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Ashen Heart


Hey guys, just a random person writing for some fun. Stick around and see if you enjoy any of my works, always love to hear feedback. ^^

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Princess Luna has a daughter before being banished to the moon. Nightmare moon's return brings about a massive change in Twilight's life in more ways then one. How will Twilight handle the changes in her life while trying to save the rest of world from Eternal Night?

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 95 )

9085871
Thanks for the feedback cx I appreciate any I can get

One small note, you have a lot of cases where you use thee when it should be I or me. Thee is an Old English form of you.

Other than that, great start, tracking.

9116047
hehe guess I should've looked that up before hand. Thanks for pointing that out to me
and thanks for the feedback I appreciate it. theres a new chapter coming out on Sunday fyi

9116385
No problem. Looking forward to it.

This is really good can't wait for the next chapter.

Finally, someone writes more of this kind of story! Yay, can't wait for more!

Seems a bit rushed at times. I would have liked to see celstias reaction 1000 years ago to her being a aunt and more of the divide between them.
Good start though

9116387
Thanks i should have a new chapter up later today

9133034
Thanks cx and you shouldnt have to wait long i plan to have the next chapter up later today

9133433
I love the whole luna being twis mom stories its amazing to me. and you shouldnt have to wait long i plan to have another chapter out later today

9133459
You have a point but the way i saw it was that celestia never knew about it cause she never toke the time to listen to luna til after she was banished

9133912
Well little nebula had to be discovered by someone after NMN got banished?

9133922
i was getting there its gonna be in a later chapter. i dont want to lay all my cards on the table right away

Ah interesting approach :3 can't wait for the next chapter.

and thank you for the watch too.

She has the same lavender coat and the same purple and pink streak through her navy blue hair.

I'm really not sure, but I could bet her coat colour was different and only the pink streak is the same here.

I guess this first time i can forgive Nightmare for invading her mind because of why she did it.

9135190
Im sorry im a little confused about what you mean. Are you saying she doesn't have the purple streak? and that she's not lavender?

9134680
np and im gonna try and have it out by next Sunday.

9135579
No that wasn't what I mean, if that is the comment I think it is, then I was saying :

I believe that in the firs chapter?, I saw her havin a black coat or something and a pink streak.

I think when I had read the thirs chapter, I only remembered the pink streak and the lavender coat or what you have written looked somehow wrong.

9135608
Yea I'm still confused on what you're talking about. From what I wrote in the first chapter it was still lavender and with the purple and pink streak in the hair

9135667
I'm not sure what you don't understand, I just say that I believe, I had seen you giving a different description in the first one.
If that is not the chase, then it's no problem I believe.

I'm just not sure what is confusing you exactly.

I enjoying this already.

9/10 so far. Well done.

9135681
*shrug* ill have to go back and look sorry for any confusion still kind of new to story writing and this is my first big story that has ppl enjoying it

This is getting tense can't wait for the next chapter.

9180303
yay love the tension cx adds a good cliffhanger and intrigue XD and thanks for the comment I can't wait either I think I MAY have the next one out by Sunday but I don't know. I don't want to rush the next chapter and I have a bunch of make up work to do so it may be another week or 2 before I get the next one out.

Yes a new chapter!! As good as always.

This chapter came a tad faster than I was expecting... loved it :)

9188658
Yay I'm glad u like it so far cx

9189382
Hope tht wasnt too much of a bother lolz won't have another one up til probly next week though and glad ur loving it cx

This is a good... um story? Fanfic? Eh forget it. I love reading this. I bet the next chapter will be as good as the last ones. 10/10.

9194839
uh I don't know if its a story or a fanfic? wouldn't it be the same? and Im glad your enjoying it so much. and I hope everyone thinks so.

I see a great story in the making ... wonderful idea ... cant wait for next chapter

9199137
Thanks for the feedback XD glad ur enjoying it so far

9215965
Lolz guess I'll have to watch for the next chapter which should be coming next week. Been wanting to make this chapter worth the wait and cliffhanger

9246479
cant wait for next chapter ... hope its out soon

9280383
glad u like it so far and I hope to have another one out soon too.. just got to have motivation to sit down and write

9281237
well your doing great ... try to have a constant word count ...
you can do this i believe ya

9281558
thanks cx I hope you like the next chapter. Currently working on it some more and hope to have it out either today or tomorrow.

9135608
she was described as having navy blue/black hair (referring to mane) with a purple and a pink streak and lavender coat

9298342
This was about Twilight? I really don't know what this was about, now less than before. When did the last chapter happen anyway?

This was really good so far can't wait for the next chapter. :3 Keep up the good work.

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