What happens if the most generous pony in Equestria passes away? How will her friends react? And above all, how will her sister?
When tragedy strikes the circle of friends, tears can be the only way truly release their emotions from the sights that happened.
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A quick, one-shot story I made to vent my emotions. Tried a new style of writing. I must admit, I cried during the creating of it. Inspired by The Funeral Everypony Should Go on Youtube
Cover art credit goes to Fruitbloodmilkshake (account deactivated)
Chapters (1)
I like the new writing style.
this is a nice story
*Noon Mane walks in on Sikanto shedding a manly tear*
Noon: Woah bro, What are you reading?
Me: I-I read this story about Rarity's funeral.
Noon: Let me see.
*Noon reads the story*
Noon: *Sniff* Th-That was very very deep.
Me: I know.
*Sikanto and Noon Mane hug each other while crying*
Anyways besides that, This was deep and I think the emotions in here made it almost seem real.
only a few errors
She's even generous in the will...
1270515 It was a one-shot I wrote while really being depressed... I knew it would have some errors, but as I said, I might re-write the story one day.
1270483 It is a style I tried, I must say, I personally am not a fan of it, but I might give it another try inanother story.
1270507 Thank you my dear. What a piece of music and a bad mood all can't do...
1270510 I thank you for the comment my dear, and an anwser to that is because I was a little depressed when I started this story... That might explain that part.
1270669 Man, you vented strong my friend. Keep up the awesome work bro.
*before reading*
another one of the mane 6 dies fic?
sigh
*after reading*
1270701 I hope I can my dear, I hope I can.
1270784 Sometimes, an over-used idea and still pack out surprisingly...
I will read this one later
I enjoyed this. I was sad, but not crushingly so. Just a gloomy feel around it. I did have some small quibbles, but I don't know if you want critique in comments, so I will just say well done. It was definitely a good read.
It was good and emotional, I couldn't grasp it well enough though because of the grammar. Fix that and you'll have many a man shedding manly tears.
That....was beautiful.....
1271269 I am glad you like it, for that I am truly thankful and about the critique, if it has something to do with the story flow (A.K.A. plot-holes) or the grammer, I already know that more. Any other points are more then welcome.
1271399 Grammer as Dutchman is always an interesting point. I tried my best, but as said, it was just a quick one-shot to vent myself. I will/might do a major spelling check on it someday, but not now.
1271702 I am glad you liked it my dear. I truly am.
1273260
well considering, I'd have to give you points for effort seeing as its not nearly as bad as some other people out there.
1273932 I thank you for your kind words my dear.
that was deep i loved it
Great story. Truly better than anything I could have done. However; and this is just something I have to say, the dialogue seems very.... jittery. I don't know, it just seemed very off. The pacing was fine, the emotion was well done, and no one seemed too out of character given the circumstances but it just felt... off. I really don't know how to describe it and it hardly detracted from it over all. In the end, it was great.
1328297 The dialoge might be explaind due to me being depressed as hay while writing. Even I cried during the making of this one...
1304075 Thank you darling.
1330965 np
1330952And somehow I only sniffed during the reading of this... It's horrible when funerals don't affect me and yet a being with a sad face can bring me to tears.
1331911 Life works in mysterious ways my dear.
1359038 I thank you kindly my dear.
1360696 Then you wait will be repaid my dear, as I am working on a huge fiction, plan to make it around 50 pages in total. Writing is half way done as we speak. I hope to get it out by the end of this year. If everything work with me that is.
That. Was deep.
1551561 Thank you darling. ~Rarity
Finally got the change to edit the story for the last time, nothing has changed in the dialog or style, I only searched out the mistakes and fixed them.
very VERY emotional made me tear up when sweetie found out, as some people have said it does have a few spelling and grammatical errors and when people see stuff like that it gets confusing and losses some of that emotion that it has and doesnt have the same impact that you may want. over all 8/10 for story idea and impact, when the errors are fixed it will totally be an 11/10
~Daring~
1562888 Well, I did try my best to get everything out of it and everything in order, I just hope I did not forgot a small thing... But seriously, keeps a tissue ready. ~Rarity (P.S. this comment was edited because I was tired when I first wrote it.)
I didnt know i could feel this deep
Wow...you did good. Like I told you before I do not cry during stories. But this almost did it for me. goodjob!
1909517 Some stories tug the heartstrings very deeply my dear. This might be one of them
1909823 Thank you darling. 'Almost' is good enough for me.
Stay Awesome Rarity!
1989807 I am truly glad that you enjoyed the story my dear. And i will try to stay that way yes.
"In Darth Vader voice) Impressive.
"Slice random toilet in half"
Most Impressive.
I usually become emotional when I read things like this. Unfortunately, this did nothing for me. I felt no real bond with the characters within.
Sorry. You write well, despite my lack of reaction.
i wouldnt go this funeral cause i hate rarity with a passion but still great read
This story is 3333 words long if only the story was 4444 words longer
3816893 You won't believe just how surprised I actually was when that number suddenly popped up. But it makes me wonder though, why would you like this story, or any story for that matter, to have 7,777 words? The lucky number I presume?
3817025 yes and it would be funny
It's sad, but it was creative, thoughtful, and insane. Somehow, I didn't cry. It's probably because I've been through an exact example of this. But this is a pretty good story. Sorry about Rarity's outcome though.