Manehatten, a crime and filth-ridden city. It's always been that way, at least for one Philip Finder, a hardboiled detective and PI for hire. Lately, something's changed. He and his partner, former thief, and now security consultant Daring Do are hearing rumors of monsters in the streets. A slash of serial killings, victims frozen alive. Dealers, selling what are called "Gaia Memories" to unwitting citizens. And now a mysterious woman, called Shroud showing up at their doorstep claiming to know how they can stop the monsters.
Just two simple words that will change their partnership forevermore.
\ Fang! / \ Nazca! /
"Daring, are you willing to ride with the Devil?"
(Noireverse belongs to Ponyjosiah13)
(Warning, comments contain Spoilers. Thank you, Layton...)
Other than your weird name choice for the victim that was discussed briefly on Discord, good chapter.
Also, lets hope Philip isn't half-boiled (sorry, I had to).
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Yes, well the joke has to be made at some point I suppose. If you didn't do it, someone else would have.
9120060 Yeah, its good to get it over with, reminds me I need to link you to a section of a video talking about Shoutarou as hard-boiled sometime.
Now, count up your references: 1
Don't remember that part
Huh, clever nickname
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Just to be sure: Now, count up your references: 3
How can a Dopant cut himself on a broken window
Not a direct reference but still: Now, count up your references: 4
I know I'm grasping at straws here, but come on: Now, count up your references: 5
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Ok, so dopants are vulnerable to bullets. Ok, interesting. So these dopants are more like Showa era kaijin.
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hey Shroud, oh and: Now, count up your references: 11
I still have no idea how to respond to something like this. Seriously
Thanks.
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Huh, I think I know what video you are talking about.
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Remember Isaka and what happened to him after the Weather Memory was broken via Accel Trial? That's what I'm referencing there.
Yeah, the Villain in Glasses, the same guy who suggested Robert's catchphrase in Wild Access be the same as Captain Marvelous said I absolutely had to call Philip Lefty at some point.
Yeah, one of the things I learned in the writer's workshop I took was, and this ties into Dopants being hurt by bullets like old Shown era Kaijin was that somehow clues had to be left behind so why not a Dopant cutting himself to leave behind a blood trace?
Yeah, I would look to A to Z, the Gaia Memories of Fate for evidence of this as one T2 Memory using Dopant got hurt by a regular bullets from a gun, but since Philip and Daring and the rest of the police force are mere mortals faced with an army of monsters I had to water them down somehow.
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On another note, who do you think is the Ice Age Dopant? Tidal Fury, or Grape Vine? Both have probable cause motive-wise, with Grape having a restraining order against Cherry (Still not sorry about the name) and Tidal actually being a Gaia Memory dealer who knows, or at least thinks his wife is cutting off older affairs and does have a history of cheating on men.
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Ah, I just thought more along the lines of using them too much and then dying... and now I remember that that was actually was the case... Sometimes my nerdiness fails me.
Makes sense
Fair enough.
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Wasn't the only reference out of 13 you failed to count up. The Injury Memory, it exists and was shown if not named in the very first arc of Kamen Rider Double in the hideout.
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Oh wow, that is even for me too extreme. Wow, I'm just glad I counted 11of them. Seriously, a memory that was only on a computer screen? That is evil.
9120095 Hmm, both legitimate reasons really, I'd say probably Grape.
One thing I kinda found funny. When they were talking about his photos and then when we saw how he looked I was thinking of another photographer who likes pink and has brown hair. Granted that could be because I just finished his series today, so that might play a roll in this.
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"Damn you Decade!" It's seriously always his fault. Who knows, maybe he's the killer!
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Nah, then it would just be Narutaki
This seems interesting, but the whole noir setting is just not doing it for me and is making it more of a turn off for me personally. Still everything looks good, no major mistakes anywhere so I wish you all the luck on this story.
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Don't you know? ZI-O is the new Decade, and we're gunna see more of him soon!! Still, interesting take on the Kamen Rider Double story here. Daring Do as part of the 2 in 1 detective...and with Fang and nasca as the memories in question? I like it!!
