After Discord learns about the fate set for Equestria, he can't help but do something drastic. After all, Fate and Chaos are like water and oil; they'll never get along. Let's see what happens when an extra character is introduced at the beginning!
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His tongue. He's using it right.
And once more, you have me hooked on another of your stories. We have got to stop meeting like this.
7031620 I'm fine with these type of meetings, its like falling in love at first sight
7031666 Reykan must never know of my love...or the hidden cameras...by the way Rey, your DVD Player stutters/shakes a bit and it's fucking with my camera. Fix that for me, yeah?
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7031666 jokes on Sober, I don't have a DVD player. Don't know who he's stalking, but it isn't me.
So, would you be mad if I beg for new chapters again
will read later due to LoL ref i had my hopes up fer until i read the description.
7032118 No, I didn't mean to reference him, sorry to get your hopes up.
7032174 Twisted? I prefer my fate tempered. :P
>sex
>gore
...
>Pyro?
Not sure if want.
Good start. Will follow. Have a like.
7032174 quick question: how big is max? Is he a normal sized or a queen sized changeling? There isn't that much detail as to how he looks, next to the basics.
I really need to stop reading these while I'm on the clock, having awkward boners at work isn't very professional, but hay my break is in 8 minutes
7032747 Max very specifically states that he's taller than the other ponies. Safe to assume he's at least Alicorn height.
Oh, I'll be closely following THIS...
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it ain't a bad thing, i have seen some LoL fics on the site before.
Will still look at this later.
Much.
This is a bit weird. It's like he would need to provide the love he asked for.
Very awsome story. I got excitied thinking that changlings will now always be royal advisors for their multi tasking and emotion sensing. Mlp will never be the same.
I like how you are building worlds in your storys through perspective of your characters. This story has more potential for interesting world-building process rather than any other of your storys. "Substitute" story is coming to an end and i think it could be awesome if you will concentrate your efforts on this one.
I can see a lot of interesting events coming in here. I think Max is a changeling king creature, like Cimmerian in his hexed form. Soon Max will start to build his personal hive by following his new instincts and hoard emotions. Big amount of hoarded emotions should bait in changelings from nearby lands, if to follow your logic in regard of "sense range" of a changeling, relatively big pool of stored emotions can be sensed by a changeling from far away. Not only simple changelings should come in, but Queens to. Newcoming changelings should make one big political problem for royalty, problem of control and administration. This situation may allow Max to grow up from role of
vaginal bugconcubine into role of consort/baron/duke. Oh, and he can change his body to match lunar style.I have a mild feeling that Celestia will go mad instead Luna in this timeline.
Ooooh how I wait for the momentGood god, this is awesome.
7035148 I've never been able to write a 'clop for the sake of clop' story. I need a reason, why are these characters pursuing a relationship? Why should she accept his advances, why does he choose her out of all the hundreds of others out there? What happens as a result? Where is Carmen Sandiego in all of this?
7032581 I haven't changed my profile pic in a while. I may pull up my Trinity from Warframe as a pic for a bit. I'm thinking of changing it.
7032747 I had Luna comment on not seeing one 'of this size before' and hoped that was enough, but I'll be having Max give himself a better once over once he knows he's not dying. He's got other things on his mind than 'I'm in magic pony land' right now.
7032919 I try not to read anything questionable on the clock. If anything, I hit them during bathroom breaks >->
7034169 I like to think that Discord could be very intelligent if he had a reason to be. He just usually doesn't have one.
7035313 Like Substitute, I have nothing written down for this story. Anything could happen. For instance, I was planning on having Cim meet the Mino chieftain in the next chapter and they(the minotaurs) be all cool and nice. I decided against that at work. Thus, I have changed a major plot point on a whim.
7035354 You don't? Ooooh, so if we gently whisper ideas in the comments there is a chance you change the future story if it's a really good idea? (*Ahem* Max shapeshifting into other ponies and standing inside a mirrorframe *Ahem*) And do you have some sort of inkling on how do you want to end it, or just however it turns out as well?
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Well this is... certainly something. Not what I expected, but then again it's not like anything can go bad with Reykan at the wheel. Looking forward to where this goes.
As much as
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God DAMN IT REYKAN... more please...
Fausticorn is pissed!!!
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Asking the real question!
Now you have obligated yourself to hide Carmen Sandiego in the settings of each of your stories!
