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After braving the darkest caves, Starlight Glimmer ends up in Canterlot and stops at a cafe. Everything seems to be looking up until a familiar face shows up. And to make matters worse, another pony she dreads to encounter appears.


Thanks to Zooman Stan for proofreading this story.

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no obffences i was hoping this would be a shipfic with cadences and star light.I a little disappointed

oh well

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Must say, I liked this story. The ending seems like it's setting up for a possible sequel, but maybe that's me.

Now, there were a few problems, but on the whole I enjoyed this story!

If you'd like, I can point out what I saw as problems.

6197974 Thanks for looking at the story. I highly appreciate it. As for what I could improve on, feel free to let me know. I'll try to address these problems as best I can for my future stories. :twilightsmile:

interesting story

6198694 Thanks for looking at the story. I appreciate it! :pinkiesmile:

This was rather interesting. It was a bit hard to tell what exactly was going on sometimes, due to the lack of description, but otherwise I found this rather interesting. All told, not bad!

6199166 Thanks for looking at the story. I'll try to improve on description and do the best I can. :pinkiesmile:

I liked this Starlight.
Her thinking is just alien enough to offer an interesting perspective on the things she's seeing while not being too strange to understand.

6199240 Yeah, Starlight Glimmer was fun to write for this story in regards to her personality and her perspective of the world. Anyway, thanks for the compliments. I appreciate it. :pinkiesmile:

I'm fairly certain that Starlight's multiple counts of magical mutilation, unlawful imprisonment, assault, all of the above to royalty, and treason (due to the royalty bit) would be illegal. A lot people would even consider executing her for that.

6199630
True. Even Starlight Glimmer realizes this herself in the story. She sure got lucky there. :twilightsheepish:
Anyway, thanks for reading the story. :twilightsmile:
6199641
Thank you for the compliments. I highly appreciate it! :pinkiesmile:

I liked the concept and the story, but something just felt... off.

I think it was Cadence and her intel. No one knew where Starlight was heading when she left, and no one in mlp really has a track record of keeping track of villains that well.

That said, reading from Starlight's perspective was great.

6199675 Yeah, I guess that's one thing to consider for future stories I write. Anyway, thanks for the feedback and for looking at the story. I'll keep on trying to do the best I can while improving bit by bit. :twilightsmile:

SPOILER: Starlight's really returning for the finale..

6199887 Yep! Here's hoping she's just as awesome as she was in the Season 5 premiere!

I'm throwing money at this story, it's not working! Great story again, you are on a roll. :twilightsmile:

6202035 Thank you for the compliments! I'm glad you enjoyed this story. :twilightsmile:

Ah, Starlight. You are in way over your head.

6379786 No kidding. Starlight is quite the interesting pony. :twilightsmile:
Anyway, thanks for reading the story. I appreciate it. :pinkiesmile:

Is this from the episode where she was in the background in the café? I pretty sure that's what its from.:duck:

6697325 Yep. This is based on the scene in "Amending Fences" where she's hiding in the background. :twilightsmile:

And thank you for checking out the story. I appreciate it! :pinkiesmile:

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