Twilight devises a special plan for ensuring Trixie’s rehabilitation. Unfortunately for Trixie, it essentially involves turning her into Twilight’s obedient fuckpet.
I love this style of fic, I sure hope you write more. I do enjoy how drawn out her resistance was, and how it actually felt like time passed, great work, looking forward to more updates. I'm not much of a writer but i have a similar fic on my account, and if I can help you somehow lemme know. Awesome job!
9995512 Thank you. When I was first imagining this fic I was planning to have Trixie's resistance last even longer. But as I was writing the third chapter it just felt right to have her surrender there. Otherwise, there would be little visible progress in the process of breaking her will. The later scenes would have to be all written in the style of "Trixie is doing a submissive thing, but ACTUALLY, she only does it because she has no other choice, not because she wants to", and I feel like that gets tiring really fast.
But at the same time, it seems like I've gotten myself in a bit of pickle because without proper resistance from Trixie the tone of the next few chapters that I have planned changes significantly. I think I'll make a POV switch to Twilight's to revitalize the story somewhat. I've also skimmed a bit through your fic and noticed something that I might pick up.
And to be honest, I'm not much of a writer either, this is actually the first piece of fiction that I've ever written. So any help from those who have more experience would be much appreciated. English isn't even my first language, so there can be some characteristic mistakes that I might not be able to notice.
9995610 totally agree with all your points, it may have gotten a bit repetitive. I think switching to twilights POV would be fun, if it also gives us a glimpse into what she has planned for the future. Though I will say I enjoy trixies super submissive pov, too
9995610 One thing that you could do is have Trixie relapse at some point or make Pet Trix have internal arguments with her Pride. Idk I think it would be interesting.
9997726 There will be some more reluctance from Trixie, but I will portray it more from Twilight's perspective so that it's not the same as it was before.
Pls more
I would love to see twilight so dominant and tall,strong
Trixie is here to surrender
i need to draw this s#$t man
Up vote. Keep up the good works!!!
Hrrrrm
Mmm yesssss I love dominant futa Twilight
Alright, let's see where this goes.
I love this style of fic, I sure hope you write more. I do enjoy how drawn out her resistance was, and how it actually felt like time passed, great work, looking forward to more updates. I'm not much of a writer but i have a similar fic on my account, and if I can help you somehow lemme know.
Awesome job!
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Happy to know that my work can give inspiration to others.
9995512
Thank you.
When I was first imagining this fic I was planning to have Trixie's resistance last even longer. But as I was writing the third chapter it just felt right to have her surrender there. Otherwise, there would be little visible progress in the process of breaking her will. The later scenes would have to be all written in the style of "Trixie is doing a submissive thing, but ACTUALLY, she only does it because she has no other choice, not because she wants to", and I feel like that gets tiring really fast.
But at the same time, it seems like I've gotten myself in a bit of pickle because without proper resistance from Trixie the tone of the next few chapters that I have planned changes significantly. I think I'll make a POV switch to Twilight's to revitalize the story somewhat. I've also skimmed a bit through your fic and noticed something that I might pick up.
And to be honest, I'm not much of a writer either, this is actually the first piece of fiction that I've ever written. So any help from those who have more experience would be much appreciated. English isn't even my first language, so there can be some characteristic mistakes that I might not be able to notice.
9995610
totally agree with all your points, it may have gotten a bit repetitive. I think switching to twilights POV would be fun, if it also gives us a glimpse into what she has planned for the future. Though I will say I enjoy trixies super submissive pov, too
Why does the synopsis have a seemingly random line of numbers in it at the bottom?
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One thing that you could do is have Trixie relapse at some point or make Pet Trix have internal arguments with her Pride. Idk I think it would be interesting.
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There will be some more reluctance from Trixie, but I will portray it more from Twilight's perspective so that it's not the same as it was before.
Can't wait for chapter 4
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Throw them into derpibooru and find out
Can't wait for the next chapter.
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I love mindbreak. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Can't wait for the next chapter! Definitely keeping an eye on where this story goes!