Long ago far off in the heavens there was a distant planet called Kolton. Home to a race of Equine like beings whose prowess in science and technology allowed them to create an advanced civilization such as no pony had seen before or since.
When a series of violent tremors and eruptions heralded the planet's doom one couple placed their young foal in a rocket and launched him into space toward a far distant planet whose yellow sun would give him powers and abilities beyond those of any stallion or mare.
Faster than a Sonic Rainboom! More Powerful than an Ursa Major! Able to leap tall mountain peaks in a single bound! The Colt of Steel from the planet Kolton, Comet!
This story is based on the Adventures of Superman and Comet the Superhorse. Both are registered trademarks of DC comics.
Not much I can say other than thanks for getting this story started. Next to Batman (particularly the "Batman: the Animated Series" version), Superman is my favorite super-hero, so seeing this opening so faithful to the source material is quite heartening. Excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
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Thanks I really appreciate that.
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Awww, man. That was truly an emotional chapter. :-C _ _ _ _
Still, quite well written. The exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. Just about the only thing I can politely suggest for future chapters is please do a better job of changing paragraphs every time there is a new speaker.
Of course, I'm going to go out on a limb and guess her mother's death is what causes AJ to head to Manehattan for a while, only to return when she sees the first Sonic Rainboom .
Though, I will admit I could be wrong on that guess. At any rate, I will definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Well I'd keep that box of tissues handy because it's not over yet.
I've been taking tearjerking lessons from Disney.
Well that will be fun to explain. I think Pa will be coming clean a dinner tonight. Twilight will be in for a fun time when she finds out about Applecomet's little abilities.
Not much I can say other than superb work on this latest chapter. These accounts of Comet's super-powers starting to develop are quite well done, with several well placed references to classic pieces of the Superman mythos. Now, all I can politely suggest is that you please do a better job changing paragraphs with every new speaker. It makes it easier to figure out who is saying what.
But I digress:
I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that the Flim-Flam Brothers are going to be sharing the Lex Luthor role (since they are pretty much the Apple Family arch-enemies AND they combine both the mad scientist AND businessman aspects of Luthor) .
But I will admit it IS just a wild guess which is just as likely to be wrong as it is right.
But, at any rate, I will still be looking forward to more of this, but will quite understand if I need to be patient.
Thanks I'm glad your enjoying the story so far. I've already started work on the next chapter and hopefully will have it done by next week. I'll try to remember what you said about paragraphs!
Well at least in this continuity his mom was fully included in the memory data, looking at you Man of Seel. I wonder how he will handle Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon when they start bullying Apple Bloom?
Hello there. Thanks again for getting the next chapter up AND for making an honest effort on the paragraphing. I really appreciate you going to the effort on both counts. Splendid job on the emotional content, action, references to both "Man of Steel" AND the 3-part "Superman: the Animated Series" pilot AND the future chapter set-up in all the right places.
I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that Comet's first adventure as Supercolt (since he is only a few months older than Apple Bloom) will be helping the Mane Six stop Nightmare Moon (after all, a powerful immortal with the fate of the world at stake would be precisely the kind of thing that a super-hero [okay, super-hero IN TRAINING] would take a big interest in) .
But I WILL admit that I COULD be wrong on that. Even if I am, however, I will still be looking forward to more of this, even if I can respect how demanding real world concerns can be.
7935411 I doubt he'd do worse than give those two a stern lecture for harassing his sister and/or her friends and MAYBE threaten to tell Diamond's father on her (since anything more than that would make him look like an even bigger bully than Diamond). Still, I could see him helping Bloom master her skills with tools and potions to the point of Bloom getting her Cutie Mark MUCH sooner than in canon.
Of course, I will admit these ARE just guesses and I will freely admit that they COULD be wrong.
Ouch that is some bad mental trauma there. Also you have the font size thing in the story text.
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Thanks It's fixed now.
I notice in all of the chapters your mixing parentheses up that it's hard to understand if the character is talking or not. Be sure to fix that since it's a bit hard to read it like that.
