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Trixie Lulamoon has just fled Ponyville after the ursa minor debacle and now turns her sights elsewhere for fortune and fame.
Conveniently, a mare from another world will help her with just that problem, as long as said mare doesn't blow everything up first.
Crossover with The Slayers (between season 1 and 2)
Special thanks to Sedentary Vagabond, for being my writing consultant on this one.
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That was a fun little short story and a rather lovely Crossover! <3
shame there arnt any other slayers fic also from the ending this was before magic duel although id like to see a sequel or a displaced fic maybe a multichapter fic by some body else
Why does this story only have one chapter?
Loved this, Thanks for Writing!
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Thanks! Glad you liked it! The idea sort of came to mind as I was re-watching Slayers
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Yes, this is sort of a precursor to "Magic Duel".
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I meant for this to be a one-shot. Sort of a collision between characters to propose how Trixie faired after "Boast Busters"
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You're welcome!
7645380 I would say that there's not enough Slayers Crossovers! <3
You should CLEARLY write more to make up for this deficit <.< >.>
This was awesome. But it needs more. We need Lina and Twilight to meet. It would be most amusing.
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My primary focus was to tell the story of one incident. But I definitely wouldn't say that I'm averse to revisiting this crossover concept.
Glad you enjoyed this story!
7651267 It would be especially amusing if Lina were to come back closer to the current timeline of the show. Imagine Twilight Sparkle and Starlight Glimmer being flabbergasted by Lina's use of "black magic." Super Dragon slave (the one where she is enhanced with the monster talisman and destroys the floating part of the kingdom along with part of the city.), Laguna blade, or the giga slave to name a few.
I am a great fan of Slayers anime series, I especially like the contrive humor they do about making jokes of classic RPG game trops. I was happy to see a Crossover with MLP of this. Unfortunately I feel that they story was way too rushed to really bring out the best out of the potential in could have been. The set up was good Having Mina meat Trixie and Darring Doo was a good call and having a story revolving around ruins. But I feel that the character interactions was rather week and the motivations of Mina wanting to go there was a little flimsy especially when she would most likely want to try to go home.
I I think you could have added a way lot more humor to the story that it could have been especially at Mina diminutive expense to get a good rise out of her, being mistaken for a filly would have worked well, or play on her greedy she is like taking a job that pays well instead of accepting to of charity work for pore peasants. I think playing with the classic trops would had helped a lot too. Maybe also Giving Gorry his own screen time would have helped too
If there was to be a re-wright of this it could be along, and add a few story ares to it as to with maybe adding Naga to the mix. I could become a good multi chapter story with a lot of humor, but I think you would need a partner to get the best out of it.
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There were definitely things I would have liked to have done if this hadn't been a one shot.
Thanks to all the response I've received, I am more inclined to add more to this story and am now seriously considering a multi-chapter sequel to flesh out more ideas.
I greatly appreciate your input.
7655510 That would be great, and I think you should remember that Lina is incredibly antagonistic toward the entire world, is all too easy to rub the wrong way and she will inadvertently make the wrong kind of enemies or give off the wrong impressions. I wouldn't be surprised that the mane six would go after Mina and Gorry with the Elements of Harmony to try and stop that denominative she-deamon, or that Shining Armor would send off a legion of Royal GuardsPonies to track her down. Hell you could add that rumors about how vicious she is could be blown way out of proportion, with a running gag of arable telephone, where the information about her get worst and worst as it spread around. Not to forget that she gets easily entangled into the super demi god villains that she come across for completely convoluted reasons; or the chumps villains. It would be great to see Naga somehow following her or met her counterpart. I would love to see more depth into the story and the characters this time around, as I feel that there could have been a lot more interaction between the characters. Also don't forget the jokes and lot of jokes and even more jokes.
I'm looking forward to see a sequel to this.
Say, that's AWESOOME!!!! You should check this story in my Slayers group; https://www.fimfiction.net/group/209980/mlp-the-slayers
i would love seeing a sequel for this
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Lucky for you, one is in the works! Next month I hope to begin publishing it.
