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I keep all of my Displaced stories on this account.
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Sweet, here comes a new displaced story
More good
Merchant interaction seems to be missing.
What did Jeff buy and what might he have possibly available to him from the get go or expected to be found over his journey?
Example i will make for my story next chapter that is 80-90% done.
Hm... Maybe instead of using Jeff's name when he is alone all the time:
Example:
1. Jeff
2. The biped looking like Link
3. The human transformed Hyrulian
4. The bipedal hero
Etc etc etc,variation is a writers colors and readers will look at them in awe and admiration
I like the humor and descriptions.
Child Link/Teen Link or adult Link?
A great start. Though I don't really like Displaced stories with all the world hopping this is starting out alright.
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Of course there is no merchant interaction, I've never been a fan of that part of Displaced stories, where mc goes to a comic con, buys item, etc, and besides, people have read that part a million times already and I believe people are annoyed when the story starts off like that.
Sure, I could add variations to present Jeff, but I'm not creative enough to keep mixing it up. As for his age, he's around nineteen.
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So adult Link, got you.
It's mostly to establish a baseline of character, but i guess it's fine like that.
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Yea, I can understand why since so many Displaced have the MC overpowered, a mary-sue, wish fulfillment and they form a harem, or worse they don't act human at all and they accept their new life easily. I always try to approach this kind of scenario logically the best I can to make the mc act natural if I was in their shoes.
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Just remember I didn't base this on any existing Links of the franchise, this is my own idea of the appearance, the visage.
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Same as i try to keep my Cynder. It's redicules how many just over power Alicorns or Tirek full powered up like someone would kick away a agressiv attacking dog...
Some power levels should just simply be untouched...
Looking forward to reading more
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I mean Tirek is powerful though considering it took three alicorns to have Twilight be on par with him. Tirek feels to be around small village - small mountain level of power.
This is really good so far! I'm just gonna keep this tab open and refresh it every five minutes don't mind me.
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This is why I went with more than one main character, so spread the overpowered idiocy between them.
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I doubt it works. While i sometimes made updates up to three times in my Displaced story, i doubt many others write that mutch normally
But maybe you get lucky eventually
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Agreed, strength in numbers. It's actually how i plan to have mine archivment of other Displaced if overwelming firepower is needed.
I already have a Celestia that has the sledgehammer named 'Solar Lance' that, Cynder can ask for.
Add her sisters and stuff get towards reasonable overpowered.
One Individual like 5 damage point, 4 would have 20.
Combo that and you get crit damage out of it.
Kinda like a Mario Brawl game i guess?
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Oh hey, I just realized you're the author of the Garland Displaced, I read ya story years ago.
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I keep my "overpowered" character as a sort of mentor figure who stops carrying the team towards the end of my stories first arc. And the only reason he's overpowered is because while he can't use magic himself, his sword can absorb and store it for later. It gets to a point where Garland straight up roasts one of the main antagonists by engulfing them in a miniature sun.
I say all of this like I've written it out, but I've actually just been hard focusing planning out the story more thoroughly over the past year or so
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Yeeeeeeeeaaaa, I should probably get around to actually working on that. Story planning sucks sometimes.
But I'm loving this story so far. It's been a while since I've read a displaced fic, so I'm excited to see how this goes!
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Thank you, it will take a long time for the next chapter, I mean it took me six months to finally release the first chapter because of my annoying autism.
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I've had a tab open waiting for an update to a story that hasn't been touched since 2017.
And naturally the chapter left on a cliffhanger. Here's to desperately hoping the darn fic gets updated at some point.
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Well it's an amazing start, and if you've enjoyed writing it this far, don't hesitate to keep going!
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I managed to revived the motivation of multible Authors by commenting on EVERY SINGEL CHAPTER I READ. Comments are the food of Authors after all
That what keeps me writing stories
👍
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Yeah, I can generally agree. The author of that story just has a lot going on in life and I've just been being passively supportive whenever I get the chance.
great start, hope it turns out awesome at the end!!!~
Interesting. It's been quite a while since I have played any of the Zelda games but can see the potential with this. Looking forward to what you have in store.
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Oh, quite alot, its just I'm struggling to connect the broken unfinished pieces of ideas.
Good chapter, though I might have a recommendation or 5...
Rather strange that a clothes wearing and armed sapient being can talk?
Maybe change it to surprise that he speak the ponies language.
He is either specific aggressive towards non ponies or is badly trained, guess we are to dislike the pony royal guards in general?
Unnecessary threat of harm, maybe add if he becomes actively harmful. That seems more appropriate for a 'Royal Guardspony'.
So the guard is a racist? Why call him creature otherwise if he believes him to be a Minatour.
Unnecessary provoking attitude.
Clever solution to name something that gender is unclear to someone.
Pointless, he will cause a disruption by default.
Might add 'violent disruption', that would make way more sense.
Very rude, but actually physically disciplined
THAT, needs explaining!
The princess offering training and ressources is well made, she recognized that she has not a battle harden veteran and immediately make ways to correct that.
Very well done!
See you next update
👍
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Thank you for the suggestions, I've edited two of the parts of the chapter, however the others i'll need to ask the Archive to help the rest as he did type them out for me.
EDIT: All fixes applied. Thank you again, Black-soul.
Sweet thanks for updating. Really enjoying this story.
That turned around quickly, rather surprised the hero to save the nation don't get a guard detail. If enemies of the nation or just a tragic accident take him out, than everypony would be boned after all.
An awesome chapter. Looks like Death Mountains gonna be a thing so thats gonna be fun to deal with. Also Celestia is familiar with the OG Link.
Love the mix of Zelda items and other things.
Very flippant ponies, this will be something we get used to.
Nice chapter.
Rather odd he already need the power of a fear overcoming magic object
At least he has a lot of space for improvement in personality and physical abilities
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What? I'm sorry, could you reword that last sentence? I don't quite understand what you said.
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My bad, typing while eating had ne neglect proofreading for typing mistakes etc.
Looking forward to future chapters
Safety over convinces, unless they have some able to undo cut of limbs and organs damage. It's called a training incident for a reason...
Another awesome chapter.
great story so far
We worked hard on this four parter. This'll be a real good one and we hope you all enjoy it.
Are more Legend of Zelda characters ever going to appear in this story?
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Slowly yes.
Great chapter, the character dynamic is unusual, yet it is interesting to see the difference in character.
Displaced adventure? Always great to have a strong alliance partner at one's side.
Interesting cross over. Will be fun to see what parts everypony plays.
There is plainly sentence structure probles and some words that don't fit or make the intention of a sentence impossible for me to guess accurately.
Still nice chapter and rather confusing humor, perhaps references I don't know?
Why would dancing be evidence that someone isn't a Changeling?
I absolutely don't understand the reasoning of the conflict between these characters.
Further what was the eating other joke about? Sounded more like a psychotic move to voice at all.
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1. Could you point them out so that me or my ghost writer can fix it?
2. I think it was a form of joking.
3. Could you point where 'eating other joke' is?
I'm pretty sure she had a different name at this point, didn't she change it later on?
I'm curious is this story going to continue
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My ghost writer hasn't been feeling good, so I can't write without him.
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Oh I see I understand