Salutations everyone. Step right up and tune in, dear listeners, for a tale of chaos and charisma at the grand spectacle. Don't touch that dial, for this is a story that promises to captivate your soul and haunt your very essence!
Wonder what his goal is? 🤔 I'm guessing he'll get bored after awhile like in hazbin hotel and just leave, then when something interesting happens he'll return.
As someone who's read their fair share of displaced stories, and even revisits them occasionally, I'll admit I'm pleasantly intrigued, and a tad disappointed. The grammar and wording is stellar, which already puts you quite a few steps past a good chunk of the others (give or take a few missed periods here and there, which are easily excused.)
However, the only part that i have complaints is something I hope will be addressed later on; Despite referring to the protagonist by his name of Charlie, everything he's done has been strictly Alastor. It's early, so again, I assume this will be addressed, and I'll be watching either way as you've still done an excellent job to lead in!
"I've never seen anything like this before, Not Even Discord's reign instilled such fear" Princess Luna whispers as she adjusts her crown, her eyes narrowing in determination. "But we cannot let fear dictate our actions. We must find the Radio Demon and put an end to this nightmare."
Sweet Alistor found his Niffty. Wonder who his Husker is gonna be? Zephyr Breeze maybe?
Wonder what his goal is? 🤔 I'm guessing he'll get bored after awhile like in hazbin hotel and just leave, then when something interesting happens he'll return.
Very enjoyable read though
As someone who's read their fair share of displaced stories, and even revisits them occasionally, I'll admit I'm pleasantly intrigued, and a tad disappointed. The grammar and wording is stellar, which already puts you quite a few steps past a good chunk of the others (give or take a few missed periods here and there, which are easily excused.)
However, the only part that i have complaints is something I hope will be addressed later on; Despite referring to the protagonist by his name of Charlie, everything he's done has been strictly Alastor. It's early, so again, I assume this will be addressed, and I'll be watching either way as you've still done an excellent job to lead in!
Well to be fair, Discord doesn't brutally kill.
Yeah, I can clearly see the filly's parents in the afterlife utterly be horrified on the fate worse than death to the now named; "Niffty" by Alastor.