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Lady Umbra
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I will in fact, stay turned.
Is it me or I'm in the only one that heard Alastor voice in my mind while reading the title?
You have this birds attention
Oh this will be fun.
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For the next 4 years.
This will be interesting. Oh, and heard that the original Alastor died as not only a radio show host, but also secretly a serial killer. Only to be ironically killed due to being mistaken as a deer, thus the horns. Him having turned into a wendigo demon. Though, I do not know how accurate that is.
First time ive ever seen someone steal from the merchant. Cant wait for more.
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Wait do I know you?
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Well actually my first fic on this site, Kung-Fu Equestria. The character had stolen from the merchant and was turned into Tai Lungs. Even possessed him turning him evil.
You made read a displaced story for the full chapter, I haven't read a displaced story in a long time.
Sweet Alistor found his Niffty. Wonder who his Husker is gonna be? Zephyr Breeze maybe?
You keep switching between Charlie 'her' and 'he'. Is there a reason for this?
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there was no reason to it. it just happens from time to time and usually I fix it before I upload it. Like when I look at the name Charlie...i typically think of a girls name but this is a male character. so there were times where I wrote Her instead of Him. thanks for pointing that out I have fixed it
Wonder what his goal is? 🤔 I'm guessing he'll get bored after awhile like in hazbin hotel and just leave, then when something interesting happens he'll return.
Very enjoyable read though
As someone who's read their fair share of displaced stories, and even revisits them occasionally, I'll admit I'm pleasantly intrigued, and a tad disappointed. The grammar and wording is stellar, which already puts you quite a few steps past a good chunk of the others (give or take a few missed periods here and there, which are easily excused.)
However, the only part that i have complaints is something I hope will be addressed later on; Despite referring to the protagonist by his name of Charlie, everything he's done has been strictly Alastor. It's early, so again, I assume this will be addressed, and I'll be watching either way as you've still done an excellent job to lead in!
I just want to know something; Even if Charlie does somehow have the large money and bought the cane honestly, instead of stealing it from the Merchant/"Blitzo".
Would he still be "punished" and corrupted to turning into the Radio Demon anyways, and start killing innocent ponies?
In this hypothetical alternate scenario; Would he still be himself and remember his name, if he didn't steal it in the first place, and somehow got the money to buy it?
Or is the Merchant/"Blitzo" still a dick and did it to him anyways, despite getting the money?
Really enjoying this story, eagerly awaiting for the next chapter.
Well to be fair, Discord doesn't brutally kill.
Yeah, I can clearly see the filly's parents in the afterlife utterly be horrified on the fate worse than death to the now named; "Niffty" by Alastor.
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Well, I hate to say it, cuz this will criticize the author's direction. But you're definitely right on the money here with the Displaced/Cosplay MC in here being a literal copy-and-paste Alastor with no originality.
I am also a fellow MLP Displaced "Lover". But even I know that the stories original concepts on many displayed stories, has it's fair share of fatal flaws and needs some criticism.
I mean, the over cliche/trope of erasing the main human character's own memories of his/her own life on earth, forgetting all their family/friends/lovers/children, and even the fore-knowledge of the MLP show and other fictional media. And forcefully give him/her the fictional characters own backstory that their cosplaying as?
What's the point of using Displaced's when you're doing the over cliche "erasing memories of old life on Earth" that gives them no unique differentiation from the original fictional characters that their cosplaying as.
WHEN you can easily just bring in the REAL fictional characters ( Like Hazbin Hotel/Helluva Boss for example ) onto Equestria in the first place!?
Just put in the real Alastor, and I don't see any much difference?
Because, doing this almost feels like total plagiarism and turning them into literal imposters out of the fictional characters that you cosplaying as, if you ask me?
Nice, very nice yes I like that
Heart Lungs Liver Nerves
Heart Lungs Liver Nerves
Heart Lungs Liver Nerves
Good stuff BTW
One; Does Celestia have some slight regret that she just literally hurt one of her own "little ponies"!? A filly at that? Sure, Niffty attacked Luna and is now a psychotic minion for Alastor.
But still, she was once a innocent filly now being corrupted to be a blood thirsty minion.
Does Celestia and even Luna still feel slight regret of what happened to the filly in the end? Or for Celestia after what she did to Niffty's eye?
And Two; Displaced Alastor really still does still have a "heart", only for his minion/"friend" that is.
Stupid princesses, this is the Radio Demon that you're dealing with. It can NEVER be that easy to just "kill" him!?
And the fact that it costed Celestia a literal arm! Damn! Will happily alternate the MLP timeline by having Celestia lose a arm, showing every pony citizen in Equestria that she ISN'T the "immoral, and indestructible sun goddess" that they thought.
Maybe this will finally humble them to the harsh reality, and also make them more scared of the Radio Demon.
Even Gods can bleed.
Although, unless Alicorns somehow have a secret high healing spell, or regeneration ability BS Deus Ex Machina, or even somehow make a prosthetic despite being in medieval times and fantasy setting? Then, Celestia is a permanent one-arm princess now. Sucks for her.
Geez Niffty.
Welp, guess this is how she became a "cyclops" now.
This is awesome! I'll definitely be keeping my eye on this story.
I have an idea for you if you're interested. Have Niffty be a relative of Applejack that she was very fond of. Then of course, when AJ realizes who she is. Have her try (and fail miserably) to make Niffty remember who she was.
Lol... his name is Charlie, like the Princess
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That would be a good idea if we were not in the era were Nightmare Moon appears
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Yeah that little bit of irony was not lost on me
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Oops, I missed that part.
One quick question, when Luna is transformed into Nightmare Moon. Will she consider Alastor an ally or a rival?
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Damn what a disarming situation. Gotta hand it to Alastor. His Bite does match his bark.
Ah, madness can we have more?
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this is a really good story so far cant wait to see where this goes.
Thanks for another awesome chapter!
Let's see if Celestia is still a short tempered tyrant in the present or if a thousand years of guilt eating at her has mellowed her a bit.
Whether Twilight will make a deal!
An awesome chapter! Love that Alistor is the source of Lunas Nightmare form. Wonder if the elements will be able to purge it in a thousand years?
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A thousand years can really change a person. Though her hatred of Al is likely to burn even hotter as the years pass.
Sweet, though I do wonder why our resident radio demon waited until modern equestria to make a move
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Why does any one do anything?
Sheer absolute boredom
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Managed to start reading this.
Hopefully can catch up quick.
Uh, ok, that was rather sudden. Alastar caused this mess that lead Celestia down this path, nd Luna accepted his deal without hesitation to be empowered, so i'll just pass this up as either her desperation overshadowed her judgement, or the radio demon's voice has alot of charm / a powerful aura to influence desires.
...I think you might want to correct the pronouns a bit here... "found herself completely enthralled"
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Nice reference.
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Well...he has very high charisma stats and the timing was like rolling a nat 20...in dnd terms.
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Thanks for pointing that out
EXTINCTION FINDS THIS REALMS CHANGELING ORIGIN…INTRIGUING………EXTINCTION WAITS FOR MORE!!!
Wonder how long before Dawnbreaker shows up? Anyway fantastic chapter. And honestly the transformation made with Alastor is better than their standard one. Since they dont need just Love to feed on.
Ah....so this is what you meant by "going back"...tbh this is the first time I have seen an author do this other than for making edit chapters that change the timeline to a different way from where the original was heading.
So Alastor is why the changelings are suffering.
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Pretty much