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This story is a sequel to The Armada Trilogy I: The Lieutenant


The Armada Trilogy: Vol. II

Beautiful Eyes

In the sequel to the successful mystery and second chapter in The Armada Trilogy, Tempest Shadow soon discovers that her past is buried under dust and can only be rediscovered if she returns to her hometown outside of Equestria. Knowing the size of this mad mission of hers, Tempest joins alongside Princess Twilight Sparkle, Princess Celestia and her trusty assistant Grubber and travels across Equestria and the lands beyond back to her old home.

However, behind everypony's back, Celestia starts to have thoughts that perhaps Tempest is a pony not to be forgiven and thinks of ways on how she can completely end her evil deeds... both harmless and not.

Volume III (Coming Soon)


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Mrs Berrytwist brought Fizzlepop into a hug slowly just after her daughter had finished talking. It was a hug that told Fizzlepop that her mother would never give up on her, even if she had to wait for years and years for a miracle to happen.

Is the problem explained later?

ure, her friends probably were, but after what happened last time, would they ever forgive her for something that happened such a long time ago?

Soooo...was it her fault shes went away?, I think at least she was really sad bescauses of somesthing and maybe desperate, thinking things would be better if she was gone I believe.

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So here it is. The second Armada story! Note: it won't be as long as Volume I, but I hope you all don't mind that!

hhhhmmm maybe I'm slightly dissapointed to her it, I would like to have longer projects, maybe you can make the third one longer or slow down and still fill it with somes casual stuff?

I guess if this story has the same feeling/style as the last one then it wouldn't be so easy to just add something to it.

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Sorry, I'm not having a good day today. Volume II could have longer chapters, though, ranging from 3,000 - 6,000 words, depending on what chapter it is.

I still believe they could have a pretty easy time with making room for freetime if day would not have the helper syndrom.

Why would there be darkness in her? Was it Tempest? Did she still feel that Tempest should be punished? What was this grudge that she had inside of her?

This is where it finally got interessting for me.

I guess i wasn't exactly in the uhhhmmm flow of the story right now if you know what I mean. I still know what happened, but either I had to many stories or the wait was to long for this story and I wasn't really uhhmm there when I was reading this chapter. It was not as good as it should have been to me.
I had some interessting details that could be good later, but either I was waiting for Tempest, the chapter was really not my favourite, or I should have read the prologue a second time to get back into it before reading this.

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It's up to you if you want to read the prologue again or not. That chapter was just a brief flashback to Tempest's past. Chapter 01 is when the story really begins.

Celestia is, unlike in The Lieutenant, a primary character in Beautiful Eyes. She will appear through the majority of the story. Sorry if it didn't grasp you as much as it was meant to, I am a writer who's always trying to improve his writing. This is why chapters won't be released after only a couple of days since the previous one was uploaded. You're looking at least 4 - 7 days in between chapters getting uploaded, maybe more, as I am in exam period time.

My sincere apologies for any inconvenience caused.

Thank you to all who have read this story and thank you for helping it already reach over 140 views!

he was still seen as not a very popular pony in Canterlot, with lots of the residents giving her a deadly star back

how brave they all suddenly get.

I don't remember if it already happened, but I hope she meets her old parents.
I think I remember it correctly, but this was not just Tempest being a stubborn and stupid child running away right?, she had more or less a good reason or as good as it can be for a child right?
I remember Capper being an asshole, Tempest teenage childhood friends being angry in the last chapters they were seen, with her hometown being a really bad place right?

This chapter was nice enough, I kind of feared Celestia or Luna would do their famous stupid act and pull some kind of "we order you to do this and you to do this and we won't argue about it" bull****
I like it sometimes if it either looks like the main chars can make their own decisions or if it doesn't exactly looks like she is just ordering them I guess. It depens on the situation which makes it difficult to find a good example for what I mean suddenly.

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She will meet her old parents yes, and I'll try not to make Celestia and Luna "argue over anymore bull***t" either (excuse my language).

"How dare you talk to the Princess of the Night with such ruddiness! You are a mere mortal, and you dare talk to a goddess like me?!"

goddess of stupidness

I don't remember if that is Tempest job or something, but I don't like the way they force her to go there. I'm mostly against everything that happens against the main chars will. Especially if the princesses do that kind of stuff.

This is more or less about how they did it.

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I feel that adds the suspense of the premise of the story. I would like to develop this more later on in the story.

