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Uh...What the heck happened near the end? I could bearly read it ;;;
6191902 All that stuff near the end was comments that myself and the other editors made while editing this story on the g-doc. Psi, you need to fix your ending so all those random conversations are there.
OK, I really loved Fancy, Fleur, and Fleetfoot'd personalities. Fancy being a fencer, Fleur being a dressmaker, and Fleetfoot being a dancer and dressmaker was interesting. Plus, Luna offering advice to Dusk was interesting and Dusk forgiving/healing Bronze was a pretty sweet scene. Hope to see more of this story soon.
6191902 ah bugger. I forgot to remove the google doc comments. Sorry.
6191961 yeah, just did.
6191963 Just checking since it was kinda distracting at the end there ;;;
But other than that, great job :P
Dr. Good Will is my own OC. His hobbies include Hunting and saying "It's not your fault" to people with issues when appropriate.
6191962 Thanks! I tried to help expand the minor background characters to flesh them out fir future cameos
Hopefully Dusk will get more than just pointing a pointy stick at teh other guy and hoping it hits, things like delayed magic and situational activation, that which lies unactivated until impact etc?
At least Rarity enjoyed herself. Fleurs dress could have other things, hidden, distractions, triggers etc.
That chessboard though. Oh dear. Someone really needs to get some paper and crayons and start running Game Of Life instead.
Hope Dusk manages to corrupt the hold on Trixie.
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Dusk's Magic? It's every expanding!
She and Dusk both did! And that's amusing, but it was her wedding dress, she just wanted to make it exciting!
That chessboard indeed!
Don't worry, Trixie will have her day.
6194969 ... Two dudes?... Hooking up?... Ah, I can't do that joke; it's completely legal now.
Anyway, no. Like, hay no. The story Dusk and Rune is straightly straight, my friend. Like, it's so straight, using the word perpendicular is the death penalty there. Rune is simply an OC that's a friend to Dusk (However eccentric may be). In fact, he has a crush on Spoiler Warnings (Default pony name used to hide the identity of ponies), but decides on Sneaky Peeks as his marefriend, with a couple more on the way!
Also, I thought what you meant was that you weren't going to read it because Rune was a male character (There are some people who think that females are master gender)... NOW things make sense. I get what you mean; I myself am a "No-Yaoi" kind of person.
The Fog Its Sombra, The Alicorn Amulet was being Crafted for/by Sombra to fight Celestia & Luna on even terms. Look at it Design and Sombra's Armor They Match. I Love the Tangled Web you are weaving. By the way Congrats this is MY second longest message on this site have a
6195254 Thank you for your interest and ideas! And for the Pierce Anthony refrence! And for properly spoiler warningyour guesses!
In exchange I'll try to keep things interesting so you have reason to post more!
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What I said about getting back to the atmosphere of this story... this does even better. It's a calm yet engaging mood. Rarity's gentle protection of Dusk is a great example.
Gelding? As in castration? The implication of general bisexuality was a subtle touch, along with the suggestion that herds might have more than one stallion, but really? Please tell me there's a typo here.
Interesting vision. Does it mean that Fluttershy specifically is needed to help Trixie, or just the element she embodies. Either way, does this mean she'll be coming back sooner than in the show?
Still not 100% on Bronze, but I like where here character is going.
This is my guesses:
The unidentified Darkness feels like a final boss.
Sombra is just a henchman. The Shadowy chess piece. Used to try and bring Trixie back to its Dark Army of Doom.
At least, if all else fail, they can summon the Doom Slayer/Doomguy/Doom Marine to kill every chess pieces and even the Great Darkness itself. The guy slaughtered Legions of Hell and powerful Demonic figures again and again. This silly little Darkness cannot stop him.
RIP AND TEAR! RIP AND TEAR, UNTIL IT IS DONE!
His sheath?