Legions bow before him! His name is whispered in terrified awe by even the greatest of clans and all know that none among the Horned Rat's children are as favoured as the magnificent Greyseer Thanquol (according to him, at least). His latest plan is ready to come to fruition and the stupid elf-things will face the unmatched might of the skaven horde, led by the equally unmatched genius of Thanquol of course.
Obviously the original plan needed some alteration. He actually meant to come to this strange land full of filthy sunlight and cheerful equines, he did! It's all part of his plan, that's right, and everyone else is just too stupid to realise its genius. None understand the brilliant master plan an intellect of his caliber produced. Yes, Greyseer Thanquol will let these pony-things teach him their secret magic and when he has learned all he can, improved by skaven ingenuity, he will use it to enslave their kind and return to Skavenblight at the head of an army!
He just needs to decide whether Luna or Celestia will make a better mount from which to gloat. Oh, and work out how their "Friendship Magic" but it will be Thanquol's!
A Warhammer Fantasy crossover, obviously. ON HIATUS unlike I get the feels for writing it back.
An experiment that I'll update in bite-sized chapters written when I need to let off some steam by writing a short and simple piece that amuses me. And nothing amuses me like Thanquol.
Will add tags as they become valid.
Geez wonder what his encounter with Diamond Dogs would cause. Liking this so far.
946701 Expect vast amounts of posturing, casual arrogance that would make Trixie look shy and humble and intense amounts of hypocrisy. If he ever does run into the Diamond Dogs, well, for all his madness Thanquol IS one of the more powerful skaven spellcasters and certainly does seem to the favoured of his god (of course, his god is a dick).
946717 I think I read the book a few years ago of that character. It will come back to me that he is highly into himself though he is the cause of so many of his own downfalls. A yelling argument with Trixie, Gilda, or both could be quite humorous (Especially since enter this realm could cause his magic to be restricted). A maniacal tag team with Discord could be funny (Even funnier if their rampage wasn't even near a settlement or that it caused more good then bad).
946732 It gets better. Thanquol gets his own spin off books, 2 so far which I rather like. In one of them a Slann (most powerful living magic-users, lead the Lizardmen of Lustria in their unending service to the Old Ones. These guys are able to rearrange a mountain range and did so...without telling the dwarves living there) let him go when he could have easily killed Thanquol. Why? Because he saw the future (as mathematical stuff, since they're pure order and super-geniuses) and saw that Thanquol was, in fact, the great enemy of the skaven race. He would do more damage to their cause then anyone else. Ever. By accident! That's how egomaniacal Thanquol is.
So him causing more good than bad by accident while trying to doom everypony would fit that hilariously well, and I think Discord would find the chaos of that gut-busting even if it undid his own work.
Well, since I know next to nothing about Warhammer in general, I'm flying blind with this one as well. From what I can tell, though, Thanquol is an Idiot. A crazy, stupidly powerful, drug-addicted idiot. The man's as bad as Starscream
. As stupid as he is, his trip through the fabrics of reality had better have robbed him of most of his power or that dark tag will swiftly be joining the others at the top. Something tells me that he is a bit of a sadistic jerk.
946876 Your instincts are spot on, actually. On all counts. Despite his madness, Thanquol can be shrewd at time and is skilled at 'misunderstanding' orders for his own gain. Things he's sent to do often fail and he's not only still alive but well known (and feared) while part of a race that kills for both real and imagined slights, all are determined to blame someone else for their own mistakes or flaws and are constantly scheming against each other.
The skaven is a race of Starscreams. Seriously, every one of them. They breed like, well like rats and its only their constant self-destructive need to backstab that keeps them from simply over running the surface world (their empire extends underground across nearly the entire world).
So yeah, he's all the things you said just like the rest of his race, but is also insane. Plus he has a sort of cunning and insane sixth sense to him. Not to mention impossible luck. That drug he's addicted to, warpstone-dust? Its essentially raw chaos/evil given physical form, even a pebble of warpstone can mutate a human over time into an insane monstrosity. The insane dimension of Chaos where dark emotions fuel the Dark Gods of Chaos, the Ruinous Powers, is also the ultimate source of all magic, so its pretty damn powerful.
And since he draws his magic from raw evil and he's in the FiM world...well, yeah, he'll have trouble with any magic. Wouldn't be much fun if he went around flaying ponies alive, now would it?
EDIT: notice how often I use the word insane? Crazy simply doesn't convey the right feeling.
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OH my god
someone did it
Yep, knew this would show up. Sooner or later.