Comment posted by TheMysteryMuffin deleted Jun 22nd, 2018

at which border are they exactly that they needed to stop Tempest and Celestia, I only had read a short part fast.

I'm glad that you shortly adressed the problem with Celestia or was it luna? forcing her to go, but I'm not sure if it was much better that she decited to do it so fast anyway. However thank you for her free will.

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No problem! The next chapter will be a memory/dream sequence and then the story will progress again.

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That's okay, if it is with Luna i hope she isn't prying to much in Tempest dreams or plays the boss of Tempest dream. You know when she acts like the ponies have no say about their own mind and dreams.

I like it, if Luna should appear in the next chapter and is actually just nice instead of high mighty and playing the boss in the situation, then it should be okay. I just thought she could really treat her more like a friend instead of a boss in that situation. Maybe I make it up right now, but I get the feeling that most of the time Luna plays the tough guy in the dreams.

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Very true; Luna will be a comfort for Tempest, instead of another pony to confront.

Finally caught up! Activating tracking beacon...

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:twilightsmile: Thanks for taking interest in my story!

What is on Canterlots streets...

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The weather would be wet, so puddles, mud, streams of rivers; such of the like. Also, not talking about the weather, market stalls and lots of ponies. I hope this helps things clearer to understand the story. If you don't mind, kindly quote a sentence out of the story, so I know exactly which sentence didn't make sense. This will also help when I need to edit my story to improve it.

Realistically they're talking about a rather large undertaking... Any lands/territories that join up will need to be brought up to spec with Equestrian norms. That means new infrastructure being built, ideally to begin a rail-line leading to these places with associated facilities, equipment and staff either trained on-site or pulled form in-country. That first step alone would allow materials, ease of transportation, and whatnot from the heartlands to the outer reaches. From there it quickly speeds up once those simple facilities are in place, starting with potentially beating back the desert with a earth pony or twelve and reclaiming more land for living/farming. Other aspects like healthcare and trade would see a boon from such being implemented with ridiculous ease. You mentioned Nurse Redheart, so either the EHS already has a firm enough outer presence that they would merely benefit from lower shipping costs of medical supplies, and ease of staff rotations.


I can't wait to see what you do though

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You mentioned Nurse Redheart, so either the EHS already has a firm enough outer presence that they would merely benefit from lower shipping costs of medical supplies, and ease of staff rotations.

You may have just given me an idea to continue writing about the EHS. Hmm, my readers have such amazing ideas! Must listen to you guys so that I can improve my stories and writing.

After taking her arms away from Tempest's neck,

I think I know what you mean here, but it is still slightly confusing if you don't mean them to be anthros

Twilight used her magic to lift Celestia's body while Spike, Tempest and Grubber grabbed hold three of Celestia's legs and started to carry her towards the civilisation

I thought this was her moment to shine and carry the main amount of her weight getting under her body.

I stop reading for now, i got half of it now and I think I even remember what Celestias problem was .

I think I just remember that Capper was an asshole here.

I also discovered that Avon and Star Myth

Can't say that I know them which is slightly annoying to me, but I decite to wait and let you suprise me, I don't have the time to read who they are, I just noticed I had missed a few chapters from another story that had one chapter from last November.

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Oh okay, sorry. And no, they're not anthros.

Novo scowled at the mention of Twilight's name. That retched pony! She was the one she hated the most.

I enjoy it and hope she isn't forgiving her easily or that everyone wants her to forgive Twilight. I mean I would at least expect Celestia to maybe understand what Novos problem was and while she maybe would like them to make up, that she allows Novo to be angry.

How can you hate somepony who did that all for us? They're waiting for us, above the surface!"

While that was the result, I don't think that was her intention.

"Fine!" Novo snapped, perhaps too aggressively, "I'll go back to Mount Aris... and meet the princess."

NNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOO please don't tell me she is actually going to forgive her so easily, no matter how good they maybe mean it, sometimes certain characters in certain shows should still feel that what they did wasn't a good thing.

I can practically see Celestia prancing happily around the room repeating "it's my turn know yes, yes, yes", "I'm going to not tell anyone about my dreams, become feed up with bad emotions, going to feed Daybreaker with everything she needs, I'm so glad to have Luna as a example, it's much easier to become evil this way"
I tried to show that she is probably ignoring everything she should do to at least have a chance of preventing this to happen.

