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In a war that's waged for 4 years, which side will triumph over the other: Rarijack Kingdom or Clan Flutterdash?
5744157 Rariflyjackdashpiedusk wins overall :3
5744182 ... I think you mean Rarishyppledashamenadusk.
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5744393 Now you just need to fit Maud in there, and we won't have to worry about it as much when her chapter comes around.
I enjoyed this chapter. The "date" between Shy and Dusk was adorable and I liked that small RariJack moment. I also enjoyed the negotiations between Shining and Gilda, though that makes me curious about her uncle. Likewise, I found the bots of the Princesses' past, particularly about their lovers, Polaris, and Tirek to be entertaining. I also wonder about the identity of the mystery prisoner. Dusk realizing about Lyra and Minuette's roles as agents and the dialogue between the three was very well-written, though I do wonder if the agents are lovers due to that massage. The came of Zecora was nice and serve as a proper introduction of the character. This chapter was very enjoyable and I hope the next one comes soon.
5744528 no problem! I would mention that you got the names weong. Starswirl and Cielan not Polaris and Tirek. Great to hear from you!
5744542 Actually I didn't plan to say their names, so I just skipped to the other two people mentioned.
5744555 haha. It's okay! Thanks again!
I suppose the first notable thing here was the implication of just how many prison movies you must have seen to work out all those things to look out for.
I get the premise of making Fluttershy more comfortable alone with him, but wouldn't it make more sense for a society of polygamy and bisexual females for at least one of Dusk's current mares to come along for the date? I mean, if they join the herd, then it's basically a group dating.
Zecora harvesting illegal plants? That promises to be a most... strained meeting.
I'm worried you might be a little too good at build up. I mean, god damn, Tirak is scary here. Will the result be able to hold against the hype you're setting up? Probably. Your style thus far is just that good. Though we won't know for sure for many years to come.
Lastly, Sunset?
Oh, just execute Tirek already.
There's a few things I'm now a little worried about.
1. You'll not make Dusk an Alicorn.
2. Shining Armor gets the victory of dealing with Tirek rather than Dusk.
3. Or both; Dusk won't become an Alicorn, and as a result, Shining deals with Tirek instead.
I'm one of the ones who expected Twilight's ascension to alicornhood, and didn't mind it. So, when people take it out, it alienates me a little.