Speculation: Lina would probably destroy fewer towns in canon if the didn't use all of both hands to focus Dragon Slave (and make it so big).
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Granted, that's a very powerful spell, so one finger probably wouldn't do.
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Maybe four would be enough?
I mean, i'm just saying.
Nice to see some Slayers around here.
Do want to point out that Trixie had much greater versatility of spells in Boast Busters then just illusions though, able to outdo half the mane 6 with casual ease.
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For certain, Trixie has a good set of abilities. But since this was a one shot, I didn't really get to flesh out as much I would have liked. I've definitely considered what she brings to the table for the second story as she herself is becoming more skilled with magic she's never practiced with. In this story, she's more of someone caught up in a zany series of events, much of what is how The Slayers tends to progress in its stories. What didn't help things was that a lot of the magic used were in battles, a place where Lina tends to outshine others.
I'm glad I can stretch out the character dynamic in the sequel. Trixie is a much deeper character and really deserves the focus.
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Love the perspective, and I did appreciate her characterization in this story. There were some great moments.
I'll definitely be following the sequel.
Ok I haven't read the story.... yet.
I started to watch slayers but are still in season one.
So how much or how many seasons should I have watched of the Anime to be able to really understand, enjoy , appreciate this story?
I will keep watching the anime and wait for an answer, when I am finished with the anime I will return if there have been no answer ^^.
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There are 3 main seasons of "The Slayers": Slayers, Slayers: Next, and Slayers: Try. There are additional seasons that were made recently, Slayers Revolution and Slayers Evolution-R.
This story takes place between seasons 1 and 2. My sequel takes place between seasons 2 and 3.
Hope I could help!
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Thank you, so I will take the time after finishing season 1 to read this story.
And then watch the next season, and after this I read the sequel before watching season 3 ^^
Well then, see you again after I finished season one.
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Hope you enjoy the anime!
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Oh I did, I watched the first few movies and OVAs and then Season 1 in 2 days XD. It was worth every minute I didn't sleep ;P.
So on to the Story then.
First the bad things.
You need someone who does beta reading. some of the mistakes are hard to miss and break the reading flow.
Next is the over all Story, you lack description on actions and surrounding. It feels like you are rushing the story along without thinking what is happening. You need to remember that no reader can see the scene as you imagine it, so you need to write down the details.
A good example for this:
The way you write this I can't say what the character feel, here is a lack of details. An Idea for an improvement of this part:
"Trixie has had quite enough!" The show mare yelled in annoyance, a frown hidden under her hat. Before pushing herself up with all her strength throwing her assailant off her.
This tells a lot more about the mood and the emotions of the character in two sentences. Also it explains why Lina later didn't know that the "Person" is not a "Person" but a Pony. Because you told us in this sentence that Trixie was hidden under her hat and cloak.
Again a really good example of lack of mood and emotion. Would you just state monotone and with a cool had that someone shouldn't insult you? Trixie is not Maud.
But this enough of the bad. Now we come to the good stuff.
It was really good how you catch the personality of the Character. The interaction between Trixie and Lina at the start are some thing I would expect from both of them. At least on the Verbal level.
Oh you got Daring Do in there, I had already the idea it could be her as you said the Pony hide behind a hood, but it was a great tease and a good next hint was the info about the Book.
When you write Fights you are doing rather Ok. I may would have liked for Gourry to have some problems because of the Body change, but meh, he never was to smart so maybe this is an improvement for him XD.
I may like the sub version of the incantation more then the dub but to see the difference is nice. But I would like to know more of all the damage Lina created. The Dragon Slave doesn't leave just a small hole in the ground I mean XD at least one important thing has to get damaged.
Oh this Ending was great, I have no Idea how or if Trixie will be able to cast any spells Lina used but it would be awesome to see her use more combat orientated magic.
Well it was a good read while it lasted. Now it is time for me to watch season 2 and come back to the sequel ^^.
Have a nice evening and a happy end of the year.
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Thanks for the input! I always appreciate the help.
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