Merchant interaction seems to be missing. What did Jeff buy and what might he have possibly available to him from the get go or expected to be found over his journey?
Example i will make for my story next chapter that is 80-90% done.
Hm... Maybe instead of using Jeff's name when he is alone all the time: Example: 1. Jeff 2. The biped looking like Link 3. The human transformed Hyrulian 4. The bipedal hero Etc etc etc,variation is a writers colors and readers will look at them in awe and admiration
I like the humor and descriptions. Child Link/Teen Link or adult Link?
11534559 Of course there is no merchant interaction, I've never been a fan of that part of Displaced stories, where mc goes to a comic con, buys item, etc, and besides, people have read that part a million times already and I believe people are annoyed when the story starts off like that.
Sure, I could add variations to present Jeff, but I'm not creative enough to keep mixing it up. As for his age, he's around nineteen.
11534562 Yea, I can understand why since so many Displaced have the MC overpowered, a mary-sue, wish fulfillment and they form a harem, or worse they don't act human at all and they accept their new life easily. I always try to approach this kind of scenario logically the best I can to make the mc act natural if I was in their shoes.
11534573 Same as i try to keep my Cynder. It's redicules how many just over power Alicorns or Tirek full powered up like someone would kick away a agressiv attacking dog...
Some power levels should just simply be untouched...
11534585 I mean Tirek is powerful though considering it took three alicorns to have Twilight be on par with him. Tirek feels to be around small village - small mountain level of power.
11534618 Agreed, strength in numbers. It's actually how i plan to have mine archivment of other Displaced if overwelming firepower is needed.
I already have a Celestia that has the sledgehammer named 'Solar Lance' that, Cynder can ask for. Add her sisters and stuff get towards reasonable overpowered. One Individual like 5 damage point, 4 would have 20. Combo that and you get crit damage out of it. Kinda like a Mario Brawl game i guess?
11534628 I keep my "overpowered" character as a sort of mentor figure who stops carrying the team towards the end of my stories first arc. And the only reason he's overpowered is because while he can't use magic himself, his sword can absorb and store it for later. It gets to a point where Garland straight up roasts one of the main antagonists by engulfing them in a miniature sun.
I say all of this like I've written it out, but I've actually just been hard focusing planning out the story more thoroughly over the past year or so
11534687 Thank you, it will take a long time for the next chapter, I mean it took me six months to finally release the first chapter because of my annoying autism.
11534702 I managed to revived the motivation of multible Authors by commenting on EVERY SINGEL CHAPTER I READ. Comments are the food of Authors after all
11534707 Yeah, I can generally agree. The author of that story just has a lot going on in life and I've just been being passively supportive whenever I get the chance.
Interesting. It's been quite a while since I have played any of the Zelda games but can see the potential with this. Looking forward to what you have in store.
With Gohma gone, Jeff freely explores the rest of the Deku Tree's Trunk. After some exploring, he finds a small dark purple filly wearing a blue scarf who is now caught up in the spider's web. The Hylian quickly checks her pulse, then sighs in relief that she's alive. Jeff uses his sword to cut her down, allowing her body to fall into his arms. Jeff carefully carries her in his arms, being mindful of the tiny sparks that were jumping from her broken horn.
Sweet, here comes a new displaced story
More good
Merchant interaction seems to be missing.
What did Jeff buy and what might he have possibly available to him from the get go or expected to be found over his journey?
Example i will make for my story next chapter that is 80-90% done.
Hm... Maybe instead of using Jeff's name when he is alone all the time:
Example:
1. Jeff
2. The biped looking like Link
3. The human transformed Hyrulian
4. The bipedal hero
Etc etc etc,variation is a writers colors and readers will look at them in awe and admiration
I like the humor and descriptions.
Child Link/Teen Link or adult Link?
A great start. Though I don't really like Displaced stories with all the world hopping this is starting out alright.
11534559
Of course there is no merchant interaction, I've never been a fan of that part of Displaced stories, where mc goes to a comic con, buys item, etc, and besides, people have read that part a million times already and I believe people are annoyed when the story starts off like that.
Sure, I could add variations to present Jeff, but I'm not creative enough to keep mixing it up. As for his age, he's around nineteen.
11534571
So adult Link, got you.
It's mostly to establish a baseline of character, but i guess it's fine like that.
11534562
Yea, I can understand why since so many Displaced have the MC overpowered, a mary-sue, wish fulfillment and they form a harem, or worse they don't act human at all and they accept their new life easily. I always try to approach this kind of scenario logically the best I can to make the mc act natural if I was in their shoes.
11534572
Just remember I didn't base this on any existing Links of the franchise, this is my own idea of the appearance, the visage.
11534573
Same as i try to keep my Cynder. It's redicules how many just over power Alicorns or Tirek full powered up like someone would kick away a agressiv attacking dog...
Some power levels should just simply be untouched...
Looking forward to reading more
11534585
I mean Tirek is powerful though considering it took three alicorns to have Twilight be on par with him. Tirek feels to be around small village - small mountain level of power.
This is really good so far! I'm just gonna keep this tab open and refresh it every five minutes don't mind me.
11534573
This is why I went with more than one main character, so spread the overpowered idiocy between them.
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I doubt it works. While i sometimes made updates up to three times in my Displaced story, i doubt many others write that mutch normally
But maybe you get lucky eventually
11534618
Agreed, strength in numbers. It's actually how i plan to have mine archivment of other Displaced if overwelming firepower is needed.
I already have a Celestia that has the sledgehammer named 'Solar Lance' that, Cynder can ask for.
Add her sisters and stuff get towards reasonable overpowered.
One Individual like 5 damage point, 4 would have 20.
Combo that and you get crit damage out of it.
Kinda like a Mario Brawl game i guess?
11534618
Oh hey, I just realized you're the author of the Garland Displaced, I read ya story years ago.
11534628
I keep my "overpowered" character as a sort of mentor figure who stops carrying the team towards the end of my stories first arc. And the only reason he's overpowered is because while he can't use magic himself, his sword can absorb and store it for later. It gets to a point where Garland straight up roasts one of the main antagonists by engulfing them in a miniature sun.
I say all of this like I've written it out, but I've actually just been hard focusing planning out the story more thoroughly over the past year or so
11534629
Yeeeeeeeeaaaa, I should probably get around to actually working on that. Story planning sucks sometimes.
But I'm loving this story so far. It's been a while since I've read a displaced fic, so I'm excited to see how this goes!
11534687
Thank you, it will take a long time for the next chapter, I mean it took me six months to finally release the first chapter because of my annoying autism.
11534622
I've had a tab open waiting for an update to a story that hasn't been touched since 2017.
And naturally the chapter left on a cliffhanger. Here's to desperately hoping the darn fic gets updated at some point.
11534700
Well it's an amazing start, and if you've enjoyed writing it this far, don't hesitate to keep going!
11534702
I managed to revived the motivation of multible Authors by commenting on EVERY SINGEL CHAPTER I READ. Comments are the food of Authors after all
That what keeps me writing stories
👍
11534707
Yeah, I can generally agree. The author of that story just has a lot going on in life and I've just been being passively supportive whenever I get the chance.
great start, hope it turns out awesome at the end!!!~
Interesting. It's been quite a while since I have played any of the Zelda games but can see the potential with this. Looking forward to what you have in store.
11538588
Oh, quite alot, its just I'm struggling to connect the broken unfinished pieces of ideas.
Interesting cross over. Will be fun to see what parts everypony plays.
I'm pretty sure she had a different name at this point, didn't she change it later on?
Tempest?
Thought her name was Fizzlepop Berrytwist, but I guess this version has her edgy phase early.