Experiencing his final battle and choosing to succumb to his enemy combatants, Upper Rank One Kokushibo awakens in a place unknown to him. His memory between death and life was hazy, but he knows of only one person who could do something like this. And with that, he seeks the only thing that could potentially set him free from his past: redemption.
CAUTION: If you have not read the Demon Slayer manga and are only watching the anime, please read forward at your own risk as there will be spoilers from the manga not yet discussed in the anime.
Chapters (3)
I'm starting to like this already
I think you accidentally posted the chapter twice
Man, just a few paragraphs in, and I'm pretty impressed. What a way with words, both captivating and clear. Just a few paragraphs in, you start of strong with a great command of flow in leading the reader's eye, and clear drafting of descriptions in how it visually takes up space as an image. You've set a palpable and even cadance to the text as a medium that conveys the story, but another feather in your cap--so to speak--are the little nuances and details that accent and enrich the experience too. There's also a certain infusion of emotion and motivation present, which most other writers here pay little attention to or don't care for at all, which makes their writing almost like reading some bland high school essay instead of a story.
Demon Slayer was a fairly alright read IMO; a good shonen story, though I'm sure it has its share of flaws (which a lot of people have already moaned on about). While I'm tempted to say you're better off writing an original story with that level of skill of writing, what you've got here is pretty strong and compelling already. If you've got a solid plan/direction, keep going!
I'm up to half of the 1st chapter, and I'll finish when I get some sleep. But seriously, great start so far.
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That’s what I thought /.< thank you for letting me know! I thought the word count was off when I came to check on it. Super appreciated!
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You're welcome my dude
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I'm also wondering does this take place before luna's banishment? Or is this like a au style thing.
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Pretty sure it takes place before because the castle of the two sisters is still occupied.
2 chapters and nearly 21,000 words. And I am absolutely hooked. It is clear to me you have put a lot of thought and effort into this story so far. I am excited to see where you take this story.
very interesting so far your story impresses me
Cool! Next?
Hmm I wonder why he’s loosing the ability to see the transparent world?
Is something magical going on? Is he becoming more human/slowly losing his demon powers?
Will his slowly lose his other powers granted to him by his demon blood?
So many questions. And ho boy I do not want to know the fallout of Celestia basically stealing her sister’s champion.
Like sure strictly speaking from a utilitarian perspective it does make sense to move him to the champion of the day. Or at least the reasons Celestia gave in this chapter. Whether or not it was purely for the reasons stated or there are more nefarious motives behind her actions remains to be seen.
And take as much time as you need for these chapters. Don’t want to rush them out in sub par quality.
Anyway have a good day everyone.
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If that's the case I'm hopeful, he doesn't get a downgrade. Also I don't get the reason why he doesn't see into the transparent world anymore. Because he already had that as a human.
(He's already weaker with losing the transparent world because that allowed him to predict his enemy's movements.)
And i'm also not ready for the drama that comes with her stealing luna's champion.
Perhaps he's 'losing' the transparent world because he's no longer subconsciously considering the citizenry prey? Maybe it'd show up on enemies of state or something