Just Girls Talking About Fanfic OCs
WARNING: REALLY meta chapter ahead. Also, if you haven't yet watched She-Ra and the Princesses of Power on Netflix but are planning to, it'd be a REALLY good idea to come back to this chapter later.
Oh, and the ending may seem a bit abrupt, but I ended it right where it felt like a good idea to stop. 
"Good afternoon, everyone!" Twilight Sparkle said to the two dozen or so CHS students packed into one of the free use rooms after school on a chilly Wednesday. "Welcome to the first meeting of the She-Ra Fanfiction Club!"
Rainbow Dash, who was leaning against one of the counters at the back of the room, blew on her bangs. "Seriously?" she asked flatly. "That's what this hot new club you're starting is?"
"She-Ra is so awesome!" Pinkie Pie said happily as she passed out cupcakes with white and gold frosting. "I've already watched the whole season twice!"
Sunset Shimmer blinked. "Pinkie Pie, it came out yesterday."
"I KNOW!"
"Hey, we're right with you," Lyra Heartstrings said. "Me and Bon Bon stayed up all night watching and rewatching every episode!"
"CATADORA FOREVER!" Flash Sentry yelled from the back corner of the room.
"SCREW YOU, CATTRAP ALL DAY EVERY DAY!" a girl in the other corner yelled. Several students cheered in chorus.
"Guys! GUYS!" Twilight yelled. Beside her, Sunset Shimmer pulled out an airhorn and blew it. Twilight held her ears with a grimace as the room settled down. "Look, I know you're all anxious to get started with shipping wars already, but today's meeting is about something more important!"
"What could possibly be more important than shipping wars, darling?" Rarity asked from a front row desk where she was filing her nails.
Twilight adjusted her glasses and steepled her fingers. "We need to make our OCs. Before somebody else steals them."
"Oooooooooooh," the room chorused.
"Yeah, that's a good point," Pinkie Pie said.
Applejack chortled. "Y'all take this stuff way too serious-like," she said. "Ah mean, Ah only watched this dang show cause all mah friends was watchin' it. An' it's a good show an' all, but really?"
"AJ's right," Rainbow Dash said. "This is peak nerd." She fist-bumped Applejack with a grin and a chuckle.
Twilight narrowed her eyes and smirked. "You girls couldn't come up with a good OC between you, admit it."
Applejack and Rainbow Dash glared hotly at her. "Can so!" they chorused.
"Alright. Prove it."
"Oh, I'll prove it alright!" Rainbow Dash cried. "And then I'll prove YOU!"
Lyra blinked. "That...didn't even make sense." A few of the others snickered.
"How hard can it be t' make up a She-Ra character?" Applejack asked. "Ah mean, they're all pretty straightforward. They all got a name that basically says exactly whut they're all about."
"Yeah, seriously!" Rainbow said. She waved her hands around. "Ooh, look, it's Giraffa! She's a princess with a really long neck! Oh, wait, there's Bigfista! She's got really big fists and she can punch stuff!"
A silence descended upon the room.
Bon Bon frowned. "Wouldn't those just be R63 versions of Mekanek and Fisto?" she asked. "Because that's pretty lazy." A general murmur of agreement rose from everyone else.
Rainbow blinked. "Who and what now?"
"You know, the He-Man characters?" Flash asked.
Sunset coughed. "Why don't you two hold off until later," she suggested. "Who wants to start?"
"Ooh, me! Pick me! Me!" Pinkie said, waving her hand energetically.
"Okay, Pinkie Pie, tell us about your OC."
Pinkie stood up as though reading aloud in class. "My OC is Hilaria, the Laughter Princess. She's an expert in every style of comedy, be it jokes, slapstick, prop comedy, or that really weird meta stuff they do on late night TV. Also, she has a laughing gas gun that shoots laughing gas at her enemies!"
"Not bad, not bad," Twilight said. "The laughing gas part especially. So, do you have a description or a drawing, or—"
"She looks like me, duh," Pinkie said, hands on her hips.
Sunset chuckled. "Of course she does."
"Umm, I have an OC," Fluttershy said timidly. Once everyone's attention was on her, she ducked slightly behind her desk. "Umm...it's not a very good one though, so..."