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I know a little about the warp from 40k. I don't play but you can't be on the internet without someone eventually screaming something about blood for the blood god. Something tells me that his addiction is going to turn around and bite him in the ass, because he isn't going to be finding any warpstone-dust in Equestria. So will he supplant his addiction with something else or will he just go even more nuts from withdrawal?
I fucking hate you nothing personal its just your skaven im lizardmen and its just nature
I noticed that you made a couple of errors ("he quickly swallow" and "Nothing happen,") but otherwise good work.
I particularly liked the way you wrote Fluttershy and I approve of Skaven FF on principal.
948183 Meh, Lizardmen are the other army I have.
947632 Undecided, we'll see how things turn out.
948895 Glad Fluttershy was accurate and yes, I love when Skaven turn up. Mostly because they're hilarious.
Why do I feel like talking in the third person when reading this?
Since her place is so close to the Everfree it would be quite the amusing concept of him wondering into it when he should have stayed in bed. Reaction to Timberwolves or any of the other Native beasties may vary. The encounter with the other Mane 5 will be interesting (Rarity will most likely burn his clothe just to make something acceptable [Bright girly colors most likely]) (Twilight would most likely try to study him [God knows anywhere else in the multiverse and he would have been dissected]) (Rainbow Dash I don't see much of her wanting to be anywhere near him [Brave front but truly scared to death]) (Applejack will most likely buck him mistaking something happening as something else [Based on size ratio hit in the nads would more likely occur then getting hit in the head]) (Pinkie is the most difficult one to figure out but the thought of her slightly breaking his mind is a very high probability).
Another question popped in my mind. Since he is a Greyseer or if my mind is mistaken couldn't he take control of a certain amount of Rodents (Lesser minded Rodents [but this is Equestria and they seem a lot smarter then anywhere else]).
952314 Because of Autocharth (the Magnificent)'s writing. Thanquol doing something stupid when he's been told to do the smart thing would be perfectly in character, mostly because he's insanely spiteful.
You raise an interesting point about controlling rats. Generally that ability is attributed to spells and such or the blessing of their god (for nearly all skaven magic users other than Clan Skrye's warlock engineers worship of the Horned Rat and magic are inseparable).and Thanquol lacks pretty much any magical energy and he's likely going to have a hard time getting anymore. He's in a sugarbowl reality and he draws most of his power from raw evil. It just doesn't work right.
As for the other Mane cast's reactions, well you got at least one of them spot on.
But I won't say which.
While I was snacking on some chips I had a thought. The Derpy/Ditzy encounter will always (being how most fans look at it) being a crash encounter. That said he could pull what powers he has thinking he is taking away her uniqueness as punishment (her cross eyes [Fixing em]) and while she is confused after the encounter later down the line certain ponies will mistake him as a mystic healer or something. That was one idea of his evil actions being mistaken as good.
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Niiiiice. I really like the 'mystic healer' thing. Maybe not a straight rip of that idea, but if you don't mind I might garner some inspiration from that.
952756 I act as a muse so sharing ideas is what I do. I think I just blew my own mind.
At this point, I'm fairly sure that the only thing that Thanquol is lord of is slapstick.
I have a fanfic idea of my own but i need to ask you this as you are probably more familiar with skaven lore and behaviour
What would it take for ikit claw, thanquol and deathmaster snitch to work together? A planned assult on Altorf? An invation of Ulthan? Over running the dwarves?
Also your fanfic kicks ass
Thanquol's insanity level? I like to think that the lords in the skaven armybook are kinda smart in the meaning of advansing the skaven race but i generaly give skaven to much credit
The only thing I could think of that could regain some power for him is the Poison Joke Flower (The side-Affects would have to be very random maybe a coin toss to determine some backlash from ingesting it) (That would be the closest to chaotic essence).
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This is good, and you should feel good.
Ooo, I like madness.
Now the only thing I could see making this perfect is two things.
He starts calling fluttershy boneripper or he finds a new boneripper
Or
A certain red furred dwarf-thing and his man-thing pet make their way into equestria
Oh I can so see thanquo using the ponies friendship against gotrek and Felix too his advantage .
To the ponies gotrek looks more horrifying then thanquo and all they would see is some creature trying to murder a helpless invalid
Oh and is fluttershy speaking reikspelian or skaven
The latter makes sense because she can talk to animals and skaven are manifestations of the horned rat
991492 Fluttershy's a bit too small to really be like Boneripper, but you never know.
To be honest I didn't put much thought into how they were communicating. This is just something I've been working on idly while at Uni (also to practice writing physically since before now haven't done it very often really). Skaven are basically mutated rats via the guidance of a daemon-godthing (The Horned Rat, obviously, who I'm guessing was a powerful unaligned daemon with a thing for rats who wanted a race of his own to worship him and make him a proper daemon-god).
