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YetAnotherTweenEdgelord


🇳🇱 🇺🇦 Putting "shit" in "shitpost" since 1996 🇳🇱 🇺🇦 [your/mom]

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what the fuck... what did I read...

“Yeah.” Rainbow Dash chuckled. “Always be yourself, not yet another tween edgelord.”

I see what you did there, and I don't know whether or not I hate it.

Also, this story is disturbing!

Edit: Quick question: do you have Youth Protection Training, or is this something more personal? Either way, perfect description of how a sexual predator gets close to a child, makes them comfortable, and then betrays their trust. Well done, if a bit rushed!

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Also, this story is disturbing!

It's supposed to be.

“I’m not sure if I like the special massage,” Scootaloo muttered, her face bright red as she realized that Rainbow Dash was now feeling her sensitive wings with one hand. The other hand, slippery from baby oil, was circling around her stomach, getting lower and lower.

The story's good, it had a good flow and all that... but are they anthro, or is this just a little typo written in the heat of the story?

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I saw, but I can forget for a sequel finishing where this left off.
Talk about edging the readers! Sheesh.

Question: What's different about the AO3 version?

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It's EqG, as you may guess from the fact that I missed a few hands from the rewrite... :facehoof:

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That's it? Not sure why that makes it worse. Sure, you're not allowed to post minor anthros or human getting fucked on Fimfiction but either way, it's a sex crime irl.

So the story was pretty good, though at the massage the story seemed a bit rushed.

Comment posted by Ambientsonar7 deleted Jun 21st, 2022

"Hm."

No idea why I read this. Only thing I'll say is that the "massage" should be longer. Other than that, I love that there is actual story and not mindless clop. Good on ya.

“Yeah.” Rainbow Dash chuckled. “Always be yourself, not yet another tween edgelord.”

I see what you did there.

Now that was a banger :rainbowwild: Your writing is great, I especially loved the dialogue between the two. It felt natural and I could see Rainbow talking like that if she were ever really that perverted. Overall, a great read!

I don't want to insult a story that is probably very personal to you, but it was kinda...strange and forced.
Rainbow Dash acted like she was in a bad porno movie, and Scootaloo was...horny?at first, then scared, then...flat out horrified, I guess.
Also, the title and some paragraphs gave the illusion of comedy(the pee part, for example), and it really made me confused...

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Sorry for not replying for so long, I'm rarely sober and not high these days.
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Pictured: my life as of late.

Actually, this one isn't that much personal. I have a much more personal fic in the works for some two years already, but I can't get around to writing it. Sometimes I look at the file and just turn away.

Scootaloo was...horny?at first, then scared, then...flat out horrified, I guess.

It is horrifying, not gonna lie (I kinda prefer the AO3 version over this one, it hits way closer to home). It's all hormones and shit and then, like, holy shit, what is happening, why is this happening, stop it, stop it, just make it stop.

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Thanks for replying.I usually do not tend to reply on stories with a subject like this, because I know it's a delicate situation and some people don't take the criticism well in this case.
Also, yeah, I know the body can get aroused even without consent.I should've phrased this one better:the odd thing for me was that at first it felt like Scootaloo wanted this.

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