This is the end result of a night out with friends. Waking up in a cartoon landscape turned into a talking horse and being mocked by said friend. Yep, my life is just dandy. Follow Soral, as an slightly antisocial foal as he deals with life in equestria. He will make friends, enemies, and maybe make Twilight sware. Oh, and his friend Suzy is there too, she's a pervert.
This is my first real self insert into anything. This will mostly be delivered from my point of view while slightly shifting over to others. The first chapter is just an opening. I am used to writing for FFN so there will be little notes inside of it every now and then. Don't whine at me to change the format cause you will just be ignored.
Chapters (13)
Soral's motivation at the time in YouTube form ( comedy version )
be careful what you wish for.
after thinking of said possibilities, Soral wanted to do this.
but his headache just wanted Soral to
intersting story..... will continue to watch how this goes.
...proceed
Wow, 2 dislikes. No explanation either. If you don't leave a comment how am I to know what you disliked?
I like it. :) May we have another?
A rather intriguing tale my friend. Keep it up please. Oh and I tip my imaginary hat to you good sir/ ma'am.
I wish to read more of dis
just reread this chapter and i realised you have repeated the opening paragraph later on just after twilight decides to go to Rarity's
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Thanks for that. Copy and pasting into google docs does not always work properly.
Good. Good. Very good.
This is one of the few stories I liked, you did good, you should feel good
Ahaha, the dreaded stare XD
Not a bad fic, can't wait for more.
pokes author in hopes of getting new chapters
What the hell? I just woke up under my bed
6520268 Head co,ds man, they make you do wierd shit.
I really started to enjoy this story then it stopped
(see you made Fluttershy cry since this story never finished).
It was rough at the start but it sure improved as it went on. Only complaint would be that there were not enough interactions with his friend that came with him to Equestria.
I hope some day you find the drive to write more of this story.
Is this going to be continued at some point I would love to know because this is a very nice story
Everypony probably thinks that Suzy got knocked up while drunk and doesn't know who the father is.
Apple Bloom is just like her sister. Never says no to free labor.
Oh, there's no ursa attack. That still would have happened because nopony stopped Snips and Snails from waking it up.
You own Suzy? As in the character or the person they're based off? Hopefully just the character.
So I guess this will be a running joke, it is funny.
Good explanation.
Changelings can (probably?) sense emotions, that's what this ability makes me think of.
Interesting so far. Story is going well. I like how you handled putting him as Twilight's student. I look forward to seeing her reaction to unicorns who do not understand magic. I don't her reaction to Soral to be much since he's a foal and it is expected that a foal might not have learnt their magic properly at their age. However, having no knowledge of magic theory might catch her attention more. I especially look forward to reading about Twilight's reaction to Suzy, since Suzy is an adult or near-adult unicorn who won't be able to use magic or know magic theory.
Although I'm not sure what you mean by the formatting thing. I know that some formatting such as bold,italics,underlining does carry over with copy/paste and some doesn't such as textSize and alignment. fimFiction uses code in the text for formatting. I would recommend trying to learn some those commands so that you can type them into the document directly.
hi
done with [center ] hi [/ center] without those spaces.
First person?
I like your insight and thoughtfulness of characters in your story. It is good so far. Although I can say that Suzy feels under-utilised. We don't hear much from her, she's a human too so I'd expect her to slip up at least at some point. It's also not explained where exactly she is staying or her status in learning magic.
The bridge between a boat and the docks? Never heard it uses in this context, but the first thing I thought of when reading this was that an airship had landed in the market square or wherever they were.
funny
I found everything from this point confusing.