Sunflower Showers is a new pegasus in Canterlot who has befriended the extremely wealthy son of a quill and sofa magnate and is taken to a mysterious restaurant. The dinner is absolutely delicious and high class, but the "dessert" takes on a role reversal that has Sunflower on edge.
Orchid isn't mine, she belongs to some anon on /mlp/ who has surprisingly little digital presence to credit.
Warnings: Vore, big pony (skip to Dessert if you just want the fun stuff without an infodump.)
Chapters (2)
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Anyway, it's pretty great seeing a fic with Orchid here! I normally don't like macro stuff at all, but for some reason I find Orchid really awesome. I think it's partially becasue alloyrabbit has done such amazing art of her. Though you may want to mention somewhere that Orchid isn't your oc.
as for the vore itself, I usually like my vore same size, but this was pretty good. I'm actually pleasantly surprised to see you doing vore period. I have a small thing for lamias, mostly as a byproduct of how much I love vore, and I have to admit that I'm disappointed that none of your lamia pone fics have vore in them. but this fic gives me hope that maybe you'll do one someday!
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Ack! Those errors. It seems a few always slip by even when I do proofread. I'll fix them; thanks for pointing them out.
Also, yeah, maybe I'll do some lamia vore. I don't like the whole snuff part about it, though; so I don't know how I'll handle that.It's the peril and hopelessness that rocks my socks.
I couldn't get past your info dump at the beginning. There's nothing wrong with a little exposition here and there but only if it's tasteful. Large quantities at once can be difficult to swallow.
For some reason I kept having weird visions of Orchid shrinking down somehow and giggling at him madly in the pool, dunno why.
Enjoyed it by the way, well done! :)
I'm gonna be honest, I didn't really enjoy this.
Now, it's nothing wrong with you, as the writing was fairly decent. But it was, in part, that vore is just not my thing.
The other part was this; when I saw it, it made me cry and I've been melancholy all week. I've also been listening to How to Save a Life repeatedly since then.
The two feelings don't exactly mesh. *shrugs*
Ah well. Best of luck to your future endeavors.
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Eh, it's alright. Different stokes for different folks.
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Me being melancholy probably didn't help either.
Heh, poor Moon Gazer.
Could this be a sequel hook?
You really nailed Orchid's personality here, great work!
Very niiice
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Orchid is a big monster-pony.
I can kinda see Sunflower showers suddenly become obsessed with orchid, maybe that's just the shipping part of me.
Hey, just wanted to say, I gave it a read, and I was impressed. You put a lot of work and thought into the background and set the scene really well. I am, however, tempted to say that it almost feels like the two chapter could be put into one and just flow into each other. As it is, though, I enjoyed it. It was a nice read.
This was a rather bizarre, but thrilling read! Really creative premise and I loved the narrator's voice.
Can't believe I hadn't read this until now.
How did he get out of her stomach?
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Teleportation spell.
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Oh! Think i would have appreciated a bit of a longer stay personally, how can a mare get a satisfied meal if her prey gets teleported out so soon? :p
good stuff, nonetheless!
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Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.