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The Red Parade


"i don't think you can stay," said the sea to the night

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Lightning Dust will never be a Wonderbolt. When she left the Academy, she swore she'd never look back. When the Washouts disbanded, she swore she'd forget about them.

Yet after all these years, against all odds, she finds herself here. At a Wonderbolts show. Just on the wrong side of the glass.


Entry into a Sofa and Quills Speedwriting contest, where it placed first! Written in the span of half an hour (time limit was an hour but I had to go early) with the prompts 'candy' and 'bittersweet.'

Edit: Featured from 4/15 - 4/17 2020, my first time in the box! Thank you!


"Highly Recommended" by Present Perfect!

Featured on Equestria Daily 5/28/20!

Reviewed by Nailah.

Featured in the Royal Canterlot Library. (Site blog 6/19/20)

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Comments ( 38 )

Okay. Ya got me. I was thinking of how Lightning Dust would come back post season 9, and I think you answered it for me.

Gonna go cry a little now.

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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it! Figured I'd try my hand at a Lightning Dust redemption story in a different direction, glad it all worked out!

Seer #3 · April 16th · · ·

A very worthy winner!
As always your plot is excellent, twists and turns deployed for perfect resonance and impact. Your themes in this one are so bitterly relatable, but the pay-off so sweet. There wasn't a more on prompt piece than this in the whole contest!
You smashed it mate! :D

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Thank you! Yours was amazing too! Thanks to you and everyone else for their feedback!

Shouldn't the title be Never Forever?

10183237
It's a stylistic decision I make often.

"Life is like a box of chocolate. You never know what you're going to get."

-Forest Gump

Great, now I want to see that movie again. I can only vaguely remember parts of it, and that somehow irritates me since its a part of my childhood.


Now, this is an interesting perspective of how Lighting Dust's fate may have become. I happen to have a deep interest in both Lightning Dust and Suri Polomare, mares that have been like a rival respectively to Rainbow Dash and Rarity. A shame they never got as much screentime in the canon story as compared to Trixie (who was initially perceived as a rival to Twilight).

Also, you seriously wrote all this in less than an hour!? That's like an impossible feat for me. I'm super slow in my writing and my scenes always appear to drag on but feel so necessary that I can't bother to cut any of them away.

This was an amazing short read, hears a thumbs up (and a like)! 👍

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Thank you! Speedwriting is certainly a new challenge that I'm still getting used to, but I'm really glad that you enjoyed it!

Loved it. That's all there is to say.

10183258
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

This was deliciously bittersweet. Thanks for sharing it.

10183415
Thank you for reading it! Glad you enjoyed!

This was a really heartwarming take on a subject that can easily collapse under its own weight. The twist was spot-on, too. Thank you for sharing!

10183469
Hey, thanks! Really glad you enjoyed it!

I thought Star Dust was Lightning Dust’s sister at first.

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Interesting! Thanks for reading!

Okay, I did not expect the reveal at the end.

You've managed to tackle a post-Wonderbolts (post-Washouts, even) Lightning Dust without the avalanche of melodrama that usually accompanies it; I'd say that's hard enough. That you did it believably and with a nice twist to boot makes for a good moral that should be shared and taught to everybody and for a Lightning Dust that ends up better and healthier. And you wrote this in half an hour? That's more than pretty good if this is the result!

Overall, a good short story! Keep up the good work!

10184354
Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

*sniff. sniff*
What? I'm not crying. No. No way. I refuse to admit I'm cry. Uhuh. Not happening. Nope. Never.

10184758
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I do not know why, but I am really mad at rainbow dash after watching. I must say I despise her now and I feel as though she does not deserve to be in the Wonderbolts. I am sorry if I hurt anyone's feelings😖
But the story was good with Lightning

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Ok.... I'm sorry you feel that way? I mean, Rainbow literally is a background character in this story so I don't know why you'd bring her up.

Ya, sorry about that

PresentPerfect
Author Interviewer

oh shit man you got me

you got me real good ;_;

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Woah... I really am honored that you liked this piece! Thanks so much for reading it!

this was so amazingly awesome, LD is my favourite Pegasi in the show

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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

And it all paid off. The adrenaline coursing through her body faded away as fast as Star Dust flew trough the sky, but Lightning couldn't care less. Her head was light and her heart was so full it felt like it would burst, but that didn't stop her. She almost felt tired, as if her body had given up now that it had accomplished her goal.

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Applause for an excellent short story. Maybe I should give one of these speed writing challenges a go because I found myself nodding whilst reading your interview regarding this story that my writing tends to be based upon what I call "light bulb moments" I'll have great ideas and get some good scenes or dialogue, but then I start overthinking or get distracted or simply procrastinate and lose the muse.

Not bad. Not bad at all. But, ah...

“You saved our home,” Fiddle said. “That’s more than Rainbow Dash’s ever done for me.”

Except for the whole "saved the world several times" thing. Pretty sure making sure that you don't have to live in eternal night/eternal chaos/under a changeling queen/under a magic sucking centaur etc is doing quite a lot for you.

Minor nitpick, and not one with the actual story itself. Just vaguely amusing.

Good one overall, though. Nice ending for sure.

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Thank you! You really should try out speedwriting at least once, it's great fun and the community is awesome! Let me know if you want an invite to the discord server. Thanks for reading!

10292462
I do agree with this, but Fiddle means this on a more personal level: Rainbow Dash saved Equestria as a whole, but she's never really interacted one on one with her, and that's more in line with what Fiddlesticks believes in/her core values. If that makes sense. Glad you enjoyed it!

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That might be kind of fun, I need to get off my lazy rump and take care of a few other things first, but if you want to hit me up with a link to a challenge, I'd love to give it a shot.

I'm really happy this got an RCL feature. The last two lines are just as electric as the first time I read it. Way to go!

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Thanks, I'm glad you liked it enough to reread it ^^

Damn, you made me feel for her. Well done.

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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

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