The Secret Agent

by SecretAgentPlotTwist

Epilogue

“I thought the word you used to describe this place was ‘cute’.”

Drops looked around the restaurant, examining all the paintings on the wall, expensive vases, and the various smartly dressed adults that were also dining that night. Smiling, she returned her gaze over the candlelight and at her date.

“Did I say cute?” Lyra said with a little blush. “Fancy is what I meant.”

Drops chuckled. They both knew the location of this ‘catch-up’ had been changed once the meaning behind it did. Now it was out in the open, Drops felt a lot more confident about the whole situation.

That being said, it hadn't stopped Drops from being very nervous going into this. As embarrassing as it was to admit, Derpy had come round a few hours beforehand to help her mentally prepare for the date—and help with the two moments of hyperventilation that occurred.

Drops would later find out Lyra had done a similar thing. Only she had the help of every other member of the gang, with Cloudkicker and—more surprisingly—Octavia being more emotional than Lyra was. It sounded like a grand affair.

“That dress looks beautiful on you,” Drops said. She had decided against telling her she had seen her purchase the dress during her recon.

Lyra smiled sheepishly. “Thanks. You look amazing in that tux. It really suits you.”

Drops blushed. The tux had been what Rarity designed for her in the end. She was originally quite surprised, but Rarity insisted it would look great on her and decided to wear it. Admittedly, she was right.

“Menus madams.”

Drops politely took the menu that had been placed in front of her. “Thank yo—”

Fast Glider, still in his bandages and arm sling but now dressed as a waiter, gave Drops a little wink before moving onto the next table. Drops glared at him the whole time but failed to hide a little smirk. He was most likely still being forced on leave due to his injuries and was finding ways to fill his time.

“So, how's the reading going?” Lyra asked.

Drops sighed. “Could be going better. When the agency sent over all the files I thought they sent me a boat judging by the size of the package. Most of it is quite useless too.”

“Sounds rough.” Lyra thought for a second. “You gonna have enough time to do the friendship games in a few weeks time? We could use an ace to finally win it.”

Drops gave her an apologetic look. “Sorry, while I’ll have finished by then, it’s against regulations to actually win one of those competitions without good reasons. I’ll be able to compete, but I’ll be holding back.”

Lyra looked a bit disappointed, but then shrugged. “Oh well. Should be a good time anyway.”

Drops thought for a second. “Yeah,” she agreed with a smile. “After all the stress of the musical showcase, it should be good to have a little school activity with no crazy magical disaster.”

Comments

[link4]

drops... just... why? why would you invoke murphys law?

[computerneek]

"Few weeks time"... Well, at least she gets a few weeks with no crazy magical disaster. Then she gets her disaster.
But hey, at least she'll have finished her studying by then!

Sequel?

[Twilight_Shimmer]

Still say the agency is secretly Ran by Equestria

[Osiris Prime]

Can you count fingers as thumbs for the purposes of thumbs ups? Because if you can, then this gets 10 thumbs up from me!

Alright, who wants to get started on that sequel hook?

[Lightning_Striker]

This was a great fic. Yes, I did just read it all today. Today was also a good day to pic it up, as it was just finished today.

[stupidhand14]

Now that this fic isdone, I can look it over and see the good, the bad, and... well, there's nothing ugly in here.

Let's start with the good.

Most of the story. Bon Bon has initiative. The story lacks much fluff, as each of Bon Bon's actions furthers her character arc. The supporting cast is plentiful and well characterized. The romance is shoved aside in favor of telling the rest of the story, which isn't a bad thing per se. I would've enjoyed seeing the two romantic leads interact more, but tht's just me.

Now why can't I say this is perfect?

It's simple. The climax falls apart. The story, in an attempt to stay within canon, has the climax occur without Bon Bon affecting it at all. This is missed opportunity and leaves the reader blue balled. The description also gets light, and things are very rushed as if the author just wanted to get to the epilogue already. It's a real tragedy, but it's the truth.

Overall, a fine story. A good read, but it falls off near the end. Still enjoyable, but leaves you wanting more, and not in the good way.

[D48]

9098252
I 100% agree with you. The bulk of the story was great and it was nice to see the romantic subplot stay in its box instead of taking over the story (although it might make sense to cut the romance tag), but the finale was a real letdown. Even without doing the logical thing and letting her help in a meaningful way, this story would have been a lot stronger with just another chapter to show her response to the actual resolution in the movie as it happened for more of a comedy climax, but instead it completely cuts the actual climax and really wrecks the story structure.

[Perfectly Insane]

This is a good story, well done, I think it deserves a sequel.

[WittyNameTFM]

I absolutely loved this. Would very much enjoy a follow up if you ever did one. :D

[Phara_mine]

That was nice, lovely little story, like

[BurntSconez_09]

I absolutely LOVED this story!

The romance, also the secret agent plot with Sweetie Drops aka "Bon-Bon" was great. I always thought with all the magic stuff that went on in the movies, realistically the school would have the government & secret agencies onto them right away.

SO it would only make sense for something like this to happen, plus it really fleshes out the world more.

This is definitely going on my headcanon list.