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Author's Note 2: Oh wow! this chapter puts DSS @ 98th longest story on the website! I hope it's been a worthwhile ride for you all, as I've enjoyed it a lot!
It doesn't seem that Dusk said anything though... did something get deleted?
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Here is the missing text, I added it into the story as well. Very strain that it didn't copy over. Quite annoying. -.-;
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HA! Subtle backhand for the win!
Poor Rarity, everything was going so well, then Dusk called down the wrath of Murphy on the nests.
At least dusk isnt trying the ACME method of snow clearence. utelising plenty excessive amounts of Acme explosicves.
6414599 Huh! That is a pretty cool solution now that I think of it, Really creative haha.
6417098 Human's with wings / horns depending on their clan.
6421945 Well thank you very much! I really like to see people enjoy my intense focus on work building! Feel free to keep leaving feedback as you go, and if you ever have questions, feel free to ask any questions!
As for the pony / human thing, I just like to establish that they aren't the same as just normal humans like you and me. The little things like differences like herding and some small cultural differences between the three major clans are all important to me to establish. I've even recently displayed small hints of interclan racism. I want to make things realistic.
Anyways, enough ranting! Have fun and ket me knkw what you think!
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I'm just glad, you're still writing. Please keep it up!
6423053 Well thank you very much! Comments are always nice for picking up my spirits because it shows I've got your attention! I am glad you're still enjoying it and I'll do my best to get you more content soon!
6423751 Thanks, and sorry for the confusion. The intent of the jumping was to help put you into how messed up Dusk's head was, were he was slipping between memories and the present due to how badly he'd been beaten up over the course of the fight. Thus also why when he finally got some medical treatment from Fluttershy later on, he finally got better. I'm glad you are still enjoying the story!
6427649 Oh bugger! I haven't seen that in ages. What a good laugh!
:blush: Thanks. Like I said before, I love the heck out of world building, and that means putting way too much time into those kinds of little details. It's a joy to find another person who likes that aspect so much!
Yeah, I wanted to establish later characters and that was the best way to handle it, as it both addressed the two important characters, as well as Dusk's behavior/history.
AJ being forward is more related to her competitive nature, but you are right, I've found a lot of my writing ends up building the world to be very open/honest/casual about sex.
Barb? Oh Barb. That's still some ways away, but it will be fun. Trust me.
Establishing Scootaloo as the tomboy outsider was important, and I can't wait to get back to the CMC!
Dash is ... confused. She's never been interest in a stallion before Dusk, only mares. Don't worry, as you read on you'll find that has been delt with.
Easy way to end scenes because I'm a poor writer? Or proof that Barbs super attentive?! I'll never admit it!
Feel free to submit it wherever you wish, but I just don't find that I have the energy to deal with groups. I have quit half the groups I belonged to in the last six months because I had 300+ notices showing up every day and i felt guilty not going through it every day
I admit no guilt, but I do enjoy my attempts to create a somewhat unique Rarity with real problems yet also wants and needs. As for Sunset, I can't wait to get to her again.
Not to mention Dusk's exhaustion, he was nearly passing out after playing around with the letter spell.
She wears skirts and sundresses in the summer, and every coat in the house in the winter. She is currently just like Spike in the cartoon atm, a cute and bubbly little round dragon.
6428525 Regarding the groups, no idea how to submit anything that's not mine. Also, it may kinda be cheating, but I maybe, sorta, kinda, adjust the settings on a few of them so I don't get updates, just exploiting them for their popularity. Not all of them, mind you, but several.
6429081 I've been fortunate enough to have four very kind readers offer to edit for me. It's beena real learning experience and I hope I'm making fewer mistakes.
I don't mind biology questions or sociological comments or any of the like! The cutie mark is in a different location on every single pony. If you look at my character profiles you'll see it's one of the extra details that Dusk includes in his every report to Canterlot.
It is very interesting in this story that not only is the method of using a stud stallion for procreating is legal, but also very common like the herds. However, I can also assumed that it is also very frowned upon by a few, because it is basically allowing one sexually active male to impregnate multiple females with children with no guarantees of having the male become more involved with said children in the future because the females were not ones who the male choose to become future mates with and therefore bastardizing the children. I mean, Dusk is almost raising Sweetie Belle like a his daughter even though she was a product of Rarity's rape. By the way, does Sweetie know that Rarity is her mother? I can understand that Dusk is already in the motion of putting together his own herd, but it would be a shocking twist to see how his mother and father react to his decision of becoming a stud horse.