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I'm intrigued
"That, and changelings are going to be dragged out into the open a lot earlier in this timeline"
Stories where a Human is turned into a Changeling and dropped into Equestria and have to survive being found out are plentiful but I've yet to read one where a Human in the past goes "Sup. We're Changelings. So...yeah that's a thing now."
Unrelated but I've always wondered if there's a story with a second kind of Alicorn, bases around
Changeling-Thestral-Crystal ponies.
[edit] Changeling-Thestral-Crystal tried to auto correct to Microelectromechanical??
7047122 That sounds a bit to close to sparkly vampire territory.
I'm really hoping she gets pregnant with a changeling hybrid
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Auto correct is really stupid sometimes.
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wants. No apostrophe.
And aid is only spelled like that. Aide is a person, aid is the noun and action.
7044256 I think fausticorn is laughing her flank off at this. I think that was the producers getting pissed.
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Yeah...good luck with that.
While we don't know his profession, unless he was in a field of science or engineering or the like, I doubt he can explain much of the technology of his society to you.
It's easy. Go up to a person and ask them to describe, in detail, how to make an internal combustion engine starting from proper raw materials or how to make a cell phone from scratch and see what happens. Hell, while we have a vague idea how most of our technology works, most of us would have absolutely no idea how to make any of it work without other advanced technology, nevertheless using the tools of a much more primitive, medieval to renaissance era society.
Even in a best case scenario-he was an engineer or chemist of some sort-he'd only have a very limited array of technologies he could assist in creating. If he was something far more typical like a clerk or accountant, then there's not much he could actually do. That being said, the average person could probably list ideas and give vague clues to how something works/concepts that ponies might not have even considered, and a good Pony engineer or mage or something along those lines could create it, filling in the holes and doing most of the ground work.
Also not gonna lie, the erotic dream segment and Luna waking up after an orgasm-it was poorly done. In fact, I skipped over most of it after the first three sentences and do not desire to know what actually happened.
And then you went straight to Luna and him having sex.
Yep.
No.
I'm not entirely against the idea of two characters who just met having sex-it happens in real life, but I do believe there needs to be chemistry between and some sort of connection. He has every reason to want this but her...why? She just met him and that scene was so poorly written and rushed I only skimmed through it. It was just unpleasant to read, and is leading me to thoughts of dropping this fic.
I'm not going to quite yet, mind you-you started off pretty well with Discord, but as it is my interest fades with each chapter courtesy of poorly written scenes.
Ah, the true villain is revealed.
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I think my favourite example of this is in "Manly Guys Doing Manly Things" where a girl asks the main character (a spare-faring time traveling army commander) if can fix her mobile phone, to which he pulls out a broken abacus and asks her if she can fix that. It's just the fact he has a broken abacus in his jacket for that exact argument that keeps me in stitches.
7568047 Not gonna lie I would have agreed with this a month ago, but I actually helped with an engine rebuild recently and I could most likely make one.
It would be terrible and time consuming, but the payoff would be worth it. Probably would take multiple months or even years.
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This view requires the ponies to be stupid as a species, modern tech needs modern knowledge to design yes but the core device behind it?
A computer that needs multiple degrees to design is really 2 switches ("signal to open switch" and "signal to close switch"), if you can convey this and the idea of combining 2 (or more) into a logic pathway you have taught the ponies how to make computers, they will figure the rest as they need to (computers dont need to be electrical or small).
Trying to give "primitive" people the hows of modern tech would be impossible but if you give them the what of a device/idea and where to look they will have smart people that can do the heavy lifting.
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The idea and implication of logic based 'computers' have existed for centuries. The technology has only improved with better access to materials and funding. as well as interest. Thus, the concept alone won't do much -- the material science is the true bottleneck. It'll be centuries before ponies can even conceive of how to design a mechanical computation device (such as a code cracker), let alone vacuum tube transistors.
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I don't know, if the ancient Greeks could do it...
Worlds oldest computer!
Destiny is a mare? She certainly seems quite stressed. Maybe she needs to borrow Max and his silver tongue to relief some stress!
Haha, Celestia back off!
Maaaan, way to go dude, banging emotionaly unstable girl as one of the first things to do in the new world.
I guess he literaly needed to get some to survive, but damn son.
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wow man bucking the emotionally unstable girl as the first thing you do
id say that's Unethical but because he can E a t Emotions I just disagree with it
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They didn't really fuck. Not all the way anyway. 2nd base tops.