Salutations everyone. Step right up and tune in, dear listeners, for a tale of chaos and charisma at the grand spectacle. Don't touch that dial, for this is a story that promises to captivate your soul and haunt your very essence!
Well, I hate to say it, cuz this will criticize the author's direction. But you're definitely right on the money here with the Displaced/Cosplay MC in here being a literal copy-and-paste Alastor with no originality.
Charlie's eyes narrowed as he took in the two mares before him, his curiosity piqued. He couldn't quite place it, but for some reason he felt like he knew these two, even though he couldn't remember how or where.
"Who might you two lovely ladies be?" he asked charmingly, trying to break the ice.
The taller of the two mares raised her chin proudly and spoke with an air of authority. "I am Princess Celestia, ruler of Equestria, and this is my sister Luna."
Charlie couldn't help but notice a look of disdain from the princess towards him. But when he turned to the younger mare, he saw a glint of something else in her eyes - contempt, perhaps? Charlie merely grinned in response as he bowed before the two regal sisters.
"It is a pleasure to be in the presence of such royalty," he said smoothly. "Allow me to introduce myself - I am..."
But suddenly, the Radio demon froze. He tried desperately to recall his name, but all he could hear in his mind was static. Panicking, he stumbled over his words before finally settling on a name that felt right.
"You...may call me Alastor," he said confidently, hoping that it was indeed his true name.
Princess Celestia narrowed her eyes at the figure before her. His introduction had been smooth, but there was something off about him. She could sense it deep within her soul.
"Nope, I feel fine, Charlie," Niffty replied through muffled giggles as she covered her mouth with her hands. "I found out I like the pain~"
"My name isn't Charlie," Alastor reminded her calmly. "I am Alastor."
"Oh, sorry about that," Niffty apologized sheepishly as she stood up. "I'm Starving, what are we going to eat?"
I am also a fellow MLP Displaced "Lover". But even I know that the stories original concepts on many displayed stories, has it's fair share of fatal flaws and needs some criticism.
I mean, the over cliche/trope of erasing the main human character's own memories of his/her own life on earth, forgetting all their family/friends/lovers/children, and even the fore-knowledge of the MLP show and other fictional media. And forcefully give him/her the fictional characters own backstory that their cosplaying as?
What's the point of using Displaced's when you're doing the over cliche "erasing memories of old life on Earth" that gives them no unique differentiation from the original fictional characters that their cosplaying as.
WHEN you can easily just bring in the REAL fictional characters ( Like Hazbin Hotel/Helluva Boss for example ) onto Equestria in the first place!?
Just put in the real Alastor, and I don't see any much difference?
Because, doing this almost feels like total plagiarism and turning them into literal imposters out of the fictional characters that you cosplaying as, if you ask me?
In an instant, Luna let out a blood-curdling scream and Celestia turned to see her sister being attacked by a small filly. Niffty, wielding a knife with deadly precision, had climbed onto the Alicorn's back and was relentlessly stabbing at her arm. The sisters' moment of triumph shattered as they fought desperately to protect each other from this unexpected threat.
"Luna!" Celestia's furious cry echoed through the streets as she unleashed a powerful blast of magic at Niffty.
Niffty's eyes widen when the blast hit her squarely in the left eye, causing her to scream and fly backwards into a nearby building.
Fueled by concern for her sister, Celestia rushed to Luna's side and erected a protective barrier around them before using her magic to heal Luna's wounds. But even as she worked to mend her sister's injuries, Celestia could hear the cruel laughter emanating from the building where Niffty now stood.
Niffty emerged from the wreckage, clenching her bleeding eye and cackling maniacally. As she sauntered towards the sisters with a twisted smile on her face, Celestia felt a chill run down her spine.
"Pain~" Niffty purred sadistically, reveling in the agony she had caused. "I like pain~"
Her jagged teeth glistened in the sunlight, evidence of the destruction that had been wrought upon her in return for her actions. But it was clear that Niffty was far from repentant; in fact, she seemed to relish in her own suffering as well as that of others. A shiver ran down Celestia's spine as she realized the true depth of Niffty's malice.
"You're going to regret doing that" Alastor said casing Celestia to turn to him and saw his eyes had turning into what looked like radio dials. "I'm going to give you a rather permanent reminder"
One; Does Celestia have some slight regret that she just literally hurt one of her own "little ponies"!? A filly at that? Sure, Niffty attacked Luna and is now a psychotic minion for Alastor.
But still, she was once a innocent filly now being corrupted to be a blood thirsty minion.
Does Celestia and even Luna still feel slight regret of what happened to the filly in the end? Or for Celestia after what she did to Niffty's eye?
And Two; Displaced Alastor really still does still have a "heart", only for his minion/"friend" that is.
The beam of light crashed into him like a tidal wave, its intensity overwhelming his tendrils and causing them to recoil. The blast blew Alastor's left antler off, the Radio Demon let out a low groan as he crashed to the ground. his eyes now void of any otherworldly glow, as blood dripped from his mouth.
"Is it..." Luna approached her sister with hesitant steps, her eyes trained on the unmoving form of the demon lying before them.
"I believe so" Celestia cautiously moved forward, her movements slow and deliberate as she reached out her hand towards the creature's mouth and nose. "It's not breathing"
A small smile of relief spread across Celestia's face as she turned to look at Luna. "It's dead," she announced, her voice shaking with emotion.
But before anyone could celebrate, Luna's scream pierced the air. "Tia, get away from it!" she yelled, her eyes wide with panic.
Before anyone could react, Celestia felt a sharp pain in her arm as her face was suddenly stained with her own blood and when she turned back to the demon, half her arm was bitten off at the joint. The princess let out a agonizing scream as she fell back, clutching her severed limb in shock and pain. Her vision clouded with rage as she watched the Radio Demon rise from the ground, his lips slick with her blood.