Oh good, there is still a chance that this will not turn out like a cliche and make make Novo feel the deepest regrets of how she was treating Twilight. It doesn't means I hate Twilight, but I like it if certain characters are shown with the flaws they have or if there are small consequences shwon.
I really hope you don't make everyone gang up on her because being mean to Twilight and let Novo keep her dislike, I don't mind if she is rude in a polite way towards Twilight, but I want Twilight to notice it, as well as one of the other characters to respect that.

I got a bit sceptic and what you have done with Capper and Tempest there, since it seems to try to show them a bit equal or Capper trying to blame Tempest for taking some sweet revenge for what he had done.

However nice chapter, I just wish that this would not turn out like usual and that you could do something like that. I mean Novo can still be friends with Celestia, not sure how she is going to react to Tempest but that would be a random shipping that I could enjoy right now.
Not sure if I maybe voted for Tempest x Twilight befor or any one else, just wanted to mention it.

Hmm... Seems Novo's still a bit sore over the events from the movies....

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Queen Novo won't be so easy on Twilight, don't worry. Probably might do some more lore on Novo in Volume III.

I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. :twilightsmile: thanks for sticking along with this story.

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Yes, she is. Novo's quite a character.

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That's good, I really liked Queen Novo, her and I think Tempest took me a bit by suprise when I was watching the movie, they are maybe not that special for others, but I thought they are already a bit...different from what you might expect in happy land that is Equestria. (even if I think they left Equestria in the movie.)

I'm glad that the other chars aren't getting the easy way out of the mess they created again.

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And remember I'm always open for suggestions!

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Well maybe I have a fresh idea next time I'm reading a chapter, sadly I can't read the whole thing again right now to get a good idea, but thank you for the reminder, I'm sure to mention at least where I hope or hoped the story to go.

I think the last thing was Novo having a problem with Twilight, well I hope that she isn't letting the others changing her mind about that.
I think she can be a little bit polite, to a point where you notice her hate or something, but also notice that she is not openly starting a fight if you know what I mean. No Celestia or Twilight saying sorry or trying to convince her should change that at the moment.

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Okay, thanks for the feedback. No convincing, then!

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Oh maybe let them try, I actually enjoy it when I can "read" see the look on their face and see that their happy hippo harmony nonsense isn't working for once.
I just call it nonsense right now, since I think this was a story that takes a little more realistic approach and can show that a problem doesn't always solve itself with hugging.

Oh I just like it if they get shown what they do wrong because of many stories that went out of their way to show how perfect they are or when Iremember the main chars that where bad ass people that never worked with everyone, then one group hug and they are open to the whole social thing.





For some reason it's covering everything in a "spoiler"

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Pretty much this story is about amending things that some of the characters have done in The Lieutenant, but in a way that I hope to stretch in Volume III.

"Twilight was only doing what she thought was right," Spike added, placing a claw on her shoulder, "even though, afterwards, she understood her mistakes. Twilight wouldn't have meant to hurt any creature's feelings. you believe us, right?"

That doesn't matters all the time I guess, I like it if they have to endure at least a bit punishment or feel that they made mistakes.

Skystar scoffed. "Well, duh! Of course, I believe you guys! I wouldn't be your friend if I didn't. I know that my mum can be like this sometimes, but she really is thankful for you saving our home from the Storm King, even if she doesn't show it."

:applejackunsure: Meh, now she will think that she already likes them enough.

"I don't understand," Celestia replied, "what's wrong with Twilight? She saved you from the Storm King, along with her other friends. Why would you be angry with her?"

I think I remember a sentence from a story :
"She saved themself and the ponies", the other creatures not having to fear them anymore was more a sideeffect.
I honestly start to believe that is kind of the true a bit.

"Could you, though?" Celestia interrupted.

Novo froze, with a guilty expression. "Well... perhaps, I could have. I was... scared, Celestia... and perhaps greedy. But, after I said that anyway, Twilight and her friends then went to hang out with my daughter, Skystar. Behind our backs, Twilight tried to take the pearl."

I don't remember every argument, but before I don't see the pearl acting as if it was the strongest artefact ever, I don't blame them for not just attacking the Stormking.

Before Novo had a chance to reply, Celestia added; "Then is it more important than your own daughter?"

not sure what this has to do with it, this is a bit like she tries to use her words against her.
I don'T like the possibility that every character tries to make Twilight look innocent.

It's not to important what happens afterwards, but I don't want her to be treated like innocent in this matter.

I feel like both of them did something bad at best, while I understand Novo, I probably have to admit that she either could have taken the chance or maybe think of a plan herself, but if she doesn'T know that she isn't killing her subjects during an attack I understand why she would be affraid to do it. The question why she did nothing before the events of the movie lead to the same answer at least to me.