"Go ahead, Fluttershy," Sunset encouraged.
"Oh, um. W-well. My OC's name is Fauna. She's, umm...she likes animals. She...she takes care of animals and can, umm...ask animals to help her do things and stuff."
"So, basically, your OC is you," Rainbow Dash said.
"Oh, umm...I-I guess so," Fluttershy whispered. "S-sorry..."
"That's a pretty good OC," Twilight said.
"She'd pair perfectly with Perfuma," Rarity agreed.
Fluttershy brightened up. "Oh, yes," she said, nodding rapidly. "I, umm...I actually already started outlining a story with Perfuma and Fauna."
"So basically, y'all's idea of a good OC is yerself with a diff'rent name?" Applejack put in. "Well then, mah OC's Rodea, th' Cowgirl Princess. She's mighty strong, almost as strong as She-Ra, an' she can rope an' ride an' do all kinda rodeo tricks." She put her hands on her hips and tipped her hat down over her eyes, smirking smugly.
Rarity narrowed her eyes. "I hardly believe they have very many rodeos in Etheria, Applejack," she said.
"Oh yeah? Then you do me one better."
Rarity frowned. "I'm...having a bit of trouble with the name for mine," she said, "but my OC is the Princess of Fashion. She's the top designer and dressmaker for all of Etheria."
Applejack raised an eyebrow. "An' how's that any kinda useful against th' Horde?"
Rarity ducked her gaze, blushing furiously. "W-well! She..." Her cheeks puffed up. "She repairs all the lovely outfits damaged in battle, of course!"
Applejack smirked. "So she's a glorified seamstress," she said. "Hey, that could be her name! Seamstressa!"
Rainbow snickered. "Nice one!"
"That's enough, you two," Sunset said tiredly. With a game smile at Rarity, she added, "Your OC's...fine. I just...don't know what kind of story you'd write about her."
"Hmm, yes," Rarity hedged. "I...actually hadn't given that much thought..."
"So what kind of OC do you have, Twilight?" Rainbow challenged. "Since this is your dorky club and all."
Twilight grimaced. "I...actually..." She coughed and adjusted her glasses. "Entrapta pretty much covers every idea I have for an OC. I mean, pretty much everything I can come up with reads like a copy of Entrapta, so...aheh...still working on it." She trailed off into nervous giggles.
"I've got one," Spike the Dog piped up, jumping onto Twilight's desk and startling half the room. Smugly, he said, "His name's Canino. He's a dog boy. He beats up that nasty Catra a whole lot."
"BOOOOO!" someone in the back yelled. "CATRA IS BAE!"
"NO DOG BOYS!"
"Wait, what about a dog girl as a girlfriend for Catra?" someone said. That drew a quick flurry of heated debate.
"I'VE GOT IT!" Rainbow cried suddenly, silencing everyone. She jumped up onto a desk and struck a victory pose. "ATHLETTA, the Sports Princess! She's the best at every single sport in Etheria and she can use her sports skills to kick major butt!"
The room filled with agreeable murmurs. "That's...pretty good actually," Lyra said.
"Yeah, I'd buy that," Watermelody agreed.
"YES!" Rainbow cried, pumping a fist. "I win nerd club!"
Sunset rolled her eyes. "It's not about winning, Rainbow Dash," she said. "It's about sharing ideas so we can all help each other write the best She-Ra fanfiction we possibly can!" She coughed. "So, umm...I've got an OC too, and...she's basically me." She poked her fingertips together. "Her name's Incendia, and she's the Princess of Fire. She can shoot fire, make fires bigger, control fires, you know..."
"So she's a firebender, the same way Mermista's a waterbender?"
"Pretty much," Sunset said. "And her outfit has a phoenix motif..."
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Glad to know Sci-Twi supports the shipping wars. ONWARD TO GLORY AND LOVE!
......I am ok with these OC discussions. Don't suppose there's the possibility of a future chapter talking about bad fanfic OCs, is there?
I am currently taking a break from binging the Netflix She-Ra series in order to check Fimfiction. Gonna restart in about half an hour. SUCH A GOOD SERIES.
