Mistress Midnight

Aurora Dimmet #1 · Sep 1st, 2019 · 7 · 1 · Twilight ·

I want this to wind up with Midnight being like, "... Twilight wait, I didn't mean go THIS far. Twilight. Twilight tone it down. Fuck, now I have to save your friends from you."

Erebus Cantillon

Erebus Cantillon #2 · Sep 1st, 2019 · · · Twilight ·

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Oh Wintermist... I think you'll find this story quiet interesting.

ShadowLDrago

ShadowLDrago #3 · Sep 1st, 2019 · · · Twilight ·

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Alright, let's see where this is going.

Herald of Opera

Herald of Opera #4 · Sep 1st, 2019 · · · Twilight ·

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Probably my favorite feature of DeviantArt is that you would have been able to directly notify Wintermist by adding a single character to that comment and doing nothing else.

Erebus Cantillon

Erebus Cantillon #5 · Sep 1st, 2019 · · · Twilight ·

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I have too many accounts as it is.
Besides I know he (she?) ganders at the MC section of stories and will find this eventually.

The Great Derpsby

The Great Derpsby #6 · Sep 1st, 2019 · 1 · · Twilight ·

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So, will Flash and/or Timber make an appearance? You know, since there actually is a canon attraction to one of them...

Damaged

Damaged #7 · Sep 2nd, 2019 · 6 · · Twilight ·

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Not bad. A few spelling mistakes here and there, but readable.

The only thing that's a little annoying is how fast it all went. That's probably a personal thing, but the moment—

Another buzz in her ears, where the headphones still were. Twilight felt something inside her shift. Her shame was reduced, smothered. Her regrets and second thoughts vanished. The part of her that screamed that what she was doing was wrong was sealed and locked away somewhere dark in her mind, where she could not be heard. A tide of excitement rolled over her body, and she smiled, giving a low exhale. Then she looked up at Midnight, licking her lips.

—that happens, you've effectively erased Twilight and replaced her with a clone of Midnight Sparkle. Kinda takes the fun out of corruption when it is wham-bam-thank-you-ma'am.

keybounce

keybounce #8 · Sep 2nd, 2019 · · · Twilight ·

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Interesting. I do want to see where this goes.

With maturity comes the understanding that some things are more important than your own wants.

"I am everything you wish to be but are too scared to. I am every dark hidden corner of your mind, every wish and desire you don't accept as part of yourself. I am your every secret want, I am the side of you you hide from the world in shame." She leaned towards Twilight, her tone growing louder. "I am the you that's free from the burden of your morals, because it's not a problem for you if I'm something other than you."

Every one of us has this to some extent. Maturity is being able to recognize that our fantasies do not define us.

Sadly, there is no way that a 17 year old would have that level of maturity, no matter how intelligent. That part of the brain has not even formed yet at age 17.