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Hate to disappoint, but remember the way the Drivers were described. They were described as the Lost Drivers, aka the ones that Skull, Joker, and Eternal used. Still, the basic premise is the same, the one that lines up with the lyrics to the theme.
Upon meeting the ultimate partner
A miracle will be created (So We can make it)
Basically, while there will not be a two in one Detective, as I've opted to take the Kamen Rider Unicorn route here, it'll still match up with Daring and Philip being partners working in sync together. Think of it as like Takeshi Hongo and Hayato Ichimonji in a way.
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Whoops, I though it was one double driver and one lost driver so that the other guy with them could act like Accel...but that's another good point with having Hidari's mentor Skull and his partner. Good work all the same, and I LOVE Kamen Rider Unicorn, so I can't fault you there!
Ok, I'm tempted to count this up, but already did that in the first one and I don't count things double.
Now, count up your references: 1
Sorry, I only count up Kamen Rider references, but cute.
I have the feeling that is a nodded to another Philip, but not sure. Ah, screw it: Now, count up your references: 2
Bow-Chicka-Bow-Wow
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Huh, ok translated. Fine with me. And no, I don't count this as a reference because I don't want to give this piece of crap any validation in any way shape or form.
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\ Cobra! Cobra! Evol Cobra! /
"Phase one complete! Huhauhahaha!"
I think she already did
Oh and don't we forget: Now, count up your references: 7
X-tremly interesting
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By the way, love how you used that plot point from the movie
Lol, well that is interesting. Closet masochist it seems.
Ah, who cares. Makes sense. I personally prefer Kamen Rider, but hey, really not important.
Fair enough. Could have also gone with something completely original when you already change the name. something like: "Let's ride!" but this works too.
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You forgot a reference:
Constellation Killer = Zodiac Killer
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Like I said, I only count up Kamen Rider references.
Funny thing is if he had actually called him the Zodiac Killer I might have counted that one up.
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I swear that one was completely unintentional. I was just thinking of Blueblood's fur coat color, not Jun's attire.
Yeah, I liked how they completely fooled us for a time into thinking Maria was Philip's mother, aka Shroud before pulling the wool out from under us. I honestly liked both Maria and Shroud's storylines in Double, so I thought why not sorta make them one and in the same in a sense in this story?
Nah, as I said to Ponyjosiah and I requote: I have this rule, okay? Whenever I use my ponysona, make him the butt monkey of everything. So far in my stories I've put him through psychological hell, had him get killed via a fist through the chest and now he gets to be a serial killer.
Way I see it, if you're going to put your Ponysona in a story, make them hurt, or make them so dislikeable.
Fair, right?
And there's one reference you forgot to count up. Remember the underlined lines of dialogue when Daring slapped on her Lost Driver? Well, they linked to this.
(Okay, actually a Soundcloud version of the song, but still the same recording.)
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Completely unintentional I swear, I'd completely forgotten about the Zodiac Killer at the time of writing. I just thought Constellation Killer was a good name, and would make sense for a guy who works in astronomy to help Philip out with.
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I think that is a sign that you are watching too much Kamen Rider. Ah, who am I kidding, there is no thing such as too much Kamen Rider.
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Well, I wouldn't really count that as a reference, more a song that is in the story. Or I'm missing the part where you used lyrics from the song in the story.
This sounds like Sherlock Holmes to a T. The weird books, the musical instruments (Noting that Holmes played violin). And Daring Do playing Dr. Watson. like the thought.
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Yeah, one of Ponyjosiah's biggest influences for creating Phil was Sherlock if I remember correctly.
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There's actually another reason why FangNazca isn't a thing here. Remember how Philip (The Double one, not the Aussie) went beserk first time he used the memory? Can you imagine what would happen if the Fang Memory was combined with a memory like Nazca or Trigger in this story? Philip and Daring would become just as powerful and dangerous as the monsters they fight.
Now count up your references: 1
As long as she didn't travel through the Decade
Wow, rude.
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Huh, an interesting variant of the line, but it will not be counted up.
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\Luna!/ Oh and of course: Now count up your references: 4
That reminds me of continuing that one...
There is no such thing as evil without purpose or reason. We might not understand their reasons, but they are there.
Generally, T2 Memories don't shatter, but different T2 Memories, so not a problem.