Pretty good! I honestly was expecting a satire of OCs. But this is great too!!
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I thought this WAS a satire on OC's... Very subtle and ironic.
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It didn’t feel like satire.
Okay, this was a fun read. I also love Sunset's OC idea. ^^
These aren't OCs, they're Self Inserts. Which is a very specific breed of OC. Or, well, I guess they're Ra-sonas, which is a very specific breed of OC that may or may not also be a Self Insert.
I'd need more writing to determine for certain.
Please tell me I'm not the only one that saw this and immediately thought of "Fashionista" as a name.
So... it’s the Sonic Fandom 2.0? Only with 100% less... everything that made it a corn farm cesspool?
....I've never heard of She-Ra so about half of this chapter was lost on me. But honestly...none of their OCs are interesting. I don't really find the appeal in self-inserts.
Well, this was something.
A good something, mind.
.....I would've laughed so hard if Fluttershy said hers last, it was amazing and.....it wasn't her only OC and I don't mean for She-Ra, just in general. Pick a popular series, she has an OC.
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back in the late 80s, it was decided that the girls needed their version of He-Man and the Masters of the Universe, that idea became the basis of She-Ra Princess of Power. the two series were even linked by the fact that She-Ra was He-Mans twin sister and they both got their powers from the same source, Castle Greyskull. both series has a colourful cast of characters, several of them recurring, primarily the main baddies, for He-Man it was Skelletor and his forces, and for She-Ra it was Hordak and the Horde...who was, incedently, basically Skelletors boss before the bonehead went rouge on He-Mans homeworld of Eternia...
And now totally imagining Swift Wind x Celestia...
...and imagining what will happen in the crossovers when the Horde decides to take on Equestria and She-Ra must travel between worlds to help save them.
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Huh. Ok, then. Thanks for the info
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I didn't ... but now I can't unsee it.
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Those were definitely Self-Inserts. Every thing they did / power they possessed was them. And from the looks of it, they were ramping up the Marry Sueness to the extremes ... honestly that was bad, and they should feel bad. Or at least learn what makes a good OC.
I mean the only one that really could work as an OC was Fauna, while a Self-Insert, is so generic and something you'd see in Silver Age alot, that it can in fact "probably" work. But the rest need to learn that Self-Inserts are the bane of good writing, if you're going full on Marry Sue / Garry Stu.
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Oh it was super Satire. At least once you remember that Mythril Moth's OCs come across as regular characters. And the Marry Sue, Self Insert nonsense is poking fun at horrible writers, making trash characters that are overpowered representations of themselves.
Pinkie Pie: Best at all comedy. Even meta jokes. And has a laughing gas gun.
Rainbow Dash: Best at all sports. Uses her sports skills to kick all the ass.
Sunset Shimmer: Fire Bender Fire Princess, with an unlimited control as to what she can do with fire. And uses a pheonix motif.
Flutters: Has Fluttershy's ability to speak to all animals like a Disney Princess. And have them work for her like an animal version of Silver Age Aquaman.
Twilight Sparkle: Even admits that all of her ideas are rip offs of a character. And lacks originality.
So yeah, as you can see. It pokes fun at the whole "Look at me! I'm the best at everything! I have no weaknesses, and I'm best friends with / lover / secret child of Main Cast!" That Self Insert OC's (the worst OC's imaginable) have in common.
...yep, shoulda seen this coming.
For the record, it wouldn't shock me in the slightest if we saw a large mass of She-Ra/MLP crossovers in the near-future. I'm tempted to do one myself someday. Just imagine Swift Wind finding his way into Equestria...
... Wasn't this already released? I feel like I read this already
I'm still working on She-Ra, and yeah, Twilight's OC would just basically be Entrapta.
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Ah okay. That IS a good point.
.... I want to complain about those ocs but im uninformed about anything related to that series. Also i want to cringe, but i cant since they all sound like my own characters, lightningman and voidic
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So da fuck do i do now?
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That'd be some feat considering She-Ra premiered yesterday on Netflix and I wrote this chapter this afternoon.
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Oh yeah. They're coming.
I have one question are they talking about the original or that crappy reboot that came out on Netflix?
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I'm thinking the big issue wouldn't be Swiftwind...
