I don't even...
Through the glowing paned windows, a radiant substance of light was filtered into the cozy looking cottage where Ponyville's teacher resided. The glow of the dawn sun cast a natural type of magic on all of the lazy little town. But though the light was quite gentle, and only meant to coax you slowly out of dreamland, the teacher was up only a couple minutes after its soft shimmer gently tugged her awake. She opened one eye slowly, followed by the other, and like that her mint green eyes reached their first vision of the new day. It was simply glorious. Cheerilee smiled happily, relaxed and refreshed after last nights events. She was, for once, actually looking forward to her work. Maybe I should do my work in the morning more often... she thought as she began the pain-staking process of getting oneself out of their warm, comfy, luxurious bed. Finally she managed to get her heavy head off the soft silk pillow, and she blinked the last specks of lingering sleep out of her eyes. She straightened her back, placed her hooves under her and sat up, letting a yawn escape her muzzle as she took the next step of escaping from her tangling maze of sheets. When she succeeded in this endevour, she attempted to then lower herself out of her bed. She groaned a little as she positioned herself sideways and felt herself slipping from the matress, her hindlegs touching the dusty wood paneled floor, followed by her forelegs. The click of her hooves landing softly up and down rang in a lovely tune through the house. She made her way across the floor of her bedchamber and walked confidently down the stairs that she usually at least tripped up on, hence the lack of a hoofrail (which really should have been there.) Once she touched the last creaky footstep to the first floor, she strode back to her antique desk, lowering herself once again into the rocking chair and starting to slowly tilt back and forth. She smiled as she saw the rest of the papers laying in front of her, exactly as they had been the previous attempt. She took the first and began to read.
My pet Crystal
By Diamond Tiara
Crystal is my poodle. Shes really pretty, much prettier then all the other pets the rest of the classroom is writing about. Shes gorgeous, simply stunning. Daddy says shes just like me. Everypony loves her, shes pink and fluffy and she has a cute little tiara that matches mine. We will win every single pet show that ever comes to Ponyville because shes the very best pet and no pet is better then her.
Cheerilee raised a skeptical eyebrow. That last sentence may have just been competitive, but it sounded like a threat. Gorgeous, stunning? That wasn't exactly the goal of writing a report that was supposed to tell about your pet and say why you loved him or her. Just for her looks? That sounded a tad snobbish. Plus, her writing skills weren't exactly tip top shape. Miss Cheerilee only sighed as she gave Diamond Tiara the same mark as everyone before her- a B-. She then smiled peacefully and moved along, hoping to be able to give someone a different mark.
My pet Goldy
By Silver Spoon
Goldy is an awesome little hamster. Shes golden, hence her name, and she is also very fluffy. Sometimes, after a day of going along when Diamond Tiara bullies other fillies and colts she lets me hug her and tell her about my problems. Like my annorexia and my low self esteem. And then I brush her and I feed her and we laugh because shes my only real friend. But that's OK because shes a great friend. And shes the second best in Ponyville! Next to Crystal of course... P.S. don't let Diamond Tiara see this or she'd be mad! :(
Cheerilees ears rocketed flat against her head. What the hell was she even looking at? Bullied by Diamond Tiara? Annorexia? She had to notify this poor fillies parents! She looked around, weighing the worth of ratting on the filly. Well, if she told Silver's parents, then they would get mad at Filthy rich who would make sure the blame ended up where? The teacher who 'saw a problem and didn't try to correct it until too late.' Cheerilee shuddered and decided that she would have to let this one go. She gave it the exact same mark, beginning to feel like she wouldn't need any other.
My pet Pepper
By Twist
Pepper is a skunk that I found in my backyard. She smelled really weird, kinda gross, so I took her inside for a bath. My mom screamed at me and told me to put her down, but I couldn't do it. So I hid her in the garage. There were claw marks all over the walls and it smelled really icky, but I still gave her some food even though she bit me a lot. And my mom took me to the doctor and he said I had something call ratskis or rabis or something, but I still keep Pepper in the garage and my mom doesn't know but hey its her fault for not letting me get a cat.
Cheerilee was speechless. For a second, her brain wouldn't even work properly. Wild skunks and rabies? That was it. She once again removed herself from the chair, letting her hooves drop to the ground as she walked away from the desk. She grew farther and farther away from the oddities of her job as she entered the kitchen, feeling the notable change of wood to polished tile as she entered the door, heading straight for one goal and one goal only. She needed about five cups of coffee right now, and nothing- not even her job of teaching a class full of wackos, misfits, daredevils in training, hoity toity brats and future outlaws would stop her.
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So Pipsqueak's definitely going to be a Pirate when he grows up then?
5177528
That's the Equestrian dream
Thanks for reading!
I'd like to leave an upvote but the story overall feels a little...flat.
There's no satisfying ending and virtually no paragraph spacing. The whole chunk of text a the beginning makes next to impossible to read properly.