"No... no!" Celestia cried out, lifting her remaining arm towards the monster before putting every ounce of magic into one final attack. "DIE!"
Alastor merely laughed in response, sending one of his deadly tendrils towards the weakened princess. Just as it was about to strike, Luna intervened by erecting a magical barrier to protect her sister.
"We need to go, Tia," she warned urgently as she prepared a teleport spell.
But Celestia refused to retreat. "No!" she protested, pushing her sister away. "I must destroy it, it cannot be allowed to live!"
Alastor only grinned at this as he sent another tendril towards her. But before it could reach her, Luna grabbed hold of Celestia and the two disappeared in a blinding flash of light and a deafening crack, escaping from the deadly clutches of the Radio Demon.
As the Alicorn vanished, the powerful form of Alastor shrank back into his usual size. The Radio Demon hummed a tune to himself, his red eyes flickering with amusement as he walked over to Niffty.
Stupid princesses, this is the Radio Demon that you're dealing with. It can NEVER be that easy to just "kill" him!?
And the fact that it costed Celestia a literal arm! Damn! Will happily alternate the MLP timeline by having Celestia lose a arm, showing every pony citizen in Equestria that she ISN'T the "immoral, and indestructible sun goddess" that they thought.
Maybe this will finally humble them to the harsh reality, and also make them more scared of the Radio Demon.
Even Gods can bleed.
Although, unless Alicorns somehow have a secret high healing spell, or regeneration ability BS Deus Ex Machina, or even somehow make a prosthetic despite being in medieval times and fantasy setting? Then, Celestia is a permanent one-arm princess now. Sucks for her.
He watched as the little filly diligently pried the damaged eye from her skull, her laughter filling the air despite the pain she must have been feeling.
"Yay!" Niffty cheered triumphantly as she finally managed to remove the damaged eye. "Pain!"
"How are you feeling, my dear?" Alastor asked with genuine concern as he snapped his fingers. "You aren't too roughed up, I hope?"
A few bottles and a roll of bandages materialized in the radio Demon's hands. They began to emit a soft green glow as they levitated towards Niffty, gently treating her wounds.
"Nope, I feel fine, Charlie," Niffty replied through muffled giggles as she covered her mouth with her hands. "I found out I like the pain~"
Geez Niffty.
Welp, guess this is how she became a "cyclops" now.
This is awesome! I'll definitely be keeping my eye on this story.
I have an idea for you if you're interested. Have Niffty be a relative of Applejack that she was very fond of. Then of course, when AJ realizes who she is. Have her try (and fail miserably) to make Niffty remember who she was.
Really enjoying this story, eagerly awaiting for the next chapter.
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Well, I hate to say it, cuz this will criticize the author's direction. But you're definitely right on the money here with the Displaced/Cosplay MC in here being a literal copy-and-paste Alastor with no originality.
I am also a fellow MLP Displaced "Lover". But even I know that the stories original concepts on many displayed stories, has it's fair share of fatal flaws and needs some criticism.
I mean, the over cliche/trope of erasing the main human character's own memories of his/her own life on earth, forgetting all their family/friends/lovers/children, and even the fore-knowledge of the MLP show and other fictional media. And forcefully give him/her the fictional characters own backstory that their cosplaying as?
What's the point of using Displaced's when you're doing the over cliche "erasing memories of old life on Earth" that gives them no unique differentiation from the original fictional characters that their cosplaying as.
WHEN you can easily just bring in the REAL fictional characters ( Like Hazbin Hotel/Helluva Boss for example ) onto Equestria in the first place!?
Just put in the real Alastor, and I don't see any much difference?
Because, doing this almost feels like total plagiarism and turning them into literal imposters out of the fictional characters that you cosplaying as, if you ask me?
Nice, very nice yes I like that
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One; Does Celestia have some slight regret that she just literally hurt one of her own "little ponies"!? A filly at that? Sure, Niffty attacked Luna and is now a psychotic minion for Alastor.
But still, she was once a innocent filly now being corrupted to be a blood thirsty minion.
Does Celestia and even Luna still feel slight regret of what happened to the filly in the end? Or for Celestia after what she did to Niffty's eye?
And Two; Displaced Alastor really still does still have a "heart", only for his minion/"friend" that is.
Stupid princesses, this is the Radio Demon that you're dealing with. It can NEVER be that easy to just "kill" him!?
And the fact that it costed Celestia a literal arm! Damn! Will happily alternate the MLP timeline by having Celestia lose a arm, showing every pony citizen in Equestria that she ISN'T the "immoral, and indestructible sun goddess" that they thought.
Maybe this will finally humble them to the harsh reality, and also make them more scared of the Radio Demon.
Even Gods can bleed.
Although, unless Alicorns somehow have a secret high healing spell, or regeneration ability BS Deus Ex Machina, or even somehow make a prosthetic despite being in medieval times and fantasy setting? Then, Celestia is a permanent one-arm princess now. Sucks for her.
Geez Niffty.
Welp, guess this is how she became a "cyclops" now.
This is awesome! I'll definitely be keeping my eye on this story.
I have an idea for you if you're interested. Have Niffty be a relative of Applejack that she was very fond of. Then of course, when AJ realizes who she is. Have her try (and fail miserably) to make Niffty remember who she was.
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That would be a good idea if we were not in the era were Nightmare Moon appears
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Oops, I missed that part.
One quick question, when Luna is transformed into Nightmare Moon. Will she consider Alastor an ally or a rival?
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Damn what a disarming situation. Gotta hand it to Alastor. His Bite does match his bark.
Ah, madness can we have more?
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