I think you will fit right in...
Ok, I think this is from Kiva, but I really don't know. Never seen that series.
Yeah, I have to disagree. That mindset will get you nowhere. Take pride and happiness in the small happy endings. And the only way to receive a happy ending is to move forward towards the future because the only one who can make a happy ending a reality is you yourself! Don't let your past define you, take it and use it as a pathway towards a brighter future. Learn from it... God, does this sound preachy
Ah, who cares, this is a Kamen Rider story. I think I can allow myself some chessynes.
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Oh, you should be ashamed of that one. That's just bad... Not up to your usual material.
Yeah, the Noireverse Daring is, if you may notice, not exactly the most tactful of ponies at times. And considering White Lightning is meant to be one huge snarky joke relating towards certain pop singers Coughs out Miley Cyrus and Justin Bieber I think it's a well-earned remark.
Never understood why a memory that creates Illusions, bends bullets and whole lotta other crazy crap got labeled as Luna. Is there something to do with the Moon and people's thoughts about it throughout history that I'm missing here? Also, you failed to count up the reference with the soldiers the Luna Dopant made, namely the Masquerade Dopants AKA Museum's footsoldiers.
Yeah, it's from Kiva, called Destiny's Play. Sung by Wateru/Kiva's actor, and serves as the theme for his base form. And just like Finger on the Trigger in Double, it was even sung in-universe once. (For the record, thought of using Nobody's Perfect to fit the grim and gritty Noire atmosphere, but too obvious of a gag.)
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Oh, come on. How could I not use that? This was gift-wrapped for me.
Understatement. She really is not the most pleasant of persons to be around.
I can actually explain that one. Yes, the fact that the moon is something mysterious through the ages shaped the memories of the earth perception on it. The fact that people in the western hemisphere claimed that there was a face on the moon for ages and the countless legends only add to that. And since the powers of Gaia Memories are based on everything connected to the word makes legends be reflected in their powers. Oh and to add to that I'll just quote a reviewer: "Power based on illusions. Like the shadow of a moon." That being one of the parallels to Black and Shadow Moon.
And now I remember where I know that one. I recently just looked through Kamen Rider Insertsongs to see what they were about and stumbled unto this. On the side, I was looking for a song that had something to do with breaking fate. Oh and not to forget: Now count up your references: 5 or 6 if you count the soldiers thing as one 🤷
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And that's the exact reason you shouldn't have used it.
Huh. The more you know.
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Oh, you want something more original, more creative? Fine, you'll get it 😈
Would one need to read Ponyville Noire, Volume One for this?
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Not really, given it's sorta it's own alternate universe.
Okay.
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And now I have the image of Kivala draining people of their blood in my head... that is so adorable
Almost, almost.
He killed his victims by pushing a playing card through their stomach, truly gruesome.
Know what this is referring to. Truly devious shit some people can come up with.
You could say his magma is surging! I'm not apologizing!
Well, that is an interesting couple if I ever saw one
And on the next day, this article could be read everyone: "The mask of deception falls! Local detective and Masked Rider arrested for the theft of a motorbike! The police have decided to confiscate the source of their powers and hand it out trustworthy police officers. What the citicens think about the betrayl of their local heros can be read on page two."
And the solution to this is apparently to smash your head against the board till it breaks.
Can't blame them. This was next level stupid
"So, that was that chapter the only thing left to do is to say that this was- Hey! What was that?"
"Oh, this guy is great! He could be my royal spymaster! Wait a moment, I have to talk with him!"
"Oh no, you don't! You are not stealing another Riders power! Now get lost you, idiot!"
"Uh, bummer! Oh, well, see you when I'm king!"
"Yeah, yeah, whatever. Now, where was I. Oh yeah, liked the chapter."
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You know, I was beginning to miss you, think you were avoiding me.
I couldn't resist in either case.
No kidding, I only know about this thanks to the man being a villain of the week on Supernatural. Rather wish I didn't now, actually.
I've done weirder. Gestures to Wild Access
Nope, he's taking the Kouta Kazaruba route, and I don't mean becoming Space Jesus.
"If you can’t abide the howling winds, then find their source, and shut them down..."
