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Fluttershy and Rarity think about each other in ways they only tell their diaries, until one day.

Cover done by Tiki Bat: FIMFiction, Twitter.

Entry into A Thousand Words Contest II.

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Short, sweet and cute. Loved this story! :twilightsmile:

I really liked this one a lot, would love to see a sequel sometime! Keep up the great work!

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Thank you!
Sequel is planned!
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I think I have a crush on Rarity. Today, at our weekly spa trip, I couldn't stop looking at her. I kept thinking about her, how beautiful she looks, how nice she is, how much I loved the hug she gave me.

extremely relatable

She was a lot more physical today, she had to have given me a dozen hugs over the day.

that is, indeed, a lot of hugs!

We walked around town before coming back home. She helped me work on a few dresses, she really wanted to help. If I didn't know any better, I'd say she might have a crush on me.

ehehe

She looked really cute in the hat, I wanted to tell her she looked pretty, but I didn't have the courage…

aww poor Fluttershy being too shy

Twilight did notice Fluttershy acting different, and asked me about it. I didn't know what to say. We stayed there a while, then, Twilight asked if Fluttershy had a crush on me. It surprised me and made me re-evaluate my relationship with Fluttershy.

i mean if Twilight of all ponies is noticing this, it must be very obvious!

We didn't do much today of any substance, mostly just talking, walking around town, and we continued the newfound tradition of hugging a dozen times. I'm not complaining, she gives the best hugs, but don't tell Pinkie. I've absolutely loved hanging out with her.

hugs do seem to feature quite prominently in this pony courtship

After that, she admitted that she was starting to develop feelings for me! Isn't that crazy? We talked for a long time after that; she said she really enjoyed my hugs. That made me blush really hard. I'm excited to be dating my best friend. I can't wait for our spa day tomorrow.

aww, glad it worked out for her! RariShy is such an adorable ship, and the world could always use more of it. thank you for writing!

When Twilight has to tell Rarity that there may be romance afoot, I feel like something’s gone awry with the characterization.

An epistolary story is a good way to compress the word count, and I really like the “D” theme in the minichapters, but this still felt less like a romance and more like a parasite hijacked Fluttershy and wants to spread to fashionistas. It’s the sudden swerve that really kills it for me. If this had been slowly building since before the story began and Fluttershy could only now admit even it to her own diary, it would’ve felt a lot more organic. (And again, Twilight “Social Awareness of a Bucket of Paint” Sparkle should not have to tell Rarity that somepony is in love with her.)

In all, a noble effort, but the “I suddenly have deeper feelings for this lifelong friend” approach to shipping never rings true for me. Still, thank you for the entry.

This is really short and sweet. I think Rarity didn't realise Fluttershy liked her bc she subconsciously didn't think she'd have a chance. They are honestly such a perfect pairing. I'll keep an eye out to see what you do in the future :twilightsmile:

To me diaries have always felt even more personal than seeing a characters own thoughts in a story, so seeing a story told entirely through diary entries is very interesting! Other than grammar/sentence structure being a little iffy in places, I really loved this story! Looking forward to getting to the sequel!

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