We all make choices. Decisions that are often thrust upon us by circumstance more often than personal desire. For Orion, his choices will lead him through the veil of our world and into the wonder of another.
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There is an over abundance of "he" starting with the golden confrontation it doesn't even say who started the dialog so we can interpret a back and forth it just goes "he said" over and over, the descriptions for the actions are much of the same just 30 he's thrown in there
Great job on this chapter 👍
Love the renewed version of the fight.
And now begins the Ponyville arc.
Thanks for another awesome chapter!
I don't know which part of this chapter I liked better. The fight, (more like completely one-sided massacre) that was even more fun to read than it was in the original version or the expanded conversation Orion had with Celestia.
I definitely wasn't expecting Orion to actually anger Celestia enough for Daybreaker to slip out for a couple of seconds. I wonder how many more times Orion will be causing that to happen before the end of this story.
Also, because of the info Celestia plucked from Blueballs's mind. Will she make a move to try and limit the CFP's authority or does Daybreaker already have a strong presence in Celestia's mind and can subconsciously influence her not to take any serious action against them?
WATER IS NOT WET
Solid so far, I've been enjoying the majority of this rewrite with the added details and subtleties like Celestia revealing a bit more about and showing more concern over using the memory reading on Blueblood. With that said I've been a bit anxious about how you'd do the Ponyville section, it was my least favourite part of the original version so I'm curious to see how you'll write it this time around.
Love it,keep up the good work
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It's implied Daybreaker being the reason the Church has managed to gather so much power with no oversight from Celestia.
It wouldn't make sense otherwise a ruler who goes to far as to break the Third Law of Magic to keep tabs on the royal family...but doesn't have any intel on the inner workings of a powerful organization with so much influence over her kingdom and subjects.
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Yeah, my editor couldn't get to the chapter in time and my sperg brain couldn't or wouldn't see it. We plan to post edit so it's more consistent. Sorry 'bout that.
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Why does everyone love the "fool turned into a flail" theme? You're not the first person to desire that. I even got a letter at the start of the rewrite to beg/demand I keep it in.
Not that I was going to get rid of a choice scene like that. Just funny how y'all like what is essentially child abuse.
They know something.
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Probably because it's so absolutely absurd.
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Fair.
Well so far everything is the same, just the logistics have changed a little. Don't really know why you rewrote it, maybe you'll have him save Applejacks parents? Maybe he'll stay in the city instead of getting run out? Those are pretty much the only 2 things left to change.
Oh wait I forgot his griffin Kingdome trip. But not sure what you'd change about that.
OH COME ON! You dangle what Orion is like that and then change scenes, I bet it's not even gonna be revealed in the next chapter. Great chapter though.
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Suffer....
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It comes across like cartoon slapstick. Though if it happened before any physical assault and threats of worse, I don't think I'd like it as much
anyone here know of any other FF story's with the exact same Thumbnail/Cover Picture???? if it hasn't been deleted already the one I'm looking for is/should be have Sci-fi Space exploring, Spaceships, a maybe/possibly crossover with a fandom/universe I've never heard of, humans, MLP Ponies/first contact, & an evil regime/organization I think, & I think the story's first chapter/chapters started off with the main character being alone in a spaceship & narrating if that helps & I'm coming up with this stuff of off faint memories I can't recall so :/ & I think it should have 1-5 or 10 chapters last time I checked which anywhere between 2018/2019 - 2022 but I completely forgot the name of said Fic so I don't know if it's deleted, on hiatus, still continuing, or was cancelled BUT I Know/Swear that it did have/had the same Cover art/Thumbnail as this story so since it's Sci-Fi it should be east 2 find hopefully
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Hope you find it bud, but I'm afraid I've never seen it. How about you guys? Heard of the story he is talking about?
Assuming you meant fury not furry.
This story's writing is a dramatic and impressive improvement upon the original. Major props.
The story is definitely a step up from the last, both in length of chapters and quality, but still similar enough that the major events still happen.
Keep up the good work.
What?
...
Humansville, Missouri
Ugh, Americans.
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Pretty sure I've pointed this one out already, but
CHICKEN, ALASKA
Oh no... do they know? 0.0
Still waiting for Orion to go through his Pony Heisenberg phase