"My life has run its course; I've planted my hooves firmly on the ground and ridden the ups and downs to my greatest potential. I've loved, I've hated, I've cried, I've laughed... but most importantly, I've overcome."
A simple life, floating on the wind.
Brace down and buckle up as you are taken along on the wicked rollercoaster ride that is Vinyl's life. Stand beside her as she first learns of her talents as a musician. Hold her hoof as she braves whatever life throws at her while buskering on the streets of Manehatten. Cry with her as she faces old fears and overcomes new ones. Cheer and revel in her marriage and success. Laugh wholeheartedly at her comedic small mistakes and happenstances.
Most importantly however, understand the rocky and twisted road that shaped the DJ we have all come to know and love.
Dude. This is going to be good. Hands... er... hooves down.
This is great a good concept and good plot and writing so far I'll track it. :)
*clicks first chapter* let's do this!
Woah, good hook
Ok, suggestion time. (forgive me if I come off as a jerk)
As Vinyls messy face came into view a wave of laughter rose, surging forewords to assault her eardrums. (Missing apostraphy)
Also, when you want time to pass, you can use the code (hr) <--- replace the parenthesis with brackets though.
Thoughts should be in italics. The command is (i) <Words> (/i) <------ Again replace with brackets
Indent your paragraphs. Just press the 'tab' key every time you start a new paragraph.
Also, the way you repeated the description in the prologue seemed redundant, as did the constant use of the word "orb". Instead of "orb" you could use "sphere" or "ball of light". I hope this managed to help, should you take my advice.
Suggestion time over.
It was very well done and you have gotten another fav, like, and watch.
864072 No problem. I'm always looking to help people out. I expect it from my readers, so I try to give any advice I can.
Though I must say.... your description is quite catching, as is your coverart.
I promised I'd come post my comment after reading what you had so far. I really can't wait to see where this story goes.
I'm assuming you are doing forshadowing and flashbacks for a reason?
It's really well written and i'm sure im gonna cry a few times.
Can't wait to see how it turns out.
This...is...super!
Wow,
this was fucking amazing. 
You never seem to disappoint syn3rgy ...
Keep writin'
AMAZING!
Very impressive.
The only thing I gotta say is it seemed a little rushed.
It went from her as a filly 
to her being older
. I don't quite care about that but it popped in ma head.
Anyway, good job and keep readin':eyup:
Great job so far! It is the littlest bit rushed, but nothing that can't go unnoticed. Also your detail and understanding of the character's personalities do show in your writing. I can't wait for more to come of this magnificent novel. I will be preparing myself for any other sad scenes that are to come because it seems you are buttering us up a bit to shoot us down with a bit of sorrow, which would be a really good technique. Don't give your readers too much of what they want for too long. Try shooting it down with a bit of a sad scene, but not too much that will cause too much of a scene. For example: have someone steal something of hers or have those bullies appear in a second. Those would be really easy to throw in as moments of sorrow, but easy to recover from in an instant.
You don't have to take my ideas or anything, it is simply just my interest to see in some stories like this.
Anyways, keep up the great work, and I will await for more chapters!
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
A straight Vinyl? I haven't seen this in a while.
Inconsistent in indentation. I'm really enjoying the story, though.
still liking the story.
870134 Lol, we shall see. I have the whole story, in my eyes, already thought of, and I am ready to compare how close or how far my imagination of your story will turn out from mine.
(I believe it will be different, but I would be happy to be introduced to such new ideas.)
I like it. =)
Just a little nitpick:
'in the process of doing so.' is redundant.
Here are two better endings to the sentence:
...even if doing so killed me.
...even if I were killed in the process.
I hope that helps.
Great job! You are doing fantastic. Just remember, whenever you have repeating words (usually repeat over 3+ times) try switching them up with words that are similar, this way it catches the viewers eyes more. Only advise I can give you, everything else is perfect, keep up the good work.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
Very good. It seemed a little rushed but it's all good because this chapter seemed to flow well and all.
anyways, good job and can't wait for the next chapter 
and keep readin' 
take a mustache
Vinyl isnt pure white, her coat is off-white, the animators actually gave out her exact shade, its a very pale yellow
Sweet, a straight Vynil.
I was getting tired of hearing about Vynil-octave.
Another great chapter. Cant believe that just happened
Cant wait for the new chapters that follow.
keep readin'
Wow, it's amazing to see where this story is heading. It's very well written and thought out. It flows nicely too.
A question to the author, is this going to have Octavia in it or not? If not I'm perfectly fine with it, just wanted pieces to the puzzle is all.
Where is Octavia?
It's sort of Fannon now that Tavi and Vinyl are a pair. Most people won't see it any other way and if you are writing this story based around the Fannon, I know where it's gonna go... To an extent.. :D On the other side, I can still be happy if Vinyl stays with the O.C. you are using. It's refreshing to see her shipped with somepony else.
Great job, you did an amazing job on this one. Definitely unexpected events have occurred in this chapter. I look forward to many chapters to come. I have not spot any major mistakes except for this minor one: “Oh, shush you.” Vinyl murmured, finding enough energy to give a smile. We’re safe now, and I’m… I’m tired.” As if to emphasize her claim she yawned. “I’m gonna catch some sleep, m’kay?” You are missing the quotation mark that is supposed to be before "We're safe now...." Everything else is great, and the writing is definitely an improvement. Keep it up!
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
I cried, the long and short of it.... It's so hard to allow someone's life to slip through your grasp, try as you might it's like attempting to hold smoke with your hands.
Very well written and thought out. Kudos!
Magnificent job, looking over this chapter really touched my heart. You outdid yourself in a spectacular way! I am looking forward to more chapters to come.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
Wow. I didn't cry for any other story and I almost did just now readin' this
this was bucking amazing
and you need to keepbwritin'. don't let strikes get in your way, because this....deserves 6 mustaches
Keep writin'
So many feels
Looking forward to the aftermath of this in the next chapter
many tears were shed
Great chapter as always, can't wait for the next one
hmm.. sounds interesting.. will have to check this out later
Yay! Octavia! Vinyl isn't going to lose Tavi that easily. Great job! Can't wait to see what you have in stored for the next chapter. Keep up the good work!
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
Aha! Octavia appears at last. Write on!
very good so far
but you seem to be having trouble with keeping your point of view consistent. keep it coming!
Finally. Tavi shows up. But i cant believe that he almost hit her.
i was about to flip out
and keep writin'
anyways good job. Take 3 mustaches
Loved the song lyrics dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_Scratch.png
Extra points for adding in a griffin and also not making him a villain (I don't seem to read many stories with them in it)
Academy.
Another good chapter bro
kepp up the. Good work ma friend
Yay! Updates, Vinyl hasn't had a real birthday party before? How sad. :( It's good to know Octy and Orrick both care somuch for her.
Oh, and *squee* she got a turntable!!!
This is awesome!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Hmmm, [Romance] + [sad]+ [Adventure]? LETS READ!!!
That... Is an unusual Tavi
Hmm i sense DJ-Powers dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png
not quite sure what i just read...
The FEELS! Seriously though, THIS IS FREAKING AMAZING, so much deep... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png
It may be because I've seen a chapter named Tragedy and Octavia, or maybe because I always see the bad things that could happen, but I think Dawnfire's gonna go down with Rot Wing... or whatever the name was
You mixed a few your with you're. Other than that, it was good. Wish we had seen some of Vinyl's thoughts about the new music learning experience. Excellent lyrics too.
got potential allright
5 stars
So deep yet so enjoyable...