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Vinyl and Octavia, despite living together, have never been seen at the same time. Is there a reasonable explanation for this? Or, could there be a deceptive reason?

Thanks to TheArtrix for the cover art.

Inspired by the comic "The same pony" by "TheMaiah"

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Randomreader-001 (webshoter) did a fanfic reading of this. You can listen to is here.

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IT'S A TABLOID STATION.

Sauron #2 · Sep 1st, 2014 · · 3 ·

I believe the phrase is "One and the Same".

Woah! dude that's creepy :moustache:

So, wait...Octavia and Vinyl share a physical body, but don't see each-other as the same pony. Good.
This other pony thinks they are. Good.
They don't act like one pony though, because Tavi was practicing her Cello during Vinyl's gigs...Hmmm...
Transposition with an alternate mind-scape? The body acts like a car, and they take turns driving.

Wow. Ur good

Like the story, however casted is not a word past tense of cast is cast
So how’s it (casted)?” [cast] in each case.

A chance of multiple personality disorder? Or some sort of internal twin?

Sequel please:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

Great story. Needs a sequel.

So Octavia/Vinyl is suffering from Dissociative Identity Disorder/Multiple Personality Disorder?
Intriguing... I've never seen something like this be done before. Have a like.

Interesting concept. But your story leaves a lot of questions open. Are they two different personalities developed by one pony? Where they separate before and somehow merged? Why are they hiding it like that?
Without that question answered or at least hinted this is more some sort of exposition than a complete story. Even if an exposition that creates hunger for more.

4935772 I think it's like Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde.

An interesting idea, but I think that the execution is lacking. So little is explained that the story doesn't feel like it's complete at all. And without any knowledge of what the deal with Vinyl and Octavia is, it doesn't seem dark enough to really justify the tag. And the inclusion of cell phones really bugs me, since they certainly don't exist in canon. That alone should be enough to give this an alternate universe tag.

@Bullet25...

1. I agree with others' opinions that the story premise is very, very good, but the story writing definitely could use revision &/or refinement.

2. On a separate note, I certainly hope you have not given up Duplicity, I enjoyed that story a lot as well.

4936023 The reply button, use it.

4936056

Goodness me... To reply to one of Bullet25's Comments down the list. Why didn't I think of that? Truly, you are a paragon of observation.

4936085 I don't think I appreciate your snarky attitude.

:rainbowhuh:
Complete?
You've used that word, but I don't think it means what you think it does.

4936056

My advice for you then, would be: If you cannot take the snarky, then do not dish out the snarky.

Or as Buddy Christ would say: "Snark unto others as you would have them snark unto you."

4936183 Sarcasm, my acquaintance, learn it.

The voices man, the fucking voices!

interesting. But far too short to properly get the message and feelings across.

An interesting concept, but feels a little short. It was written like it was supposed to be filled with suspense, but didn't really deliver on that.

Hmm, a very interesting idea I'd love to see expanded upon. Main complaints being the two side(main?) characters were basically wasted and were only their to 'out' Octavia Melody. As a concept this really works and wasn't too bad as a short one shot ether. Good job

4935445 Casted is in fact a word whether I am using it right not is another story. I couldn't get anybody to proofread this properly, and the person who normal does my proofreading hasn't had his computer fixed in over six months.

4936000

execution is lacking

I'd agree with you. I'm not that great of a writer.

it doesn't seem dark enough to really justify the tag.

I honestly couldn't think of a better tag.

give this an alternate universe tag

I will do that.

4936023 1) Yes it could. And maybe one day I will go back and do that but as for now it is "complete" It was an idea floating in my head for several weeks and with my limited writing ability this was the best I could do as of now. Plus it wasn't really proofread. 2) I have not forgotten about Duplicity. Unfortunately I am NOT going to post any chapter of that story without my main(and only) proofread going through it first. He hasn't had a working computer for over six months now, so there is no way he can do any proofreading for me. I have the basics of the rest of the story laid out so once he gets his computer there will be more.

4936152 I know what it means. This is just as complete as I can make it for now.

4936097 A little over the top in my tastes as well, but yeah, you gotta admit that was at least a little funny.

4936152 well.. It's seems complete for me

So, what is it Dissociative Identity Disorder?

I like this. Can this story continue please?

Don’t forget to miss their next performance

shouldn't it be not miss?

4936816 Changed it to "Don't forget to see" because written out "Do not forget to not miss" sounds like a double negative.

The concert hall was quite noise with the chatter of ponies as they found their sets and got settled for the upcoming performance.

The concert hall was quite noise?

Well that's a first but also works at the same time. O_o :rainbowderp:


BUSTIT!

Finally, something with these two that isn't shipping!!

While the writing could be improved, the story idea is actually quite brilliant. I'd like to take it somewhere given that these are my favorite characters. :pinkiehappy:

Holy shit :rainbowderp: the truth has been revealed :pinkiecrazy:

4936539
Sadness, it feels like there is a lot of potential here to explore their relationship.

Naturally, i would like to know why the two would get into business that really doesn't actually concern them.

This story is good and has great potential, not continuing it with more chapters or at least a sequel would be a shame.

Whoa. Weird.

I like it.:heart:

Really? Who believes in gossip these days? A gossip does nothing but destroys the live of a person UNLESS, it can be confirmed by real cold hard evidence not just some speculation theory!

That was weird. It isn't really dark though, just sort of delusional.

this is the second D.I.D story that I've read with Vinyl and Octavia

gratz on getting featured

There is no pony emoji to describe this fic except this one. :pinkiecrazy: Great job!

Nice one. Congrats on the Feature!

4936539 Wait, the dark was supposed to be Vinyl and Octavia? What is dark about that? I thought the psycho stalker was the dark. Because she is definitely 'lock her up!' psycho stalker.

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