Change

Change is coming to the Ponyville Day Spa, and Rarity will not stand for it!

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IDontWatchMLP

IDontWatchMLP #1 · Jun 24th, 2019 · · ·

My word! That cover art...

It's great.

Skeeter The Lurker

Skeeter The Lurker #2 · Jun 24th, 2019 · 3 · ·

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All I can say to that. Well done.

~Skeeter The Lurker

CapNTilfy

CapNTilfy #3 · Jun 24th, 2019 · 1 · ·

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That got a good laugh out of me. XD

Thank you.

Muggonny

Muggonny #4 · Jun 24th, 2019 · 2 · ·

The CEO, now named Asphalt Holder because apparently the author wanted to fit the word "asshole" somewhere in his story, walked out from behind the door. "No."

My chuckle went through several phases. It started up, hit puberty some ways in, and suddenly died.

Neat story.

Hillbe

Hillbe #5 · Jun 24th, 2019 · 1 · ·

At this moment in time Rarity held Spike close, He comforted her to no end and as one of her close friends.
No, he was a friend no longer he was her most useful and important other half.

Rarity felt his warmth and eagerness to please her every need and now her need was to remove the stain of Asphalt .
She held Spike and screamed "Burn Baby Burn" as she laid to waste the plaid that festered all of Equestria.... Ashes Ashes I hate that brown.

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #6 · Jun 24th, 2019 · 1 · ·

Feeling better, she made her way downtown. Trotting fast, faces passed as she was spa-bound.

Really? Really?

The fashionista reared, then galloped at a ludicrous speed, surpassing plaid because it was gauche.

This, on the other hand, I'm okay with.

Aloe nodded. "She didn't get her nose bent that way from plastic surgery."

Likewise this.

Poor Primary Colors. Who weeps for the poorly mapped out OC?

The punchline is almost overshadowed by some of the bits I commented on, but it's still wonderfully horrible. Best of luck in the contest.

CapNTilfy

CapNTilfy #7 · Jun 24th, 2019 · · ·

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Thanks! Same to you!

Acadians6545

Acadians6545 #8 · Jun 25th, 2019 · · ·

"Because fuck you, that's why."

GODDAMIT ALUCARD STOP GOING ON WALKS TO OTHER DIMENSIONS I TOLD YOU I WAS GETTING YOUR GODDAMN DSL WITH NETFLIX IT'LL BE READY IN THREE HOURS NOW COME HOME.

Acadians6545

Acadians6545 #9 · Jun 25th, 2019 · 2 · ·

Rarity nodded in satisfaction, then left the office, rolling her eyes and scoffing. "Somepony Touch-a My Spa-ghett, indeed !"

I'm now bleeding internally from the laughter thanks for killing me asshole.

"I see. That's a shame." Rarity trotted over to him, keeping her smile until she got up close to him. Her horn lit up, and her magic levitated a silver pistol from her mane.

OH SHIT CRAZY BITCH GOT A GLOCK FUCKING RUN.

Crystal Static