OK slightly confused, was Flutters doing that to herself?

Corruption complete, Rainbow Dash is now Stripes....

You know I feel like Thunderlane should earn this. Achievement unlock: Pet owner-making a mare wanting to be your pet.

7786610 Added a line to clarify. Yes, she was trying to get the experience without having anypony around to see her. It was working quite well for the mare, actually.

7787635 The sequel will be starting soon.

Now you've gone and done it, Thunderlane.

And a sequel already? Wooooooo!

"Hey Dash, move it!" When she didn't move immediately he dropped his voice. "Next time, I won't take samples, I will tie you up out the back with a sign saying, 'free use for all stallions.' "

Also something I would love to read! Not to mention the bull part that was mentioned last chapter. You know, I'm really hoping for a sequel here right now!

As a side note, it was interesting to see that our nerdy little librarian Princess isn't used to such debauchery! Funny that she is the only one in town that is 'normal' like that. I can imagine that this reaction of hers might lead to promising events if a sequel is written!

Edit: Just saw the comment that there will be a sequel. I'm glad I follow you, Damaged, so I will immediately be informed when it's up!

That pregnancy bit came out of left field.

Why am I even surprised anymore. These stories always end with one of them having children.

I don't fault you or anything, as this was a commission.

After skimming through parts of it, I felt like I had to read the whole thing out of sheer curiosity, yet it didn't do anything for me.
Heck, this is probably the first M-rated story that I've read on the entire site that I didn't enjoy to any degrees.
I think it's mainly because, while there was some light mind breaking, there was no traditional hypnosis or mind control.
That, and the fact that the whole thing felt kind of rushed.

While I'm pretty sure Softy's Kindness isn't as rushed, since it's got more chapters already, I'm not sure if I actually want to read it yet.

8047640 You will note: this story was never intended to have any mind-control or hypnosis. These were commissioned stories, and as such I had a specific path for them to take and a time for them to get there.

8047645 Yes, I realize that.
And I acknowledge that, as a result, the fact that it doesn't do much for me is a result of the fact that I just don't have the right fetishes to enjoy it.

8047647 Fair enough.

8047647 Oh, I am planning to do another hypnosis story soon. Will likely be 1-2 chapters, and the hypnosis will be self-inflicted.

Another story that will have a little mind control in it (not written by me), is How Twilight Sparkle Learned to Stop Worrying and Love the Baddies. Written by a friend.

You should jump on our Discord and chat, save all these comments.

8047653 I can't wait for it. Though I'm more curious as to how the hypnosis will be self-inflicted than I am on who it is.
I probably will end up checking that other story out soon.

You should jump on our Discord and chat, save all these comments.

I might just do that at some point.

Aww, I wanna pet Stripes. She’s so cute.

Ick. This rubs me the wrong way.

11831799 'K. You are hereby awarded a pass that exempts you from having to read further.

11832496
K. I'm allowed to share my opinion on a fellow author's published fanfiction. Writing a SubDash fic myself currently, RD seems extremely OOC and bends to Thunderlane 'Just Because'.

11832497 Well, I tend to respond to most comments in one way or another, and since you're not on my Discord server, I replied here.

How did you expect me to react to "I don't like this story" (paraphrased)? Should I have tried to argue that you should read it anyway?

And, as for OOCness, eh. It's what the commissioner asked for, so that's what I delivered. I worked it to be as manageable as I could, but ultimately her willingness to sub to someone was kinda a given. You'll note that Thunderlane even gave her the chance to back out if she wasn't interested, and she gave it a try anyway. I admit there was a bit of RACK going on in one bit, but for the most part that was inexperience on their part.

If you expected me to rush to change the story, eight years after writing it, and possibly annoy the commissioner in the process—you've sorely misjudged me.

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Nah. You can reply however you want. But an indignant 'K' just because I didn't like the story seemed quite standoffish. Didn't judge squat. I simply posted my opinion of how this story was finalized and I wasn't a fan.

You're wasting your time with a rebuttal. The one who commissioned this story must've liked it, but I found Dash to be too one-dimensional and the premise lackluster.

Good day.