Ouchies. :-C _ _ _ _ _ Excellent action and emotional content in this chapter. I feel bad for Comet (as well as AJ, Mac AND Bloom) for their loss, but this truly is some darn good story material and it reinforces the "with great power, there must also come great responsibility" lesson (which, yes, I know is ANOTHER super-hero's bit, but it applies well here too). I have a feeling, though, that Comet is going to be EXTRA protective of Granny and his foster siblings for at least a while. Of course, I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this, but am quite willing to be patient.
7966814 Thanks I fixed up Chapter 3 so hopefully I fixed any parenthesis errors. Let me know if you find anymore in other chapters.
Truly emotional chapter (quite appropriately so), but the funeral speeches were also beautiful. While the reactions to the events of the previous chapter were certainly quite understandable, I am glad that, at least, Bloom calmed down A LITTLE. Not much more that I can say that I haven't already been saying throughout the story anyway. I'll certainly be looking forward to more, but will respect that real world concerns have to come first.
Well that was thematic for Applecomet. Let's see how everything goes with the rest of his foalhood.
I wonder what is happening tomorrow, perhaps the 1000th anniversary of an important event? Poor Twilight is going to stumble over this and it will be glorious.
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, splendid job on the characterizations and future chapter set-up especially considering it is implied that "tomorrow" might be the day before the 1000th Summer Sun Celebration, which will probably result in Comet's first face-to-face encounter with an actual super-villain with power great enough for him to be able to go all out guilt-free (which will at least distract her long enough for his big sister and her future friends to find and activate the Elements of Harmony . Ooopsie. Guess I went a bit overboard there.
At any rate, I'll definitely be looking forward to more, but will be quite willing to be patient.
Im so Sad now *sniff* awesom work do
Can't wait for more.
Great chapter.
Very little I can say other than, once again, splendid job on this chapter. Once again, the characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I am loving all the references to the Superman movies and comics, of course. I'm glad Twi and Spike managed to mostly get out of the "flying apple tree" bit with little more than a rude awakening and some damage done to their room .
I will definitely be looking forward to more of this, but I am also quite willing to be patient.
Wait just how old are the mane 6 and the CMC here? It feels like the ages are all over the place.
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It takes place 6 years after the Mane 6 have earned their marks. It's just Apple Comet's brain development is much faster than an Equestrian Pony's. Mentally he's around 13 or 14 even though he's only 6 physically. Also we have that episode about how Applejack's parents met coming up so the canon might be subject to change in the near future. But I'll their ages in mind for future chapters so there's no inconsistencies, Thanks.
8179480 My guess would be that we're about 4 years before the show begins then and since the timeline of the show right is like 3 years right now... That would mean his a preteen by season 6-7.
Season 1-3 = 1 year
Season 4-5 = 2 year
Season 6-7 = 3 year
Our little hero is 5 with Appleboom. AppleJack 15, Twilight 12, Fluttershy 17, Rainbow Dash 16, Pinkie Pie 13 or 14, Rarity 15. The M6 ages I don't remember much but I do know that Twilight is the youngest and Fluttershy is the oldest.
Great chapter, just have fun and keep up with the great work!
I do actually really love him being train by granny. I do hope for more funny moments!
Again, very good job on this chapter. The combination of emotional content, humor and action are all quite well done, as usual. I particularly liked the reactions to the soccer ball AND the bully hurting himself trying to sucker-punch Comet (to say nothing of Comet's quick thinking as fair as keeping his powers secret in both incidents) . Sorry I took so long to respond to this. Nothing to blame for that except self-admitted laziness.
Well I think Celestia will be interested and intrigued with Comet. I do wonder if Twilight will be with her so she can meet Applejack a little early.
It would be great to see him hide the ship and his secret from the Princess. I hope the next chapter is a comedy chapter think how many close calls and great situations he finds himself in. I would like Comet to keep his secret because it makes the story interesting and fun!
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Well if you have any suggestions to hide a spaceship from an Alicorn Princess let me know okay?
