?
CELESTIA DAMN THIS ABRUPT SHORTNESS! I don't like how quickly this story ends! I WANT TO KNOW MORE!
I know that this story was about incest and I may get a lot of flank for this comment, but I thought that this was a beautiful story. I do not condone incest, but I do wish to point out the reasons why I enjoyed this story.
For one thing, it showed Applejack in a more sensitive light. I personally love these kind of stories, where we see Applejack as a weaker, more sensitive character. In a way, she still felt like Applejack too. It's how I would picture her dealing with something like this.
Reason number two was Big Macintosh's character. He is a great big brother in this story, and I feel like he handled the situation the best way he could. Did he do the right thing morally? I don't know. He did have sex with his sister, and that's a taboo, but she was at her most sensitive, and her first time was horrible. She doesn't have any male friends to give her the real experience. All she has is her older brother, and sometimes an older brother has to do things they aren't proud of to help their younger siblings.
Which brings me to the final thing about this story I loved. How realistic the situation was (to me at least). First of all, I felt so bad for Applejack, who was torn to pieces after being raped. Honestly though, that's how it would play out. With that being her first time combined with already feeling undesirable, her initial thoughts after being raped would be "this is all I'm good for".
As for Big Macintosh, I feel like his thoughts were also realistic. He's loves his sister a little TOO much, and he knows it. On one hoof it makes him sick to his stomach knowing that he actually likes being so close to his sister, but on the other hoof he can't help himself. He knows that he's never going to find a mare as beautiful as Applejack, and he's resigned to his fate. Knowing that his sister wants HIM just as badly now only makes him feel a combination of joy and horror. Yes, this is all he's ever wanted, but at the same time that's his little sister! He probably remembers taking care of her when she was a baby, feeding her, or changing her diapers. That's gotta be disturbing for him.
So yeah, I know that this comment is going to get downvoted like crazy, but I'm going to just say it. I loved this story, and I partially support this shipping.
Dat incest doh
Awww. I wish Mac and AJ weren't siblings in the show. I'd love to see romance between them. They're just the perfect couple. In fanfiction, the incest is fine, but they can't put that in the show.
6669413 Well Lauren Faust actually originally planned for Big Mac to be named Big , Sweet Apple Achers to be Big Apple Aceres and Big Apple to be Applejack's husband with Apple Bloom to be their daughter, which would have made Applejack the unofficial mother-firgure of the rest of the mane6 and the CMC... But Hasbro could not get premisson to use the term Big Apple and they wanted the members of the Mane6 and CMC to be about the same ages...so DHX made changes
Eu gostei da historia da para ver e sentir o amor do Big mac pela Applejack eo que ele sentia por ela é incrivel o romance o amor ea tristeza foi o que deichol a historia fantastica Moonami
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Mind translating? LOL.