A thousand years have passed. Celestia and Luna, revered as goddesses, have been deposed and slain at the cloven hooves of Grogar the necromancer. Equestria is in ruins. Evil reigns.
Grogar, before his death, imposed a new religion based on the worship of a woman named Faust, who rules as a mythical being known as a human over the ponies. The ponies interpret her to be ruthless and fierce, and worship her with living sacrifices, awaiting the day when she will come.
But after one of their profane rituals to appease her, an arch-priest of the religion wonders: if their religion is true, why has Faust...not come yet?
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Nice story so far. If I didn't know any better, that sacrifice scene was inspired by Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom. very nice ice touch!👍👌
Oh man, so in this AU Grogar escaped and killed the princesses? Wicked! I would hope to see more like this, because I am hooked!
uhhhh..... is there a next part?
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Nah. Just a one-shot.
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I like the concept of Lauren Faust being seen and worship as a goddess by everyone in Equestria. But the idea of Lauren winding up in Equestria with godlike powers and then every creature view and worship Lauren as a beneficent goddess have already been done before in many stories. I would like to see a story with a different take on the concept like Lauren wind-up in an alternative universe of Equestria that worship her as a dark but lawful goddess (like something similar to the Aztec's gods) with very enthusiastic worshipers that are eager to offer her live sacrifices but Lauren slowly convince them to change the way they worship her (like similar to The Road to El Dorado movie) .
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Like a "Road to El Dorado" sort of thing, right?
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yes. Sorta like Road to El Dorado but she would have godlike abilities and powers. And bonus points if Lauren wind-up in a maleficent looking form something similar to the image of her from your story but I kinda picture her being very tall (like a Amazon) and having six arms with reptile skin and many sharp teeth and red glowing eyes (which will make her look very intimidating even though she not trying to be) and maybe she have some weapons and she could wind-up in a very luscious and evil looking clothes. She could be worship as the goddess of bloodshed, battles or war or something and I can picture a scene with a villain like King Sombra, Queen Chryalis or Grogar showing up to invade Equestria but wind-up basically going "Oh sh*t its Luaren! Fu*k that!" when they see Luaren the Goddess.
'Ponish' has to be capital if it's a language name. Just like English, Spanish, or French would be. All in all, a very intact cultic religious atmosphere that felt more authentic than most stories striving for a similar thing. The mention of humans was odd (just because I'm used to stories mentioning them outright having a human character or tag) but considering that I've read some stories that use G1 allusions to Megan and the Mirror Portal, it wasn't anything immersion breaking.
The one thing that kinda bugs me is the default to the 'Faust' character. I get that it's a tribute reference, but it generally feels forced, especially when she's still just named 'Faust' instead of adapted in ways I've seen other stories do, renaming her and giving her an in-universe history. The stories Myths and Birthrights and These Flowers Never Bloom are probably the best examples of that done right. Once again, it didn't take away from my experience as a reader but doing something more original would have done more.