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BewhoUr


I don't care if you're black, white, bisexual, straight, gay, lesbian, short, tall, fat, skinny, rich, or poor. If you're nice to me, I'll be nice to you. Simple as that.

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Just when she was about to admit defeat, the fact that she would never breach the sky becoming omnipresent, a special somepony decided to give her another chance.

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Comments ( 27 )

Awwwww2

Where's the romance?

5197410
Someone asked me for a rumbleoo fic, and I decided i'd put the romance tag so long as I hinted at some stuff.
Thanks for the fave!

I have to agree – where's the romance?

This story could have gone places... but then it didn't.
She didn't even get any real flying instruction, just "What you were doing, do it some more."

Add that to a few grammar errors, and this goes into the 'meh' pile.

5197434
Respectful.
I agree that the romance may have been missing, and I think meh is a good grade.
Thanks for your opinion!

This was cute. Even if yes, I agree with ocalhoun. There's no romance, maybe just friendship, and flight instructions: WHAT KIND OF MENTOR IS HE?? XD

5197842
LOL
"ok Scootaloo! Just do what you've been trying to do and failing at for years!"
*Blinks*
I'm glad you thought it was cute.
I promised someone rumbleoo, and I just needed the tag... :twilightsheepish:
Thanks for reading!

Not mainstream romance but I could see the romantic hints within.

Rumble watching scoots= affection.

Rumble impressed by scoots determination= smitten.

Rumble not laughing at scoots= respect to her feelings.

Rumble helping scoots with encouraging words=shy affection to scoots.

The romantic hints are here, most people simply think of romance as in your face.

But no this is the start of a affectionate relationship, schoolyard romance if you will.

Flowed well, style great a few errors a sentence near the front was jumbled.

Overall great fix loved it!

The way she kept at it... It was admireable.

"admirable".

5198268
Thanks!
Yeah, I found a way to sneak little bits of childish romance in there.
I mean come on.
Hes stalking her.
XD
But really, thanks for pointing out the mistakes and I'm glad you enjoyed :raritystarry:

5198935
Many thanks good ma'am/sir.

Cool story bro but, where's the romance? There better be a sequel to this story! You got so much potential here, you know what, F#CK IT!

We'll do it live!

PM me if you want to make a story deal. There's a lot of unused potential for this story, don't let it go to waist!

5199728
I might be up for something like that.
A sequel sounds nice too.
Do you mean like a co-write?

5199740 if you'd like, I am one to know his way around a romance story. I even helped with one and I'm working on another romance story with another person. But I can squeeze you in on my schedule for co writing stories.

1,031 words?
Short enough for a quick review

You're almost doing it Scootaloo! Just a little more...

Narration, wich is fine thinking that this is a fic, but a Sin anyways.
Also, Scootaloo

her tiny wings flapped back and forth so fast you could barely see them.

Haha, it's funny because it looks like a chicken... oh.

I have to admit

Oh, so it was narration!
Also, Rumble

Her huffing

Do not confuse with Hoofing

It was admireable.

Fangirlin'
Also, I think I've spotted a mispelled word.

But her almost trance-like state shattered as gravity regained control and she cascaded down,

Gravity is a dick to chickens
Also, did I'd memed right?

Well that was a waste of time...

No commas where hurted in the doing of this fic

Scootaloo sighed mournfully over lost moments.

What?

Almost like a doll.

Mad Father all over again.

It didn't sound creepy... at least I didn't think so.

Yes it did

stalker

Shadow of Scootaloo

talking to me in a language that only the ones with wings could ever possibly understand

That's racist

A little fic, with nothing about Shipping, unless the constant creeping out of Rumble counts, and in that case, I prefer the other kind of Stalker. Paragraphs problems, and a lot. I said it before in this review, and I say it again, no much comma use.

Overall is a nice little fic, nothing too serious.

5201289 Wow, your REALLY good at reviewing! I have never see such a good review before, you spot everything list is politely, and that makes a WORLD of a difference. Really cool.

5197417 OHMEHGURD YOU ACTUALLY WROTE IT!!! :D!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE THE BEST WRITER EVER!
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5201682
Urmurgurd
Dat number doh
XD
Thanks

5201682
*bows*
Thanks sir/mam

5201704 You are welcome Sir/Madam (profile pic threw me off, its an epic pic BTW.)

Simple, but cute. I liked how Scootaloo and Rumble were characterized and it managed to get a smile out of me, which is something I highly appreciated. Great job! :twilightsmile:

5224787
Aww, thank you! I'm glad it made you happy <3

5224805 You're welcome. :pinkiesmile:

5201704
I kindly thank you for the review, it made me smile <3

5237326
It was my pleasure

The ending didn't really seem like it was the end. Still love though, it's real cute!

We need a sequel fore the romance part

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