I feel like as many more or less good reasons they try to find, why Queen Novo is the bad guy here, there also are a bunch of reasons why it's okay for her to feel like that and to acknowledge that Twilight did something bad for once.

I also just like it if the Alicorns aren't perfect.

Well nice to see another chapter anyway.

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Thank you for your notes and overall review. Some things I've indulged on:

Not sure what this has to do with it, this is a bit like she tries to use her words against her.

I wrote that because I found that when watching the movie, Novo immediately rushed to the pearl in anger first, and then grabbed Skystar's arm. Perhaps, in my vision, that Novo sees the pearl as something more important.

I don't like the possibility that every character tries to make Twilight look innocent.

Well, okay then. Not every creature will make Twilight an innocent character from the pearl incident. I could make Celestia angry at her for that, now that she's heard the truth.

I feel like as many more or less good reasons they try to find, why Queen Novo is the bad guy here, there also are a bunch of reasons why it's okay for her to feel like that and to acknowledge that Twilight did something bad for once.

Novo isn't a villain in this story. It's Celestia's thoughts that are making her judge Tempest that are the main problems that the characters will come across.

Glad you've enjoyed the story so far. Next chapter will go back into Tempest's past as Fizzlepop and then back to the present time. Always PM me anytime for any ideas you have. I'll credit you for them as well!

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I wrote that because I found that when watching the movie, Novo immediately rushed to the pearl in anger first, and then grabbed Skystar's arm. Perhaps, in my vision, that Novo sees the pearl as something more important.

If it is the scene I mean, then it probably was simply because they didn't hurt her daughter and Twilight was close to the pearl.

Afterwards as far as I remembe she only appears again after they beat the Stormking. In my eyes there was no danger for Skystar, but I'm not sure if you mean the scene where she stole the pearl or tried to do that.

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Well, okay then. Not every creature will make Twilight an innocent character from the pearl incident. I could make Celestia angry at her for that, now that she's heard the truth.

I guess that will be okay, it is like in stories where everyone loves a main char, I like mixed reactions.

Okay I PM you if I think of something.

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Sure, hun. PM me anytime when you think of something, but be in mind that I live in the UK, so time differences may interfere with messaging me, as I may be off my computer by then. However, I'll always be able to reply the following day.

Very well done!
Though.. Ouch, Novo, tad bit harsh there...

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She's not going easy on Twi, that's for sure! Also, thanks. :twilightblush:

Very well done as always! Young Tempest is so adorkable, lol

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Aw, thanks! You've made my day! Thanks for sticking along with my stories! :heart:

Oh sorry I think I forgot about the story for a while.

Hhhhmmm this is all about blaiming Novo again.

I understand that twilight did a good thing in the end, but they kind of all say let's ignore what she did because she only did it to do something good, that is what everyone is thinking.

It's a bit like Celestia saying "sorry that I killed your friend", then everyone just forgives her because she did it to do this or that.

It seems that you at least didn't forget what I talked about even if I forgot to write a suggestion for you.

I never want them to have a too big punishment, but it always seems like they get away with everything.
However thank you for her keeping her opinion on Twilight.

It's just a bit unfortunate that this meant switching out my favourite seapony with the well I don't really know how much I like Skystar.
I think I enjoyed her personality but the new younger Hippogriff/seapony was a bit to much for me.

"No!" Tempest replied, yanking the wheel to her side, "Home is this way!"

Good job, normally I would have to read that Tempest wouldn't be able to do a thing, but I like small things like that already, because others don't even allow that much to happen, if someone goes up against an Alicorn no matter how strong.

Not a bad chapter, but I wasn't planning to read the whole thing right now.

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Throne dang it, Novo...

Novo did it again!

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Hhhhmmm this is all about blaming Novo again.

No, I wasn't implying that. I thought you wanted Novo not to be so easy on Twilight. Also, it gives some more areas to cover in Vol. III.

I never want them to have a too big punishment, but it always seems like they get away with everything.
However, thank you for her keeping her opinion on Twilight.

You're welcome!

Good job, normally I would have to read that Tempest wouldn't be able to do a thing, but I like small things like that already, because others don't even allow that much to happen, if someone goes up against an Alicorn no matter how strong.

Not a bad chapter, but I wasn't planning to read the whole thing right now.

Yay! Thanks for finding some time to read this.

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