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This story is a sequel to Starlight Rising
After Starlight had been sent to Canterlot, Trixie's control over Twilight continued to intensify with each passing day. Now that things have returned to normal and Starlight having been crowned "The Warrior Princess," all attention turns to Twilight. The princesses and Twilight's friends decide enough is enough. They have decided that Trixie's control over Twilight must be broken.
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Why does this story "just" have an alternate universe tag?
7252905 What other tags do you feel it needs?
7252915 well just so other people can find in search bar when look for you story and character along with it
Those were two things that nopony had ever told Celestia and this angered her. She snapped, "What? Princess Twilight is under some sort of spell of Trixie's and she is pregnant and none of you ever bothered to tell me this?"
Starlight replied, "Well no. After I went to Ponyville and my friends and I went to check on her we discovered what was going on. I was going to tell you but then I got deeper into my studies, then the changelings attacked, then the unicorn army and I saved all of you and now taking control of the army made it skip my mind."
that sound like story waiting to be rewritten. that bother me with the story before this one. for one the dam Princess Twilight sparkle herself is knocked up, and because she under mind control she had no say in matter. and it slip your mind fuck you Starlight. for real how do you forget something like that. she has save the world how many times her being turn into a cumdump perfectly fine with you. this so fucked up that it funny
This is a terrible fanfic.
It started off well with a simple Starxie, but then you veered way, WAY off course and made half the characters so unlikable that I couldn't bring myself to finish this.
Honestly, I'm questioning if you even liked the characters to begin with.
7257187 For starters, I do like the characters. Regarding my change in direction, when I start a story, or a series, I never have the whole thing planned out in advance (well except Starlight's ascension here). The way I write actually depends a lot on my mood at the time of when I am writing, with the exception of gore fics as my mind is darker to start with. Regarding an end, "Saving Princess Twilight" ended the way it did because there obviously will be one more where Twilight and Trixie get married, they have a truly loving marriage, the royal foal will be born and everypony will reconcile. While Twilight may have seemed like what you call a "cumdump" for a while, once the relationship is true and the foal is born, I hope you'll change your mind on that.
Operation Egghead Retrieval is a go!!!!
Thus commenceth the smacketh down.
Now I want cake.
Enemy subdued!
Mind Controlled Egghead released!
Busted.
Is being an assistant the ONLY thing Spike wanted to be?!?!!
7258508 Yep, that is all he wanted to be. He simply lost respect for Twilight when she became submissive to Trixie.
7258567 He could go to Ember if the situation finds his services are no longer required.
7257672 I hope I will. The mind control part did feel very out of left field though.
7258590 Don't worry, the last one will not involve any mind control or any extreme kinds of magic involved. Trixie has seen the error of her ways and like I said, everypony will reconcile. Now as far as Spike goes, I'm still torn between him going back to Twilight or having him stay with Starlight where he would likely have a more productive role.
7259041 Hmm, I see. I think I understand now. The whole thing here was because you kept getting ideas in as you were writing, and kept throwing them in. That's the most common pitfall of any story writer, adding new stuff to their story. So I understand, I've had the same issue myself, which actually led to me cancelling my own fanfic.
As for Spike, I'd love for him to be in a more productive setting.
7259660 Pretty much the only stories I didn't do that with was "Starlight Rising" and my newest story "Hidden Desires." While Starlight is going to have a very odd role as a princess (maintaining and monitoring the new military), Starlight will have him keep in touch with Celestia over the soldiers' progress, the expansion of recruiting, etc. while with Twilight I'm not sure what role he would have given that Twilight's number one priority will be taking care of her newborn.
sequel please!
7579389 It's in the works....it's almost done!
7579389 The sequel is up and ready to go. It is called "An Unlikely Union: A Princess and a Former Showmare"
I like the idea of Starlights warrior mentality being a bit of a flaw, she did seem a bit too perfect up to this point (without regarding her past).
7585621 Well nopony is perfect, not even my fave so that is why I gave her a personality that could wind up causing more problems than solving.
You know, it feels like this series primarily exists to put down Twilight and raise up Starlight.
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Yeah but she doesn't have the mind for politics, Twilight handles the reforming stuff, Starlight kills things, each have their role like Celestia and Luna raise the sun and moon respectively.
Well that was your fault for being stupid.
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I understand that opinion but Twilight did act in character, she for the most part , she has been known to be very easily panicked.
After you abandoned her for Twilight.
Not True Submission anyway Moonstone
In an alternate timeline Trixie was arrested and put on trial because whether or not Twilight wanted to press charges didn’t matter due to the Princesses determining that Trixie has done too much to be set free without facing ramifications for her actions.
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I like that ending.
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Unfortunately it’s not the ending we have.
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Had I been thinking I would have had the other princesses overrule her. Celestia, Luna, Starlight and Cadence all would have overruled her. Damn why didn't I just do that instead?
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Not sure how to respond to that.
Saving Private Ryan - Equestrian Version.
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Given that the two of you are still active on the site, I will write an alternate ending to this story and then I'll write a story about Trixie going on trial for her crimes.
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You don’t have to.
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Well I've already started on the alternate ending and besides, I've been having a horrible time trying to get anything new up and running.
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Okay. But it really doesn’t make any difference to me. Just want that to be known.
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I’m cool with this happening. Twilight definitely needs to be cured of her Stockholm Syndrome.
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To each their own.
But I would be lying if I said I wasn’t curious about what he has in mind.
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Well there is one more story!
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You know looking back, I agree with you. The question is whether or not we’ll get the alternate ending.
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Ok, I am working on that alternate ending.
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No need to pressure the guy. Btw, have you seen any of my TwiStar content lately.
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I'm going to go check it out. Now as far as Trixie's punishment, that will be in a separate story. Right now Starlight is in the process of locking Trixie up in the dungeon in Canterlot. Now it is a known fact that Trixie is guilty of pretty much raping Twilight....so Celestia, Luna and Starlight will determine her final fate....and no she isn't going to get the Chrysalis treatment from Starlight.
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The alternate ending is complete. I hope you like it.