We all make choices. Decisions that are often thrust upon us by circumstance more often than personal desire. For Orion, his choices will lead him through the veil of our world and into the wonder of another.
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Which one is chapter 29? The aren’t numbered and I don’t know if you were counting the prologue as a chapter. Also in what why are you retconning? Just a character and interactions with said character or is a larger plot point altered
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Just the character and certain interactions. Laid Plans is the name of the Chapter.
How cruel
I feel your pain. I've been stuck in bed all day with a stomach bug. So this chapter was definitely a much needed dose of awesomeness to brighten my mood.
So the Griffons having the means to make steel is big enough for the cult to forgo subtlety and launch an all out attack on the town. At least the attackers can't communicate with their superiors. So if they are all killed in this battle. The knowledge of Orion's involvement with that town's newfound prosperity won't be reaching their ears for hopefully a long time.
Also, are we going to get another look at what's happening with Twilight before Orion's return to Equestria?
I really hope his assassins die screaming.
[1] Missing opening double quotation mark
[1] Missing opening double quotation mark.
I want to see some heads roll! The church will crumble from Orions wrath!!
But how is he going to dodge the teleported in improvised grenade?
When i was a child i always hope get sick so i don't go to school, but now when im suck it's feel like hell, sometimes ignorance is blissful. I hope you get well soon, also can you put short story in the end chapter about twilight, rarity, and applejack pov if you can do it?
Dammit got me all pumped and now I have to wait
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I broke that chapter up because my editor yelled at me that there were too many words in one chapter so...yeah. Big drop next Monday.
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Ah fair enough but its really good but boo you for the cliff hanger lol
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Suffer.
Seethe.
Your hatred only makes me stronger.
they really mailled him a pipebomb
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Express delivery.
That cliffhanger though xD
Epic. Dudes gonna be a full on warrior, and he's still a colt! I'm suspecting the fact that his awareness ability isn't working properly is going to end up causing a problem in the battle to come, which is unfortunate. Still, Orion is an absolute badass!
Ok so as I binged read this whole story I have words for you my dear writer.
I fucking hate this kid Orion. His unwilling behavior to have friends in his life genuinely drives me insane. He has reasons to be paranoid sure but there is a limit to it. His mind set is a mix of both childlike and adult like, and that's fine but I feel like he switches mindsets so quickly it feels like he has no control over himself. His refusal to share information with those he is actively helping is another problem. Again his paranoia is somewhat justified but not telling grace a fucking thing kills me so much. Now onto his enchantments. How can you be this paranoid and not have your buffs working/on at all times? Every time you wake up you should be checking these things to make sure you can't be snuck up on. But almost every time he needs it the radar seems to not be working or some other bullshit that he should have noticed.
Other than that I love the world building. The evil that is so in the light it is the norm is amazing. The villains have real reasons to actually be evil.
So really I'm gonna keep reading for sure. I just wanna punch Orion in the throat for his lack of thinking like an adult when it matters.
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Heh, I get it. Orion may have been an adult back in the human world, but he never really grew up. I have met grown men and women who act a lot like he does. Inconsistent, and often emotionally driven. That's what I wanted.
Orion's life has never been good, which will come out eventually. Brought out by those who he gathers around him. There is also the fact that he is unsure of himself, and worries about making a misstep. He believes himself smarter than those around him, and he is starting to learn the hard way that his education and experience does not make that belief true.
He gets too caught up in his own thoughts that he mucks things up and forgets.
As far as his enchantments, he's feeling things out. And ignorance is a constant struggle for him. He doesn't truly know what he is doing, thus the trial and error. As far as radar, perhaps I didn't illustrate the issue. All that information being constantly dumped into one's head would cause migraines. There's just too much information, so he had to learn to tune out the white noise so as not to suffer the backlash. Which means he often forgets. It's not a perfect system because his brain, the wetware, is squishy.
Lol, I get it, I hate him too sometimes.
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Fast response! And don't worry I may hate this dude but it's nothing against your skills. You are really good!
(Make some sexy scenes I beg ya)
Anyway from now on every chapter I'm gonna be commenting nice
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I think you meant roll
Unless your giving the decapitated heads positions
Or giving positions as decapitated heads
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"Okay, so this decapitated head will be our chief engineer!" I glance around, placing the rotted skull of, is it a unicorn or a minitaur? Nevermind!
The other heads about me grin in glee. Or that could be the rigor mortis.
"That's right lads! We can finally get t o work, building this ship!"
Hands outstretched, I gestured to the rock we will soon sail the high seas with.
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Only a fast response because I was looking at my account before I started work. Glad you're here, hope you enjoy the journey.
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I see you also gave the head a spot on the keyboard with that (t o) there
Well I mean what's the difference both have been, worked to the bone
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You have no idea. I just woke up after an 11 hour shift. No thank you.
But yes, there is a skull, I think that's a griffon. They do most of the editing these days.
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Your editors been worked so much I'm not sure there's even a bone left to work
But seriously good chapter can't wait for Monday which is a statement I thought I would never say in a million years
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Working on it now. This one, ooohhh hohoho is gonna be good. Or at least I hope so.
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Fixed it 🥲
🎊 Hell yeah, happy 600! 🎉 🎊
Awesome chapter
Thanks for the chapter!
its awesome!