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Cobolt Soundwave


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You seem to jump into things far too quickly. We don't get many details, and the details we do get are jumbled and incoherent. We don't get given a reason to feel emotionally invested with the character. All we know is that he hates raiders, which makes him no different to 90% of the Wasteland population.

4585499 his "reason" while be given at a later time in the story. I'm not writing that in and then never again mentioning it. So don't worry, and also there will be more of a back story in the second chapter, promise.

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You seem to have picked only one of the things I said needed fixing and ignored the rest. Just giving us the bare minimum of details is not gonna cut it. You need to slow down the pacing.

This suck! That is all.

Its let's go meet your friends properly change the you at the end

Your welcome:pinkiehappy:

i love fallout New Vegas and love how your telling this story but i have one question. where on the fallout map would you say ponyville is? i know its near REPCON but i just want to know so my mind can see it in the fallout world.

4941385 so there is a little abandoned town near the site. That town is where Ponyville spawned, and replaced said town and took the rest of the empty space near it. Also there is no sweet apple acres here, since that would be gigantic. Glad you like it so far, in the process of getting the next chapter together, just been inactive for a long while. ^.^

Ok this story I going great I like what I've read so far. When will the next chapter b out. I'm excited to read it.

5978407 I was on a very extended leave from fimfic when I last updated this story. I should have a new chapter out soon hopefully. That's what happens when you have more than one story going at a time huh? XD

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Glad to know this story will continue.excited to c what happens next.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Nice story good to c it continue. Can't wait to read The next chapter.

6096945 Thank you. I know there wasn't much going on in this chapter. There will be plenty more stuff in the next. I got plenty planned for this beauty. :raritywink:

U need editor mate. But nevertheless, not bad.

6097986 I realize this. Thank you for telling me in a nice way. I'll send this latest chapter over to my friend soon so she can edit it for me, as well as other chapters to come. I probably should've sent it to her first before I posted it, but nonetheless, too late now. :twilightsheepish: Thanks for the comment friend :rainbowwild:

Sorry but I can't help but think this is shit I know it's your first one but I've read so many storys from really good Writers I think a lot of first writers storys are bad soo nothing against you personally.:applejackunsure:

6098546 No offense really taken, though, I know that this story is nothing like any other fallout crossover out there really (To my knowledge really). This is just my version of it. It's fine that you don't like it, it's up to you to move a long and find a story you like better than mine. Writers can't please'em all after all right? Thank you for your feedback, though, I'd use a little less harsh a word than "Shit" next time you tell someone that. They might not take it so lightly. :raritywink:

When fallout 4 comes out I bet someone out there is going to make a ponyville (post apocalyptic or not) settlement with pony models(anthro or not) but either way I would lose even more of my life playing it then:derpytongue2:

Huh this chapter feels better than the first chapter.

hope to see you on this story again some day.

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