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Prane


Aspiring writer, self-proclaimed hardcore gamer, adept of human psychology. Does not consider excessive pride for a vice.

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Everypony knows that Rarity did not participate in the last Nightmare Night's festivities in Ponyville.
What was she doing, then? Did she work on somepony's costume? Maybe she needed some time just for herself? Or perhaps she was partying, after all?
The truth is, she was strolling through the Everfree Forest.
Alone.

Live reading here, courtesy of The Living Library Player Society!

Note: this story was written for EQD Nightmare Night 2012 October FanFiction Contest, link.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 16 )

Well she definitely made it back in time, considering she shows up in later episodes. Very interesting concept though. Kind of a shame that part about Luna getting a dress was cut out...or was I thinking of something else?

This story is amazing! Really eerie.

Yes well we do know she made it like EQ said. But I think Rarity isn't going to want to go near the castle ever again! And I can answer his question about the dress, the episode Luna Eclipsed original had a scene where Twilight takes Luna to Rarity. Rarity dresses Luna up in a ridiculously pink dress, even drying Luna pink, but Luna decides it's just not her and tears it off, cue Pinkie Pie and the children arriving as Luna has the last bit of the dress in her mouth. "AHHH! Nightmare Moon's eaten a princess!"

although such phenomenon is a rarity.

:trollestia:

I see what you did there.

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When it comes to 'OMG wai Rarity izn't in dat epiode!?' I like to think that she actually is, but wearing a Scarf of Invisibilty, as shown in that Friendship is Witchcraft episode. :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! Glad you like it! :twilightsmile:

Very well done! The eeiry tone mixed with the feel of action and mystery makes this story a superb and enjoyable read. I also loved the way you treated Rarity as a character. She had style with intelligence and wit, instead of over dramatization and subtle snobbery. You treat her with respect. Not many authors seem to get that about her. :raritywink:

I just reread this story to refresh my memory of what happened. It gave me chiiiiills. You did very well in making me feel nervous for Rarity the whole time. Eerie, clever, and gripping. I kinda want more of these kinds of stories from you. Um, if you don't mind. :twilightblush: So what are you working on now? :duck: hmm?

you know, I bet you could create a story that could even rival Penstroke's fantastic work. Just add a lot more detail and a bigger plot line and you're good to go. But that's my opinion. But would you be up for something like that? :rainbowderp:

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I love reading comments (who doesn't, duh) - sometimes they are hard to take, but eventually help to improve my writing, and sometimes they just make me feel warm and fuzzy inside! Thank you very much for these kind words! :pinkiehappy:
At first I wasn't sure if the story was sufficiently dark, but since I was aiming for the 'chills', I consider it a success; and, who knows? Maybe I'll write some more [dark]-tagged stories? Maybe not as big as Penstroke's you mentioned (by the way, stahp it, you make me blush! :twilightsheepish: ), but I'll definitely think about it.
And, last but not least, you ask what I'm working on now - some Trixie stuff :trixieshiftright:, which started with this. Also, Batman. :raritywink:

What I really loved about this story was the atmosphere and the use of the ghost, it added to the very haunting atmosphere as well as make it tense. I also love the way that the story kept a good pace till the end, making me want to see more and listen to more (heard this on Living Library players)

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Thank you, I appreciate it! Go ghosts!

Normally, I'd feel that stories like this would require the alternate universe tag, but the ending is just vague enough for me to comfortably believe that things DO turn out all right for Rarity.

And while you did say that, due to time constraints, any extra plot details in the majority of your stories would remain that way, I'd have still loved for there to be a second chapter where Rarity tells the others about what happened.
But since that won't be happening, the story as is is pretty good.

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I'm afraid adding more to it would only lessen the impact of the ending, so even if I had all the time in the world for writing, I'd still leave this one ambiguous... :trixieshiftright:

Just the right among nt of apple lU and mystery and that ending oh boy dhivers up my spine

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Heh, this is such an old story, I'm surprised you've unearthed it. Glad to hear you liked it!

7583543 eh that the similar box for you benga all kind of hidn to life

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