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Adora looked around, an expression of mild concern on her face. The room was filled with incomprehensible equipment, all for purposes she could only begin to guess at. Things buzzed and flashed, or spooled paper with lines drawn on them. A large mirror surrounded by similar equipment sat in a clearly-defined place of honor in a corner of the room, and wires ran everywhere.
The Sword of Protection hovered in a purple energy field, held in place by the purple alicorn standing nearby. The pony stood about as tall as she did, and was furiously scribbling notes in a pad she was holding in a similar energy field. Her sword was covered in little electrode probes, which ran wires to most of the things in the room, including what looked suspiciously like a brooch with a star pattern on it exactly matching the one on the pony's flank.
"So... let me get this straight," the purple alicorn began as she walked over to Swiftwind. The horse was taking all this in with the same bewildered confusion Adora was. As it was, the transformed horse towered over both girls, standing significantly higher than either of them. He was also covered in little stickied electrodes, and trying to ignore their presence as the purple alicorn princess adjusted a few things with a hoof.
"You're saying that you just waved that sword around, said a few words, and suddenly you'd transformed a common Terrestrial horse into an alicorn?"
Adora glanced back at Swiftwind, and bit her lip. "Umm... I guess so?"
Twilight adjusted her notepad and stared at the various readouts for a long minute. Then she looked back at the other two. "I'm debating asking you to leave it here for me to study versus confiscating it as a possibly Equestrian-destabilizing weapon of epic proportion. Not sure which I should go with."
Adora bristled at the comment. "Hey!"
When creating OC protagonists for any fandom, I have one unbreakable rule.
Do NOT, under ANY circumstances, outshine a canon character in their speciality.
It's alright to make one-off characters who can know more about that area of expertise, as it is plausible for someone to know something the canon character does not, but if they are supposed to be protag-level characters, then the best they can do is be able to give the canon character a run for their money in some way.
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Oh yeah, that sword would definitely raise an eyebrow or two.
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The reboot, most likely. Given the attention span of the average highschooler, they probably wouldn't be in a rush to track down the original.
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I think that was kinda the point. I do feel like a lot of OCs in fanfiction are basically self-inserts, which is pretty bland and cliche.
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Yep. Thankfully this was satire poking fun at all the people who break that rule as if it were the height of originality.
But this chapter is good as satire IMO, but cringe as a chapter ... especially since everyone's known someone who's made a character like those (especially the "Alicorn" self inserts, or the characters who "can do sonic rainbooms, one hit KO Tirek, and all the Mane 6 find (usually him) super sexy and awesome" ... bonus points if its a red and black who's super broody and fueled by wangst.).
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Chalk it up to the parts that were lost on me, then. Of all the stories I've read, I can remember only one that I dropped because the OCs were boring. On Archive of Our Own, I think self-insert OCs are generally tagged, so I just skip those outright.
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Crappy? Well, you're entitled to your crappy opinion, I suppose. (Have you even bothered watching it?)
I haven't watched the She-Ra reboot yet (mostly because I've yet to catch up on Voltron) but I got the gist of it. It's talking about OCs and how they can sometimes be really crappy or really good or anywhere in between.
And, come to think of it, that's probably why I've only posted two stories so far. I have a ton of stuff in development that I want to flesh out and post here, but I want to use OCs as little as possible to avoid getting called out.
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I'm frightened!
It would be, I'm getting that deja vu shit
(nice chapter regardless)
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What if he's thinking of the 1985 version of She-Ra?
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I mean, it's the He-Man universe. I assume it's super campy and have no particular interest in watching it.
Of course, campy doesn't mean crappy.
Haven't watched She-Ra (either the old or the new) or even He-Man, but I think I can come up with an OC:
Introducing Princessa, princess of princesses. She rules a country, has an army and elite personal guard, represents her country in world summits and hosts ballroom dances.
This was honestly fascinating to read from an outside perspective. I do plan on looking into She-Ra, but the satire was on point and the glimpses of what they're working with... Yeah, that's He-Man character design right there. (I'm surprised Dash didn't halt the conversation to focus on the fact that an actual work of fiction has a character named Fisto.)
