Excellent chapter as always.

I'm glad we're getting to see an extended look at the year Orion spent in Stalliongrad. When we got that summary from Moonlit Night in the last chapter about his time there. I've been really wanting to know what Orion did that had a mob family trying to track him down.

Another amazing chapter, keep up the good work 👍

He had never heard incests moving

I assume you mean "insects"?
Great chapter, though! Keep up the good work!

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Gah! Me and the editor both missed that! Damnit! Thanks for pointing it out I'll fix it later.

Was the detailed description of his cock really necessary?

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rofl your pic make all the more funny

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In this case I believe yes. The reason is because Orion has been thrust into a new world, and his whole image, his very being, has been altered.

He's going to be morbidly fascinated with what has been done to him. So in this case, yes, I believe it was.

If you didn't like this, you are definitely gonna be bothered by the next chapter. I will post a warning on that one.

>The twin fission reactors fell into catastrophic meltdown almost immediately. Due to interference, none of the safety systems engaged and for the team of researchers and orderlies, the world went white.

>Utah had been a nice place from what some online reviews had said.
This doesn't add anything. And was one of the dumbest parts of the old fic. I had hoped you would have cut it in the rewrite

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I dont think warnings are warranted. They distract from the in-narrative immersion and spoil the chapter/story. The mature rating and the existing tags are plenty

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There is a reason it is mentioned. Lol I promise. No guessing now.

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I agree with you, and the only warning I am giving will be in the author's notes. I won't mar the work just because it may be uncomfortable for some.

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Authors notes is what I'm complaining about

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Really? You don't like them?

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Yes. Youre interrupting the contiguous narrative to give out a warning that the tags already go, and spoiling the upcoming chapter. Intext interruptions avoid that but also break the flow and take you out of the narrative. The tags are plenty.

Omg it had actually just started to rain and thunder right when I started reading the chapter

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I arranged that to set the mood.

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Much appreciated!

Utah had been a nice place from what some online reviews had said.

Kinda glanced over this in my past read through, but now that I'm awake and understand what happened.

Ruh roh.

Personally not a real fan of douche MCs but this is one of the good ones...Just saying the story is cool!

Really good quality storytelling here! I just hope Orion gets some character development later in the story cause I really can't stand him at the moment. Insufferable look how edgy I am protagonists were fairly common in 2013/2014 but I'd hate to see that stick around. Nobody has any reason to like or care about him outside of his societal use as a breeding stick when he's older.

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Na, fr... ALL of Utah is insane lol, that has to be the biggest explosion known in human history depending on the extent of the damage

Utah had been a nice place from what some online reviews had said.

OK SO. Im glad im re reading the story now cause i fucking forgot the entire US state of Utah was annihilated off the face of the earth; all cause our boi orion was pushed through the shit 💀💀💀💀💀