After Discord learns about the fate set for Equestria, he can't help but do something drastic. After all, Fate and Chaos are like water and oil; they'll never get along. Let's see what happens when an extra character is introduced at the beginning!
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You really love world building with the changelings. I very much enjoy your work. Thank you for this evening's enjoyment.
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Hmm... I'm curious how this is gonna workout. On one hand it could go just fine. But on the other hand this could be a scout to a much larger kingdom. I just don't know...
Man this is one of my fav fics, I can't wait till you post more.
I'm always excited when I get a story update. Doubly so when it's one of your stories. Great chapter.
Can't wait to see how the griffons will change due to Max's actions/presence.
Sweet, they have a basic video security system. Reviewing footage can be boring, but it goes a lot quicker if you can time index by trigger, that way you're not staring at nothing but jump straight to the interesting bits. If you can program a controller drone to field the triggers and run basic object recognition the feeds can be filtered and require less of the intelligent oversight and make the whole monitoring system more efficient.
It would be interesting what the ponies could do to integrate griffins at this point. There's no livestock so...
Keep going! ;)
There's been so many updates this week to a ton my absolute favorite fics and they just keep on coming
Yep.
Agreed.
Oh yeah.
Such perfect stringent Order, like clockwork, a machine, and when Discord did his thing, of course she snapped. His very EXISTENCE was anathema to her world view.
She has a point.
That's one way of putting it.
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I know right? There is so much awesome around!
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*giggles with insane glee*
8652525 I couldnt help it, i had to make the joke. Even if it was pretty forced XD
8652466Yea, and i've ended up binging a few myself as well. Start class soon though, so after the 16th it may slow down for me.
8652045Changelings have always struck me as being obscenely useful and low maintenance. I mean, they feed on something that i assume is naturally generated by living beings. Like the sun radiating heat and light. I understand why they're not used, but that doesnt mean i dont see the possibilities.
"ENTRY NUMBER SEVENTEEN
DARK DARKER YET DARKER THE DARKNESS KEEPS GROWING THE SHADOWS CUTTING DEEPER PHOTON READINGS NEGATIVE THIS NEXT EXPERIMENT SEEMS VERY VERY INTERESTING
WHAT DO YOU TWO THINK?"
Thanks for the update!
Very good chapter, nice work.
I'm just imagining a drone stuck up a tree like a cat with all its legs just hanging off going "beep beep beep" every few seconds
I thought theis story was missing something, but I couldn’t put my finger on what it was. Now I know, this story needed griffons.
What do Luna & Celestia know of Griffons? It sounds like they have already experience some interaction with at least one community if this paragraph from the chapter ‘in which a princess is served’ is anything to go by. Will it reflect in their actions when they meet this lone individual?
There’s also a mention of minotaur tribes. Will they feature in the near future. Will Max’s advice be wrong or lead to any bad relationships? (Actual on the subject of minotaur are they related or Allied with cows? A staple like milk and cheese would be beneficial to the keep. Or do ponies use soya substitutes for dairy products? On the food front I remember reading some fics where Pegasus or thestrals ate meat. is this the case hear? Also a couple had salt as a drug with alcoholic effects. Do you plan on having something similar in your story?)
We know that changelings can eat anything though only emotions give them any substance. Are Griffons only carnivores or can they eat meat substitutes. Also if they do eat meat does it come form other sentient beings (such as ponies or cows) or non sentients (such as birds, dogs like Winona (Applejack’s dog) or some unknown creature that may or may not have an earth analog from real life or myth)?
We already know what Discord did to ponies and changelings. The Dimond Dogs may have not been affected by him (unless he was the one to weaken their island pillars though it doesn’t seem his style (I know the show is aimed to be kid friendly but none of his actions ever put ponies in direct danger)). But did he do anything to the Griffons (or the Minotaurs and Dragons for that matter)?
I figured giving this one a chance since I like the Substitute Demon. This fic provides an interesting idea.
While his acceptance of being in a new world was nowhere near as mind-shattering or jarring to him as it could've been, fine, for the sake of writing I can follow that. Not like Discord implied what he was doing prior to Max blacking out, but fine. Adding the fact that he's in a completely alien body, with alien sensations, and his thought-processes should still be human, he's not freaking out as much as I'd exect a rational human to do. If you loose your hands, loose your body, you may have almost lost yourself. Anyone would be off-put at the very least. Especially if it's not really expected. Max seems to not have any (or just minor) issue whatsoever with either change. But fine.
Then you get interrogated, and the first thing you do besides some form of identification is drop a clue as to knowledge of the future. While accidentally I could see that happening (you're not on Earth, not human anymore, and are talking to some fantasy animal. That's enough for anyone to get his though processes off kilter), the elaboration on the talk shows it was well thought out. Someone could possibly come up with that after a bit of thought, but directly after being woken up by a splash of water, and getting all of that shoved in your face? You are not thinking clearly, and would more or less be prone to be tightlipped, trying to sort out what's going on.
But I'm sorry to say that chapter 2 almost caused me to drop the story, and chapter 3 did cause me to drop it. Going from stranger to sex within 1.5 chapters sorts this one more in the clopfic categories than an actual story that has a plot to tell. I don't mind sex (implied, or not) or close relationships if they're part of the plot, building upon it, but reversing this and trying to build the plot based on the sex/romantic involvement here just ruined it for me.
I can see others liking the story, but it's not for me.
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It's not for everyone, and this story started with the idea "if you had to have sex to survive," playing on the changelings eating love and some people seeing love and lust as similar.
As for the calmness of the MC, well, even in bad situations, in fact especially in bad situations, I don't really panic. I know i'm not the only one who can do that, either. In a situation where panicking could get you killed, we are perfectly capable of delaying our panic until we're safe.
Aside from that though, thanks for giving it a shot and I hope it at least entertained you a bit, maybe even giving you a few ideas to use on your own stories in the future.
Today I found out that Electrum is not just another word for amber, but also a metal. The first edition D&D rules make a lot more sense now.
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It’s always surprising to me just how many fantasy metals there are as well as how many real ones are given different attributes in fantasy novels.
Gender words for birds of prey? Tercel for males and falcon for females. I think. Falcon is also a specific kind of bird of prey, kinda like how cow is to cattle.
I started reading this a week ago and I will say I'll say I'm excited for this story. I'm disappointed in myself for not finding this story sooner, it's a excellent read. I really enjoy your other story The Substitute Demon. I'm really interested in what will happen next and what the new future will hold. Hopefully it'll reach that point in time when the main six are alive. Anyways I wait for the next chapter Reykan.
we require more pylons!