Now you mention it I guess I'll just say they're communicating via....hmmm....
Magic? A Wizard-Did-It? Something like that. Consider this a Shrug of God.
As for Gotrek & Felix (and Kat!) well that hasn't been decided. It depends on how amusing it feels to me, and it might be hard to do that without making it all dark. Since Gotrek drags violence around him like a city-sized shadow. But you do have a point, he does look frightening.
Thanquol will seem strange and rude but he has 2 factors helping him seem not evil to them: survival instincts because he lacks magic and is alone (above ground and all skaven fear open places that a-something-phobic) and his incredible, insane luck. So yeah, Gotrek would looke pretty scary compared to him.
Oh good god. I know you had previously said that he has a superiority complex, but after reading the several paragraphs worth of his delusions of
single-handedly enslaving ponykind and using them to dominate his race makes me realize just how screwed up his brain is. I'm going to laugh so hard when his plans collapse directly on his head.
Predictions for how the other members of the Mane 6 will react:
Applejack: Her intuitiveness will cause her to almost immediately pick-up on Thanquol's untrustworthy nature and insanity and will immediatly beat the
ever-living hell out of him. She might be convinced, after the initial beating, to not attack on sight.
Pinkie Pie: Throws him a party as usual but later, as a prank, pops up out of nowhere in her ponyslayer outfit screaming one of Gotrek's famous battle
cries, scaring the musk out of Thanquol once again.
Rarity: She is completely and utterly aghast at Thanquol's filth and rags and vows to clean him up and make him look respectable. Sadly, the effort is
futile and only succeeds in endlessly annoying Thanquol and leaving Rarity a broken mare.
Rainbow Dash: Thanquol knows how to deal with this type. He immediately switches to sycophant mode to get on her good side and it works, flawlessly.
Hey, the universe has to throw this poor bastard a bone sometime right?
Twilight Sparkle: They will get along decently at first, until Twi tries to confiscate his warp stone dust because of the faint evil aura she senses from it.
1009251 I take it I succeeded in getting the right impression for Thanquol across? Hehe. I have to admit I had fun g
I won't say who, but you got at least one of those spot on. The others, well, spoilers.
But yes, his plans always collapse on his head. And the head of every other skaven in the area. And every other bad guy. But he always survives. Thanquol always survives somehow. Its his thing.
This is awesome, my two favorite races in the Fantasy world is Skaven and Lizardmen. Now I totally wanna write a Saurus in Equestria fiction... Still I am a 40k player myself so perhaps I will stay with my Eldar kin. Best wishes! Excellent read.
1017161 screw your lizard men with your Stegadons, Carnosaurs and cold blooded rule.
but one think is good about you, your distinct lack of initiative
*purple sun of xereus*
bye bye, send a card from the chaos wastes you freak lizards
1019423 Can you please try to keep comments on topic in some at least, not simply to troll someone for mentioning they like another army. Your comment has nothing to do with anything.
1020154 true, it doesn't. im sorry
your story is good. i really look forward to the hilarity that is thanquol trying to make friends with the mane 6
no grammar nor spelling mistakes detected (good job)
if he manages to get access to the magic of friendship which acts as the winds of magic does in the old world then will he be able to cast aggressive spells? seems kinda weird to fuel a burst of warp lightning with friendship power.
Poor Rarity, either she fainted because Thanquol's filthy rags are a blight on her fashionista sensibilities or she fainted because Fluttershy just brought A GIANT RAT into her store. I'm guessing it's the latter.
Also, I don't think shapeshifting will get rid of plaque. Sorry Autocharth.
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Don't worry about Thanquol getting access to harmony magic, he won't even be able touch the stuff for two reasons. The first being that Skaven, and Thanquol especially, are warp based creatures meaning that chaos and evil are a part of their being. Best case scenario of him trying to channel harmonic magic would be that the energies would cancel each other out resulting in nothing happening. The worst case scenario is that it would be like mixing an alkali metal and water. The second reason why Thanquol won't be using Harmonic magic is that he is a freaking sociopath, and an incompetent one at that. The closest he can come to friendship is a temporary alliance with someone until his sudden but inevitable betrayal..
1027972 Hit the button on the nose there with why Thanquol could never use harmony magic. He's far too evil. The closest thing to a 'friend' he can understand is a servant who he has under his full control. I'm trying to hammer into all this how hard it is for Thanquol to 'play nice' since he's evil. Its just that he's as self-preserving as he is evil.
