A Hug and a Kiss

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Rainbow and Pinkie get into a contest over who can hold a hug the longest. Who will win? What might they discover as they make their way around town?

Cover done by IrradiatedPirateBooty.

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PseudoBob Delightus

PseudoBob Delightus #1 · Jul 16th, 2023 · 1 · ·

Rinkie Pash 😊
Painbow Die 😭

That was really, really cute. Thanks for writing it!

Silk Rose

Silk Rose #2 · Jul 16th, 2023 · 1 · ·

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Thank you so much!

Axolotl222

Axolotl222 #3 · Jul 17th, 2023 · 1 · ·

Cute, funny, and... strangely very in-character for everyone.

PonyPuffy 2012

PonyPuffy 2012 #4 · Jul 17th, 2023 · 1 · ·

That was so sweet! Great job writing this story!

NaviNautical

NaviNautical #5 · Jul 17th, 2023 · 3 · ·

Well, it was sweet and in-character, and I think the idea is adorable and funny, perfect for these two! But I’m not sure you executed it the way you wanted to. The writing felt a little forced, and a tad simple, like “I’ve hugged Pinkie for an hour and shes cute. Hugged for two hours and I wanna date.”

But overall, it was good! A cute and great idea, just needs refinement! Keep it up!

Silk Rose

Silk Rose #6 · Jul 17th, 2023 · 2 · ·

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Thank you for the feedback, I will keep it in mind!

6-D Pegasus

6-D Pegasus #7 · Jul 17th, 2023 · 1 · ·

This was so wonderfully written and it was adorable seeing the gradual shift in Rainbow's thoughts from start to finish. Definitely worked this premise best from her perspective. Awesome job writing this!

Dmise