Another interesting thing is how the story is developing to where Dusk is going into sword training. That's cool but I am also hoping that during the training that he discovers that his best use of a sword is a katana. Straight swords are fine but katana training allows more skillful combat than a straight sword. Look at Afro Samurai for example. I just think it would make a shocking development for Dusk as a character to not only is his a master at magic, but also formidable with a katana.
6429525 hey again! Great to hear from you again man!
On studding: lesbian couples or female only herds (aka Derpy and Amethyst) will often hire a stud as I've very gently touched on on the story, with a legal contract detailing the foals legal status before the studding itself happens. Thus in Dusk and Amethyst's case, unless Amethyst and Derpy select to give Dusk partial custody of their foal, it would be souly their child and legal Dusk would have no clame at all. Thus why Derpy had such a long fight with Amethyst and Golde's sire, he wanted ownership of Dinky and was trying to use Golden's estate as leverage against Derpy in a legal battle. (Again, this was only briefly touched on in the story)
Swords are a unique thing. What kind he excells in, I haven't decided, but remember that he is still book horse at heart, he is never going to be a weapons master.
6429634 I bring the topic of studding up because there just seems to be a great absence of fathers lately. I do know that just recently that a few fathers have been introduced, but so far the only great father or father figures so far seem to be only Dusk and how he raises Barb. It just seems that somewhere down the road that the foals would want to know about their biological fathers. And by bringing that up, it is going to be an interesting chapter if Dusk has to come face to face with Sweetie Belle's father and the man who raped Rarity. Back on topic, it also occurs to me that Dusk seems to bring up a lot of things about his mother and brother, but rarely anything about his father and that, just to me, seems questionable about their relationship. Did they constantly argue or did something happen in the past that led up to today? Just a lot of questions.
And the idea of Dusk learning the combat of the katana was just a frsh idea i have. I've been playing a lot of Afro Samurai and now just learn that the sequel will be released in less than a week, it is just awesome and popped an idea in my head. Sure he masters magic because of the power he is gifted with and the teacher helped helped him master it, but now knowing that he is going into physical training and into sword combat, it would be a catcher if he goes through days of training with a sword with no success and having to go through many other forms of swordplay only to discover that the combat of katana, probably considered in equestria, an old, legendary, and forgotten form to where only a few can learn it seems to be what he is good at. I not saying that Dusk becomes a katana master, just that he becomes probably the only one who seems to have great skill in that swordplay and has to find certain masters to learn it from. In the past situations that he and his loved ones have gotten into, it might have occurred to him that his relying on his magic may prove useless and has to use other tactics.
And if this seems to be a little hard to grasp, it's okay, but consider the mlp season 4 finale where super powered twilight demolishes Terock in what seems to be a Super Saiyan 2 Gohan vs Perfect Cell scenario copycat. It surprised me because even though twilight became a princess with great power, she still poked her head into books and magic and logic and then goes ape shit in season 4 finale. I know this story has nothing to do with the show, but this is just example of the character that Dusk is loosely based on seems to surprise you at the unexpected moments. Bottom line: sooner or later, Dusk would have to break some bones Batman style to protect his women.
6429736 A great point on the foals. As for Dusk and Night Light? Nah, their relationship was fine, his dad was just a quiet bookworm like him, not nearly as famous as his mother.
6431278 yeah, you don't want to know how long I spent on writing up and calculating out and researching Apple farming to do that freaking chapter! It was insane, Dusk's monolog of cqlculations most of all.
not getting alerts? No clue, sorry man, that's a real pain.
6431695 For so many reasons you don't even know yet!
6432396 Hahaha! Yeah, I put a TON of effort into building up towards Gilda's arrival. Get ready for some shocking twists!
6433449 Oh my what an embarrassing goof! Thanks for catching it! I'll fix asap!
6435636 All I can say is the colour nerds have identified it as a very pale cornsilk blue. *shrugs*
Glad you enjoyed and I am happy I was able to squeeze in Pinkie and Dash bonding, even if it was in the interlude haha.
Things start getting really twisted now.
6440067 Trixie was a project I had in mind since day one. I really love what she's become. I can't wait for her return.
You only need one 'already'. Personally, I think it would be best to drop the first one.
Filthy's maneuverings don't sound as smarmey as one might expect. Also, I saw what you did with Barb.
Shame on you for missing a perfectly good "Of course you realize this means war."
Fluffing up THE nest
Surprised Pinkie didn't land on top of Dusk in a compromising position.
I much prefer a more confident Fluttershy. The joke about her big guns with the bear and her command over Barb was cute. With the way this story is going, it makes me wonder if there might be some way for Barb to hook up with Rairity and/or Fluttershy.
I find myself very relaxed watching Dusk struggle to do something, if I were in his position, would make him look like a champ in comparison.
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I guess Dusk didn't care to have two trouser snakes!