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Fluttershy receives an invitation to the Pie family's rock farm, the letter asking if she could help them deal with a massive creature known as a Rock Lizard. And with both Holder's Boulder and the farm itself possibly at risk, there is little room for error.

However, in order to do this, Fluttershy must work with Limestone Pie. But while Limestone's attitude seems intimidating at first, there's more to her and the Pie family as a whole than Fluttershy could've ever imagined.


Thanks to Phaoray for proofreading this story.

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Comments ( 17 )

This story was just awesome. I really loved the way you wrote Limestone, and I hope you come back to her again someday :twilightsmile:

7292806 Yeah, Limestone was a fun character to write, and I definitely enjoyed adding to her character. And I might do more with her in the future, especially since the Pie sisters as a whole are fun characters. Anyway, thank you for the compliment and for checking out the story! I highly appreciate it! :twilightsmile:

I could imagine Flutters would have no trouble dealing with a emotions on the sleave character like Lime because of her experience dealing with Rainbow. Another fave from you, Mana!

7292830 Yep! Fluttershy might be timid, but she does know how to work with characters such as Rainbow Dash, even if it might seem intimidating at first. It's part of what makes her an interesting character in my opinion. And now that you mention it, Limestone and Rainbow Dash would make for an interesting pairing. :twilightsheepish:

Anyway, thank you for checking out the story and for the comment. I appreciate it! :twilightsmile:

This was so awesome great story

7292847 I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you for checking it out and for the compliment! :pinkiesmile:

Cool story, brah.

7292870 Thank you for the compliment and for looking at the story! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Quite calm and charming story, and while it didn't make up to the expectation of conflict between Pinkie's family and dynamic interactions between somepony as calm as Fluttershy and somepony as agreesive as Limestone, it surely made up for it with friendly interactions and teamwork between them.

7293174 You do make a good point in regards to the potential conflict such a meeting might have, especially given the differences between Fluttershy and Limestone. Either way, I'll definitely keep such things in mind for future stories, even if they feature completely different characters. Thank you for the constructive criticism and for checking out the story. I highly appreciate it! :pinkiesmile:

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You'rr welcome, also, your account cover art looks really good. It's like Rarity in a super hero costume, and a bit better than the one she wore in comic episode.

This was a really nice story. I liked all the interactions and everypony was in character.

7316290 Yeah, it was fun writing about the different characters and how they interacted with each other, the Pie sisters in particular. They definitely could use more stories about them in my opinion. And thank you for checking out the story and for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

This was a nice character piece, and I like the concept of Fluttershy helping at the Pie Rock Farm, but the thin plot didn't justify the length. IMO it could have been shortened to 3000 words and I wouldn't have felt like I missed anything. I also kept expecting an angry outburst from Limestone that would make things worse, but she was surprisingly cooperative and patient.

All in all this is just an okay slice of life story. I can't bring myself to upvote it or give it the first downvote either. Just my two cents.

7340370 You do make an excellent point in your criticisms. I'll try experimenting more with story premises while at the same time making sure that the length is appropriate. Anyway, thank you for the advice and for the honest critique. I'll keep on trying my best. :twilightsmile:

7340382 You're welcome. Best of luck to you. :pinkiesmile:

Great story. Love the character interactions. A shame we didn't see Pinkie's parents or why the Lizard decided to come to the farm.

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