After weeks of searching, Rarity had just about accepted that Opalescence was gone for good.
Until one night, her feline companion returns.
And she's not quite the same as when she left.
The feline monstrosity you see in the background of the cover art comes from here:
https://almanegra.deviantart.com/art/creature-wip-1-664968505
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This is the dark souls of fimfiction
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Haha, hopefully you found it somewhat spooky
Yikes! This was expertly written, prepare for a like and a follow!
9238690
Thanks a ton for the support!
should this have the death label as well?
9238728
np!
9239049
Well, the death is off screen, and not described. But I'll add it anyways
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*is creeped out*
In other news, that was expertly written. The only criticisms I have is that it was a little too story, having too high of a ratio of the setup part, and the actual horror part, and how some of the descriptions repeat/mimic each-other...
How the word chaotic was used to describe both the room, and her mane, and how the word pale was used to describe Fluttershy's coat and mane color were the only times that this stuck out though...
Otherwise, you are a great writer. I can tell just from that much... now back to reading myself towards a T-shirt...
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Thanks for the criticism, and I can totally see where you're coming from. I also felt like the actual horror section was perhaps a bit too short and ultimately, somewhat disconnected from the first half of the fix.
I usually try to avoid repetition during descriptions, but sometimes a few words manage to slip through.
I'm glad you were spooked though, and thanks for the compliments.
9239939
Still, I would be interested in a sequel...
Great story! Even more of a reason to be a dog person.
I did a reading of this story on my YouTube channel, here's a link for it if you'd like to check it out https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hLUun3yTV5E&t=6s
so what happened to Opal?
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A feline metamorphosis of course!
9940275
so she naturally turned into a monster?
Hmm, not bad. I like the idea, but the grammar and punctuation were very distracting.
Well done, anyway.
9239939
What happened to opal? How did opal turn into this thing? Was that thing even opal or did it turned opal into this? It would be great to have a sequel and or prequel explaining questions.
If I’m being honest, I have 4 cats, and am waiting for the day when one of them decides to just up & eat me.
So Opalescence is now MLP's Gorefield?