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What website did you find the cover page on?
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I got it from the requester, and then had to modify it to be suitable for FimFiction.
6929907 Yeah, I'm the one who had the cover art made. It's not available publicly, but it's made by FenRox of DeviantArt, check him or her out.
Me gusta even more.
However, there were a lot of tiny errors that sometimes broke the flow a bit, mind if I point them out?
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Sure, if possible, I'll correct it.
6939874 Okay, here's everything I noticed:
Capital I
perfect
Capital I
Either 'me' or 'my [insert synonym for penis]'
had
Meant 'a large H last Sping Break' or something?
friends
Was all I could reply
Capital I
sexy
groove
Curious how a penis would have multiple tops, no?
Not sure why the "the" is here.
closed
danced
rear
Either "oh no. If I" or "oh no, if I"
Found this twice, seems like a weird nickname...
Replace "their" with "they"? Sentence doesn't really seem complete otherwise, like it got cut off midway.
Harder would be the logical word... although I suppose this also works.
us
speak
ass
Maybe that's just me, but I would write "all the while".
That's... special... or just "red".
Feels like a verb is missing... or add "feeling of my beak"
Capital I
Would have expected "as" instead of "and"
lifted
finished
broke
Gilda
This one is pretty weird, since you wrote that "Rainbow was probably dead asleep in the spare bed"... though I wonder why there are 2 beds in the master bedroom?
Or you meant "with the beds", that would work... again, if there are 2 seperate beds in that room at all.
the girls
...thick?
...wich would mean that her tits and pussy are naked for all to see, which isn't what the next sentence says.
This story was so freaking awesome dude I can't believe you literally blew my mind I hope there's a sequel to this one too because after reading the ending I am dying to know what's going to happen to eclipse
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Well so far, its a maybe. But if you're a fan of Horizon Glyph, you'll enjoy it.
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8048243 What you meant was.img.ifcdn.com/images/57952bb193526d3c78b15d42a0031d445c3b41ae02a7c4f48eadd6b4a14e67a1_1.jpg
This just keeps getting better and better I can't wait to see the next part or sequel.