Would've figured you'd bring the church up at some point, though they seem more discret than your old story. So they were the ones that caused Giffonia to become underdeveloped. Damn supremacists.

Is this a sequel?

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no. the author is just rewriting the whole story

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No it is a complete rewrite of the original's story. The sequel has already started and is called fractured pasts but the author decided to do a rewrite to add in more details and better flesh out the story since their talents had vastly improved over the time that they wrote the first book. The old one is still up so that people can understand and get a general idea of what this version is going to be and since the sequel was written with that book's events in mind.

This is from a guy who read the old version of the story but i'm Surprised orion hasn't gone out of his way to fold 1of the members of the church like a Lawn chair For a lack of a better term because I just imagine him more aggressive in this variation of the story

Grace slams d-bag for being idiot.
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Thanks for another awesome chapter. It really brightened up the shitty day I had.

So we finally got a real good look at the cult's leaders and what they're up to in both Equestria and the rest of the world. I can't help but compare their organization to another one I'm sure many are familiar with.

Assuming that Daybreaker is the one pulling the cult's strings like she was in the original. I think that her big plan is similar to Hydra's. Create a world full of conflict and fear whilst secretly installing beings loyal to her cult. Then wait till it looks like the world is about to go completely to hell. Daybreaker will appear in her true form and with the cult's influence across the world. She'll "magically" restore peace to the world and convince all of its inhabitants that only her leadership can keep the world in perfect "harmony".

Fuck the church of Sol, me and the homies HATE the church of Sol!

a far cry from the mugg,y[1] humid air of the city streets below.

"Velvet Backwater, Epsilon Division. I come as called. Iawait[2] to serve."

[1] [2] Spacing issues

I never read the original, but the comments have consistently made it sound worse than this rewrite. I'd say that's a sign that the author is doing a damn good job. Congratulations, I suppose?

Potential competition has arrived for the MC

I guess the loss of steel wasn't directly this celestia's fault.

I wonder just how many webs does this world has in play? Or how badly they get tangled?

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Competition? Orion is not after Grace.
Of course Roderick may see things differently.

Happy to see another update on this story.

Also, looks like Velvet & the Church have finally decided to make a huge move against Orion to try & capture him. I can't help but think, how exactly it's going to work when you also have Rosebreast, an unloyal narcissist who wants him dead, try and kill him, while you, someone that supports Rosebreast & wants Orion alive at the same time. Looks like a break up & a conflict is about to happen between these groups.

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I believe Orion has an interest in both Grace and Twilight but chooses not to pursue them due to his belief that he would be unable to be open more truthful with them. He also believes that his knowledge of enchantment would threaten the lives of anyone he grows to attached to.
While he is not actively pursuing a relationship with Grace, I believe he will still act extremely protective and will potentially become jealous if the new guy starts a relationship with Grace, even though Orion would be relieved that Grace has moved on. I believe both will treat this as a competition.

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This Orion is also more sensible, and knows picking fights against the members of the Church of Sol can land him into prison or worse; specially after the incident with Golden Trot and his cronies.

Good chapter

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My knowledge and skill have come a long way, I still have a lot further to go. However, with wisdom, comes knowing my original storyline was bunk and I needed to really do better.

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And it's killing me.
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Yeah, haha I am still subpar, but it is better.

Thank you both for covering that answer btw.

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Folding people comes with a heavy cost, and Orion is fully aware of his position in horse society would not protect him from such an act.

It's why he he stands off from others.

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He is aggressive that is true. But paranoia is a heavy limiter on acting out. He's vulnerable, and he knows it.

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We often forget that those from medieval past tend to be self absorbed, especially when they come from money. Pigeon, as I have come to affectionately call Roderick, is no different. He has lived and indulgent life still his whole life. This leads to an insular view of the world.

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I love your theories, my man. No insult intended, i really mean that.

Some are so accurate I fear you have somehow gotten into my notes. Which is impossible because I have that as physical copies, yet still.

Some are so far off the mark, it's crazy yet amazing because when you say it, I can easily see the world going that way and that makes it all the more awesome.

And sometimes, you are so close it hurts, and you just miss it by a hairs breath.

Not telling which ones though!

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Orion Liked That.

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Le sigh. It's always something. Thanks man. I think it's because I do the majority of the work on my phone.

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In my opinion, it was awful. The roughest of rough drafts that I should have never posted. However, I needed to gage my skill compared to the opinions of others. Without all of you, I would not have improved as much as I have today.

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Yes and no. For Orion, the important thing is for those in his life to be happy. But fear and paranoia are close friends, and both dance on his nervous like experts at the Waltz.
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I can tell you without giving anything away that Roderick is going to be a pain in the arse.

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Oh the final scene for this arc is going to memorable.

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This is not an inaccurate observation.

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thank you.

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Happy to hear that you enjoy my theories. I look forward to seeing which ones I got right and wrong.

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Ok, sorry

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Lol. I meant you were correct.

All the shit that's going on in the world is so that daybreaker can take over the world isn't it?
although I would like to know what was the factor that made Orion end up in a pony form

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All shall be revealed....eventually. I actually like how and why Orion ended up the way he did, and as the story develops I find more and more reasons this is correct.

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No more Pornhub for them.

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Ever. Again.

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Heck, I'm pretty sure they've extracted kids from active gunfights during the wars in the middle east. People can and will go the extra mile for kids, and the naturally altruistic nature of ponies ups that tenfold.

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Possibly the same factor that makes anyone from the pony Equestria turn into a human when they use the mirror portal to go to the human Equestria so that they can blend in better with the "locals."

I'd even say it was potentially the "will" of Harmony or Equis herself, that turned him into a young pony colt when those jerkoffs yeeted his covict ass through that interdimensional portal.

Though I really wouldn't doubt all the behind the scenes bullshit that has been going on in the past and still is going on currently, isn't some sort of scheme by that giga cunt Daybreaker, to try and enslave all the races, every nation all so she can rule the entire world. The mare really is a power hungry, sadistic and cruel, murderous, megalomaniacal tyrant that is absolutely hellbent on complete world domination.

"Tell us," the lone pegasus said. Velvet didn't know her, so she must be new. "Why do you believe Orion Falls has a connection to this suit?"

With his newfound skills in enchanting, I wonder what our young artificer could do with that suit now... Too bad he probably won't see it again

Hmm... Travelling back and forth to carry messages would take over a week for correspondence to go there and back. They must be communicating with magic

After a moment, she shook her head.

Oh no..
Gods no
Nothing good has ever come of splitting the party!