Points to AN:
--He sometimes struggles to control his anger, and when he gets really angry, somepony's going to the hospital
--He lacks a certain cunning that Daring has. He's a blunt-force person: if he's hit with an obstacle, he'll try to ram his way through it rather than think about ways around or over it
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Nah, as I said, you won't get rid of me that easily. Just was busy playing through the most recent patch of my MMO of choice
Sure, but that can be possible without endangering the people he claims to protect
While true, the cops still have the right to arrest him after that stunt
Ah, I love these guys. Kinda like Combatman 2.0
At this moment Philip knew, he fucked up!
Yeah... About that...
Thank god Blueblood is not a snob... oh wait
well, that is X-tremly suspicious, wonder what their deal is
Now, count up your references: 1! (Yeah possibile that I missed some things... Add one for the Mascerades, so up to 2)
Well, fuck me with a hoof-full of sunfire! Didn't expect that here.
Now, count up your references: 3!
Now, count up your references: 4! Yes, I'm counting that up as well!
Now, count up your references: 5!
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Only without the annoying EEE! EEE!s. About as competent though.
May have, may not. But seriously, Foundation X? Gets so little love, compared to the cockroaches of the Kamen Rider Universe, Shocker and it's many incarnations. Dangerous as Shocker is, it's kinda gotten overused by this point as a big bad organization for Kamen Riders. I mean, come on, let other evil groups have more time in the limelight eh?
I'm not sorry, I'm so not sorry. I couldn't resist. Not after RuinQueen had a cameo of Blade in her fic.
Okay, this one you might have to explain to me. If this was a reference to anything Kamen Rider, it was quite unintentional. I just liked the line.
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Yeah, couldn't agree more. And hey, you actually call them cockroaches as well, nice. #Really, I'm still mad that they didn't use them for Zi-O as the big bad since you know a good way to get old monsters back and just bullshit a little bit.
Well, he is undoubtedly usable since dimension-hopper
It sounded close enough to count up your sins, so I counted it up, just for the lulz
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Actually, I generally compare them to Hydra. Cut off one head, and another will grow back. Now, about this Zi-O thing...
Rolls eyes On another note, commissioned RamenDriver (You might know him, think he did your Rider's art and he's doing a piece for Ruin of Justice) for a piece of Kamen Rider Nazca. Can't wait to see that, as does PonyJosiah interestingly enough. That took me by surprise, as he's not a Toku fan. ...Hell, I was surprised he let me do this to begin with.
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Quite fitting.
Yeah, does good work. Now he will have two Kamen Rider Natcas in his library ^^
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...Wait, what?
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Here is his original Kamen Rider Nazca, that was how I found him after reading Unicorn I thought, why not look for a Kamen Rider Nazca and I found his
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...Well, I'll be damned.
Why'd you inexplicably give Grape Vine an accent when he next appeared?
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...That was sorta an error on my part. I'm generally used to him speaking with that accent when I write him, and I'd honestly forgotten that in his first two appearances he didn't have the accent.
Sure, whatever you say, thank god there weren't a shit ton of Kamen Riders that were defea... Oh, wait.
"Now count up your references: 1!" Ok, I don't have watched Den-O until now, but I think something similar was Momotaros catchphrase.
"Now count up your references: 2!"
Oh yeah, sure that will help them. I think letting Daring and Philip handle this would be the better solution.
"Now count up your references: 3!"
Loves sometimes makes good people blind, it's a shame
"Now count up your references: 4!" But wouldn't this fit the "Arms" memory better?
Yeah, tell that the suspect, brilliant idea
"Now count up your references: 5!" And nice, "Virus", love that memorie
"Now count up your references: 6!"
What a... lovely woman.
"Now count up your references: 7!"
"Now count up your references: 8!"
Oh and of course: "Now count up your references: 9!"
Oh and here a little thing I made for fun:
“Armor Time!”
"Nazca!”
“Nazca!”
Time for the Finisher!
“Maximum Time Break!”
And last, but by far not least:
"Hādoboirudo! Manehattan o mamotte iru raidā wa... Nazca!" (Hard Boiled! The Rider who protects Manehattan is... Nazca!)