Okay Comet that's enough. He's a little on edge at the moment.
Hummm me thinks Comet is going to face a new foe... Trollestia. Seriously I think she's going to know but make the little guy squirm a bit. Also doubt Granny Smith is going to let Celestial take him away, he's an Apple and is going learn to control his powers the apple way. Though Celestial might try to take the ship. Heck maybe the Princess already knows about Kolton, she is thousands of years old maybe ancient Koltonian astronauts visited Equestria?
So Comet is s Superman... Would that make the main six analogues to other DC heroes in this universe? Pinkie, Rarity and AJ's power pony persons would match Flash, Green Lantern and Wonder Woman.
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Yeah. That might be good to see. Might be cute to see Twi meeting and slightly bounding with at least one of her future friends a few years before Nightmare Moon returns.
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Yeah. Possibly. And, actually, if the rest of the Mane Six end up becoming analogues to other DC heroes, I could easily see Twi being Green Lantern (considering there ARE times when her magic seems to be only limited by her willpower and imagination). As for Rarity, well, considering her upper class background, plus her canon skills in both martial arts AND detective work and her JUST demonstrated ability to even intimidate beings MUCH more powerful than herself , I would probably put HER as Batman.
Hey there. Once again, excellent job on this latest chapter. The humor in the tests was quite well done particularly concerning the crashed-into pole and the broken vanity and the characterizations were quite well done.
And, Bloom, considering your canon talent with potions (which you won't discover for a few years yet), yeah, I COULD actually see you somehow finding a way to temporarily gain similar powers to those of your foster brother (which would make you an excellent analogue to Supergirl). However, as I said, that won't be for at least a few years.
At any rate, I'll very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite willing to be patient.
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Twilight could easily stand in for Zatanna or Dr Fate, DC's biggest magic hero's. Though Trixie could be the Zatana equivalent.
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Point quite well taken.
Yikes!
Wow that is a great reference to Superman's world of cardboard speech in Justice League.
Dame.
Whoa. And I thought TWILIGHT could come up with some dark imagination spots concerning Celestia. Though, I suppose I can understand why Comet would be so worried. Yeah, nobody ACTUALLY got hurt, but fearing that somebody might have would be A LOT worse than being one or two days late on a friendship report.
Anyway, great job on this deleted scene. Well, on to the next chapter.
Again, excellent job on this deleted scene. The exchanges were quite well done and I kind of liked the little bits of humor - including when Twilight sneezed at the same time Comet asks how many ponies cause as many freak accidents in one day as he does - but particularly when Comet had the little accident concerning the soup with his cold breath and heat vision. And, as badninja said, there was also a very good reference to Superman's now-classic "World of Cardboard" speech.
At any rate, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also be understanding if real world concerns don't allow you as much writing time as you would like.
Yea Comet must be thinking to hard... Still I hope his secret is safe from any Pony else but his family only, because if someone else like Celestia knew then the story will not really go forward much... Though I think now back in the old animated series and Smallville maybe few will know and keep it from Celestia though Discord would know right at the back since he can tell what's the difference from him and the other ponies.
This was really good so far! Actually thinking of it maybe instead of Celestia checking out where the tree came from maybe it should be either Cadence or Shining?
Thanks immensely for sharing this VERY entertaining deleted scene. :-D Great job, of course, on the exchange, characterizations and humor. :-D
I think the apple cellar would be a great place to hide the rocket.
Good start, and now that I'm interested here is some music...
https://youtu.be/1qHDWdGPomw
As someone with a kiss curl I can somewhat relate. Although I like having it.
Couldn't help but hear that bit in George Newbern's voice in Justice League Unlimited.
Apple Comet has a crush on Twilight? I'm a little worried about the age difference. I assume it's only a temporary thing and he'll get over it.
Comet’s reactions where priceless! I bet as Twilight gets to know him she will be very impressed with what he knows.
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Blame me, the author asked for some ideas and I threw this out. I was hoping that more people would throw out ideas but it looks like mine won.