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Comment posted by Mistyshyannespirit deleted Dec 19th, 2019
Oli #2 · Dec 18th, 2019 · · 1 · Hunger ·

Pls more

Oli #3 · Dec 18th, 2019 · · 1 · Hunger ·

I would love to see twilight so dominant and tall,strong

Oli #4 · Dec 18th, 2019 · · 1 · Hunger ·

Trixie is here to surrender

i need to draw this s#$t man

Up vote. Keep up the good works!!!

“You can’t order me this! You are not above the law!”

“I AM the law!

Pfhahaha, you got me with that exchange. :rainbowlaugh:

Mmm~ the foot tease in this chapter was just perfect~ :heart:

Mmm yesssss I love dominant futa Twilight :heart:

Alright, let's see where this goes.

I love this style of fic, I sure hope you write more. I do enjoy how drawn out her resistance was, and how it actually felt like time passed, great work, looking forward to more updates. I'm not much of a writer but i have a similar fic on my account, and if I can help you somehow lemme know.
Awesome job!

Happy to know that my work can give inspiration to others. :twilightsmile:

Thank you.
When I was first imagining this fic I was planning to have Trixie's resistance last even longer. But as I was writing the third chapter it just felt right to have her surrender there. Otherwise, there would be little visible progress in the process of breaking her will. The later scenes would have to be all written in the style of "Trixie is doing a submissive thing, but ACTUALLY, she only does it because she has no other choice, not because she wants to", and I feel like that gets tiring really fast.

But at the same time, it seems like I've gotten myself in a bit of pickle because without proper resistance from Trixie the tone of the next few chapters that I have planned changes significantly. I think I'll make a POV switch to Twilight's to revitalize the story somewhat. I've also skimmed a bit through your fic and noticed something that I might pick up.

And to be honest, I'm not much of a writer either, this is actually the first piece of fiction that I've ever written. So any help from those who have more experience would be much appreciated. English isn't even my first language, so there can be some characteristic mistakes that I might not be able to notice.

totally agree with all your points, it may have gotten a bit repetitive. I think switching to twilights POV would be fun, if it also gives us a glimpse into what she has planned for the future. Though I will say I enjoy trixies super submissive pov, too

Why does the synopsis have a seemingly random line of numbers in it at the bottom?

Hmmmm. Ok slow burn. We going the Disney route of Stalchom Syndrome huh

One thing that you could do is have Trixie relapse at some point or make Pet Trix have internal arguments with her Pride. Idk I think it would be interesting.

There will be some more reluctance from Trixie, but I will portray it more from Twilight's perspective so that it's not the same as it was before.

Can't wait for chapter 4

Throw them into derpibooru and find out:trollestia:

Can't wait for the next chapter.

“I AM the law!


I love mindbreak. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Can't wait for the next chapter! Definitely keeping an eye on where this story goes!

Now that was worth the wait. These chapters just seem to be getting longer and longer, better and better.

Oh, Thank you. :heart:
It's so great to hear that you've enjoyed it.

This is incredibly good! I love the slow descent into debauchery and how Trixie is starting to falter before Twilight's commands. I seriously hope Twilight puts a foal inside her belly at one point or another

I love this so so much, thank you for writing. I really needed this last night and it helped a lot.

Twilight is so charmingly and gratuitiously dominant - the shameless disregard for her submissive fuckpet's wellbeing or agency is my favorite favorite thing and you're absolutely nailing it. I really loved all the gross spit play, and how you just directly run into it and overdo it and describe all the licking and swapping spit in full detail without a shred of hesitance.

Trixie's internal conflict and willpower totally buckling as she accepts her place is delicious. The narrative voice does a great job of being stacked against her, with it not even slightly condemning Twilight's actions or the moral questions here, instead propping her up as justified and sexy and enforcing the natural order. I really appreciate that so much, my brain when reading porn loves to be tantalized with straightforward comments on that.

I'd really really love to comm/support you, now that I see you opened those up, but I don't think I have any specific ideas that wouldn't sabotage all the novel surprises in your work I really love. Still, if you don't fill up in a week or so, or just want to go over and talk about how wonderfully amazing all your work is and let me flatter you, don't be afraid to reach out.

Thanks for writing, eagerly looking forward to more!

It's so nice of you to comment. I absolutely love it when people tell me their impressions! Especially when it's so detailed.

Thank you. :heart:

I have to agree with everyone else, great job on this. Though the majority of this chapter isn’t really my fetish, it’s clear to see you put a lot of effort into it, and it came out great! Excited to see more

Thanks for your kind words <3.

I'm interested, what have you liked in the beginning of the story and what would you want to see more of?

This was a great chapter, I'm hoping to see Trixie pushed to the edge of orgasm enough times to where the first release results in her not realizing Twilight is about to fuck her until she starts to insert herself into Trixie. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Will this get anything more?

Eventually, it will. Once it gets voted on my Patreon in one of the monthly polls. Unfortunately, I don't really have much time to do my personal stories otherwise, since I've got so many commissions to work on too.

Good grief, this is excellent :twilightsheepish:

hope this gets another chapter soon

So that's how it works. Damn it's times like now that I wish I wasn't broke so I could vote

Twilight channeling Judge Joseph Dredd for a moment there


When will you get back to writing this fic ?

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