And curses, why not? Shapeshifting would already mean I'm ignoring the laws of physics and science so how unfair would it be to miss out on some benefits like that?
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Usually when someone polymorphs, the dirt and grime they have accumulated sticks with them. Meaning that they are just as filthy as they were before the shapshift, it's just spread over a different surface area. The gunk isn't going anywhere unless you magic it away.
1029522 Damn you and your reason. Logic foils me once again! Wait, we're talking about logic with magical shape-shifting? Besides, I can just shape-shift the wound away, make new healthy teeth!
Still, maybe I should stop moaning about theoretical non-existent magical shape-shifting and finish the post-story notes for chapter 10 of Justice Itself and send it to the pre-reader.
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You're almost done with the next chapter of Justice Itself? Awesome, I eagerly await you're posting of it once the pre-reader is done with it.
1029660 Correction, I AM done with chapter 10. Just sent it to Merujea. Hopefully she'll be able to get it back to me real fast because I'd like to post it as soon as possible. I'm be putting up a blog post sometime soon just to let people know that chapter 10 will be out within a week, hopefully more like a few days.
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Well part of my prediction for Rarity has come true. I guess I'll wait and see if she succeeds in making Thanquol presentable (doubtful), or utterly fails in her quest.
I love this beyond reason. Now we need a side story on the Watermelon family...
Geez him losing consciousness during this incident and waking up feeling weird (Truly Clean for once [Add the smell coming off of him that will cause most males to feel grossed out {Spell check kept giving me the wrong word I was looking for}]). Then finally add to the fact he will most likely be naked and the remaining powder disposed of like his clothes in a furnace. Forced rehab and mood swings away.
SPA PONY NINJAS!!!
1199811 I think everyone knew Rarity would be aghast at the sight - and smell - of Thanquol. Unfortunately, he's a sniveling little kiss-up who is willing to be 'polite' if he thinks it will get him power. The main problem for the ponies is that, unlike just about everyone at all save ignorant peasents in Warhammer, they don't know not to trust skaven. Even Chaos won't ally with them because they know each and every skaven is about to backstab each other and any 'allies'. The ponies are, unfortunately, extremely friendly and trusting.
Muwhahaha.
1199866 Beyond reason? Well, that is rather flattering. I've got a fanatic/zealot! How awesome is that?! I can give you a snippet of the Watermelon story: when they got into fruit-fights with the apple clan they tended to win, mostly because their fruit is larger and much, much harder.
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Watermelon also tends to get all over the place when smashed.
Love it, simply love it. The humour is great and it is really well-written.
Keep up the great work.
Awesome sauce. Now question, what is better, a Bloodbowl Lizardman Team, Korxigor, or Saurus coming to Equestria?
I should begin by saying that while I am aware of its existence, I have little to no idea what Warhammer is.
That being said, I was nonetheless intrigued by the notion of an insane warlord being brought into Equestria.
Now that I have completed reading this exquisite work of fiction, I must say that I am pleased. Thanquol provides a gruesome and bloody contrast to Equestria's happy utopia, even if he is really a glorified drug-addict. His dialect made me have a nostalgic flashback to the early years of BIONICLE, as the Le-Matoran similarly conjoined words such as 'quick-fast' or 'Sky-flying'. There was another nostalgic feel when I compared Thanquol to Cluny the Scourge, the giant, one-eyed rat general from the Redwall Series.
I'm curious though. Does his culture have any reference to the Rat Kings of old world folklore? And more importantly, did he at any point in his life have a bitter rivalry with a nutcracker?
And one other thing. You have to have him meet Trixie at some point. A battle of the egos is too irresistible to pass up.
Well my prediction for Rarity was at least partly right ( 1009251 ). She was indeed aghast at his filth and rags but she succeeded in making him presentable.
1498529 Its great to see such an interesting and in-depths comment. Glad you're liking the story, its rather fun to write.
I'm not sure if there are references to rat kings actually. The closest I can imagine are some of the things produced the Clan Moulder, whose who thing is mutating things to make weapons and occasionally they created what are basically big balls of fused, in-constant-agony, flesh.
Nearly, though its less 'nutcracker' and more 'death-seeking grudge holding dwarf Slayer and his human companion'. Don't worry about Trixie though, I would never miss such a opportunity for ego-to-ego combat.
1499332 Somewhat. He doesn't smell anymore but his lips are still disfigured and he still twitches and glares with his beady little eyes.
Just got through the six chapters, another great Warhammer crossover! For those that may not be aware of it, check out O.i.E (Ork in Equestria) for some great WH 40k goodness!