Princess Celestia and Princess Luna have been watching over Equestria for many centuries. They've seen cities rise and fall, empires grow and collapse. They've guided their subjects through the ages better than anypony could hope for.
So why, then, do they feel so alone at the end of time?
Written for the A Thousand Words Contest II, in the 'Drama' category.
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Melancholic, yet still somewhat positive. I wonder what led Equestria to be the way it is now, but I suppose time marches on in spite of everything.
Interesting and engaging. Well done.
A rather melancholic and understated piece that I've started to associate with your writing style. I rather liked it, this is a fine addition to the contest. As much as I enjoy gimmicks and experimentation, I also have a soft spot for more traditional works such as this one. The premise alone is pretty interesting, the ambiguity of the situation lends itself quite well to both the sadness and mystery of what came before. I'm not really that interested in how we got here as much as the moment both mares are currently living in. The motif with the statues works really well to sell the main theme, as it leans into the pains the immortals undertake to give extra meaning to those whose lives are lost. I really like how you continue to bring back Celestia and Luna's deep love for their subjects in how they remember their names and how tragic it is that they forgot about some of their traits.
There are other symbols related to time I quite enjoyed, such as the tea going cold, the idea that trimming down the gardens is pointless because "in a few decades" the weeds will grow back, the chess match going on forever... All these images of permanence and realization that the best times are long behind us now. It is a strong conveyance, very appropriate for the limited word-count. Having written one entry for the contest myself I feel capable of recognizing the effort that goes into that, so I can safely assure that there is nothing to scoff at here; your effort paid off. Good job, I really liked this one.
Oh, very nice. Hits the spot. Thanks for this work
Easy upvote as with all your stories, Anon. As the others said the way you subtly mention great spans of time passing between the actions they take is excellent. The fic also ends at just the right moment, so many open questions, melancholy, and yet at the end of the day the sisters aren't giving up. They might call themselves vain and all, but they regardless push on to preserve at least a little of what remains of the world.
and it can only get worse eventually the sun will die and if their unlucky they remain surviving in a empty void last living thing in a dead universe, perhaps they end it bring about their own destruction to usher in a new big bang and start a new universe
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What you said is certainly one way things could go, but not the only one, I hope. They're doing the best they can considering the circumstances, and if there's any resource they have in abundance, it's time.
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And thank you for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Thanks! I wanted to write something very focused for the contest, so it's good to see that, despite the limited word count, the final result conveys the themes I wished to include. I'm glad you liked those characterizations of Celestia and Luna, too. I'll try to keep my fics more varied in the future, but I doubt I'll be straying too far from how I've portrayed these two thus far.
That's definitely a valid interpretation of what was going on in their conversation, but something I hoped to hint at was that they're just not talking about Bon Bon there. My intention was to imply that Celestia's thoughts wandered off to think about Twilight (and the rest of the Mane 6), which is why Luna calls her out on sculpting a different pony. Judging by her reaction, perhaps this was not the first time it happened.
It gets only the briefest mention in the story and some italics for emphasis, which in hindsight was probably a bit too subtle on my part.
there are a lot of things I could talk about but I'll settle for: I hope this wins
aww, the things they must hold on to!
aww glad Amethyst Star is in this!
augh what a beautiful tribute to Amethyst Star
aww, love that Luna remembers Bon Bon this way
ooh great line to end it on. there’s something so much more poignant about the immortals filling their eternal days with memorializing the mortal ponies that they left behind so very long ago. and so very touching how much meaning
wethey give to the Princesses. great work with this one, thank you for writing!A haunting little portrait of desolation. Many questions hang in the air, but the sisters aren’t going to answer them. They know all too well. Great work throughout, especially Celestia’s Freudian slip of the chisel. Thank you for it, and congrats on the judge prize.
Hello! I read all the stories from this contest that won recognition, so have a review. More question than answers and perhaps occasionally too subtle, but it did hang in the memory. That means an upvote!
SAD...MELACHOLIC....NOSTALGIC.....WELL-DONE !!!!!!!