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KingMoriarty


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I always loved Fluttershy. It never mattered that I couldn't have her, that we may as well have been worlds apart, I've never not wanted her. But when the time finally came that I could be with her, she was not for me. She had grown old and faded, while I had remained very much the same.

But I will not be denied. After so long, she is at last within my grasp, and I will not allow a silly thing like the passage of time to deny me my destiny.

I am going to travel back in time so that I can seduce the Fluttershy I fell in love with.


Written for F*** THIS PROMPT #15.

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Excellent twist on the prompt! I love how it's not an OC that you've used as everyone's favorite protagonist. And the choice of Flurry Heart is even better. I felt that the reasons for their coloring was sound as well as their reasons for time travel. Additionally, I love how things don't go the way Flurry wants. TO be shot down before being attacked by a bear? Personally, I think it's brilliant. This is easily one of my favorite stories and as usual, you've done a wonderful job with it!

The story, for the most part, was good. I especially liked your coloring spell explanation—that was a neat take on the prompt.

Change in tone in the ending left me very confused, though. It feels dark, and Fluttershy’s dialogue sounds noticeably more cold-blooded in the last paragraph.

Hehe, excellent read, Moriarty. :3

Thanks for the entry. I shall read with interest :twilightsmile:

If I were judging the contest, I would probably be writing that prize out to you right now.

7945707 I'm flattered, truly.

I forgot to upthumb >.>

mrk

Dat twist.

And to think, it could have gone well. Just had to say you wanted to spend your whole life together.

The ending came a bit fast, but I certainly like where is went. :trollestia:
Also that Twilight line cracked me up :rainbowlaugh:

This story is impressive, but why does Fluttershy seem so angry at the end?

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Honestly, I was pressed for time and thought a bear attack was a fun ending. Hindsight is 20/20.

8292117
Got it. I thought maybe Fluttershy was mad that this strange alicorn only wanted her when she was young and beautiful or something.

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Well, that is the reasoning behind her being angry, but several people have pointed out she seems uncharacteristically angry.

8293040
Got it. Think you might want to edit it, then?

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I prefer to learn from mistakes and apply them to the future rather than trying to change the past, personally.

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