That's not saying this is a bad idea. I actually quite like the premise and the characterisation in this story. I just think you need a little direction on your writing.
5177603
Thank you, it's always nice to get fresh advice. I felt this may have been just a tad dry, but I needed a sequel and only meant it as a "cute" one shot follow up. But really, thank you!
5177621
Honestly? Why not just consolidate it all into one story? I know it's a bit late now, but there are plenty of stories filled with one-shots as the chapters.
The format you're writing in here is perfect for that.
All teachers must have a moment like this at some point in their career. Just, not as insane...
5177627
Hmm... now that I think about it, that's a great idea. Just something to roll it all up.
I may do that. Thanks again good sir/ma'am!
5177637
Yeah, they really do XD
But face it, the danger death class is out to ruin Cheerilee.
Sorry, but I fail to see the humor here.
5177722
Heh, I was trying to be a tad dark...
I see it worked
Thanks for your opinion!
5177645
So true.
I agree the chunk of text at the begining could have been split up to be easier to read though I had no problem reading it myself lol.
I don't think the writing was flat at all but more indifferent then anything else.
This style of writing is very hard to pull off I myself have never tried it due to thinking I could never pull it off, It is meant to feel dry and almost black and white with color showing only when it is necessary.
Though some say this had a dark moment or two, and that Cherilee is selfish putting herself before others., I think no she is merely a sane pony in the throws of what is surely a chaotic place.
If I had to liken the style of these great fics to anything I'd have to say " Clerks." Loved that movie.
And loved this fic.
Once more you have given me yet another story to add to my favs.
keep up the good work, you know you want to
Other than the wall of text opening, this is pretty good.
5177873
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Thanks for your opinion!
I do love writing in this style, and I'm glad you think I'm good at it! I bet you could do it too!
(And I LOVED your representation of my style
Thank you so much!
I hope to continue entertaining you and all of fimfiction.
5177909
Gahh, thanks!
5177928
I am gonna fix that in future stories.
Thanks so much!
Cheerilee remains sane only through large applications of morning coffee it seems.
5178098
Yes, it seems she does.
Then again, who doesn't?
Thanks for reading!
5177592 HAHAHAHAHAHAHA LOVED IT
PINKIEPIEISILLUMINATI/10 Great job as always! Also, NEW TEXT ART :D!:
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5178577
Thanks so much!
Wow
Nice textart!
Yay! Awesomeness!
And God dang do I feel bad for Silver Spoon.
5178625
XD
Thanks!
(Yeah, Diamond tiara is... abusive, to say the least.)
5178620 In the time it took you to reply (3 mins 19 seconds) i re-read the story and loved it a second time, i have to admit, this is one of the best works you've ever made, seriously, it's amazing.
Stay Awesome!
5178637
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XD
Thanks so much!
(speed read
See this is why I feel bad for the good teachers out there who collect all the crap from parents that their special little snowflake can do no wrong. Then they wonder why that kid becomes such a screw-up in the future. I wish there was something that made parents actually correct their kids when they do wrong and not pass the buck. If only there was something like that...
5179063
I know right?
Thanks for reading!
And yeah, being a teacher can be...
very degrading.
5179089
Funny thing is, I see some of the people who were like this during school. Yeah, they lost it when they weren't the center of attention anymore.
5177637
No, there are some teachers who probably have to deal with stupider kids out there and still can't do anything about it or risk losing their job.
I laughed my but off on Twists. Imagining it in her voice made it better.
Silvers Spoon's got issues. Serious issues.
5178074
You're welcome.
Is the Pepper in this story named after the skunk from Littlest Pet Shop?
poor filly's parents!
Filthy Rich, who would
The teacher who "saw a problem and didn't try to correct it until too late".
hoity toity brats, and future outlaws - would stop her.
Good story, by the way.
Much improved from the last one, and much funnier too. I think DT deserved a lower grade because she missed a big piece of the assignment and because she's a brat.
I was disappointed that you didn't make a joke about how Silver Spoon thinks "Goldie" has been alive for years and years.
"I've had Goldie since I was just 3 years old... one time Goldie looked sick, and mom and dad were looking at each other kind of nervously. Then mom took me out for ice cream, and when we came back, Goldie was all better! She looked a little bit different from before but I didn't care as long as Goldie was ok."
What the smeg is wrong with this mare?! She thinks about doing something for the filly with annorexia, but then dosn't, and not even a thought about the filly living in a box. For Celestia's sake Cheerilee, have a heart.
5182508
Yes, she is :3
5179323
XD
it was fun to write, considering twist is my favorite filly
Thanks!
5182778
Thanks! *Must edit better*
5183891
Thank you so much!
OMG XD
And then one day I came home and goldy was way more white then gold. She almost looked like a different hamster!
Wait a minute...
I must use that somewhere in a future story.
...and a tub of ice-cream...a big one!