Dammit, Hasbro. When we going to get to a Visionaries reboot? That shit was awesome.
(Speaking of Hasbro, is anyone offended by this? Or at least more offended than amused?)
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The original My Little Pony was 80s schlock for girls, full of camp and narrow appeal. And yet here you are, on a website for fanfiction for the current version of My Little Pony. Imagine if you had made this kind of dismissive assumption about MLP:FiM?
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I have seen the reboot and the only main problem I have is that when Princess Adora not She-Ra her outfit and look's makes her look like a guy, plus they are teens not adults. I know they were going for a young teen demographic but I think they just focused to much on the target audience and took what worked in the original cut it up and put it in this new series, hope this help's also good fimfic
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I love it most it's a satire (if I'm using it right) of what's wrong in the world today there only missing a tag about entitlement and they would cover the 70 or so persent that gives my generation a bad name (1983 birthed) but I'll stick to the older model of the game as I don't really care how wthey try to stay with the times.
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Look, obviously Discord cares very, very much about Fluttershy. She's pretty much his most important anything in the whole world. It's just that caring very strongly about someone else isn't necessarily being capable of handling romantic love. He did all of that stuff you mentioned simply out of friendship, because that how much it means to him. And, well, that's kinda the worrying thing.
See, Discord can do practically anything, and for all we know he's always had that power. This means that practically nothing has any value to him. The reason Fluttershy was able to redeem him was because he realized - possibly for the first time ever - that her friendship was something he couldn't just conjure up or create or manipulate her into. It was something beyond his power, and she just gave it to him, willingly. It must have seemed like the only thing in the universe that was actually valuable to him.
And yet he still messed it up several times - Tree Hugger, Tirek, etc. He sure liked friendship but he didn't really understand how it was supposed to work, so he had to figure it out little by little. It's still largely a mystery to him, something strange and intuitive that both frustrates and fascinates him.
I'm not saying he's incapable of romantic feelings. I'm just saying he's nowhere near ready for that. If anything, I suspect Discord actually falling in love could potentially get really dangerous.
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Which is why I said crush, rather than love. Heck there's an episode dedicated to Discord not really getting love, but still managing to help a romance via a bit of chaos (and there was a bet on the line that he threw just to help it along).
So I do agree that he doesn't really get love, or romance. And isn't ready for it. But as you said, she's his most valuable thing in all existence to him. Hell even more valuable than all the wealth in the universe would be to a dragon. But even as he's slowly over the episodes made friends with the other Element Bearer's. Fluttershy will always be the most important everything to him.
The first to give him the one thing he could never create, the first one to share herself with him (as in friendship / part of her life), hell she's even given him the power of forgiveness multiple times. But yeah, if he ever does learn the feelings sparking his actions towards her, then yeah. It could get pretty scary. Hell as is, it'd be scary when she eventually dies.
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That's me for 95% of what I like... guess what's in the other 5?
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Well either I can think of something; a lot of something*; but honestly it's probably this. Because this is an awesome way to spend any 5%.
*: And yes I posted this one and the one before because I thought they were funny and cute.
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Didn’t even think about that, o.O, tia go home and rest, we got a new badass, xD
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Lolyep! And let's face it, Tia is long overdo for a vaca. If she had any other job she'd have saved up like a bazillion PTO hours.
Of course we can always try getting Twilight to get her a day off. Or we can introduce Equestria to the other Best Princess, Princess Sunset Shimmer.
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That’s something that perplexed me from the moment i saw it, in the song “my past is not today” by the end ShimSham sprouts Phoenix wings/tail, (obvious reference is obvious) but she isn’t a Princess in “Forgotten Friendship,”............ that doesn’t make any sense,
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I know. We see her literally being remade with the power of friendship, and comes out like a butterfly comes out of the cocoon as an Alicorn. Horns, Wings, magic girl super powers.
Yet they make a unicorn, who never did shit to earn her place an ali (Sci-Twi). But Best Princess, lost her wings, and her ascension? I call all the bullshit, and crapy writing on the writers part.
You know, catadora I buy. But, Cattrap? Don't see it. They are 'maybe' friends? I would have to see more in second season.
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That DOES cover more percentage points than it should...